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发表于 2010-7-20 18:39:41 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

TOPIC: ISSUE159 - "The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds."
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TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-7-20 16:52:58

Is it invariably true that the human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds as the author suggested? In response to this issue, one needs to analyze it comprehensively and systematically. The assertion has merit, which I agree that machines are tools of human minds which work under control of human beings. However, I can not entirely agree with the whole assertion after close consideration. In my point of view, the author overlook the function of human being, even machines are just tools, they can also be superior to human beings in some certain situations.

First and foremost, there is no denying that machines, which created by human being's excellent brain-stream and profound knowledge, are the tools working for human and society. It is a matter of fact that, machines are always designed for a particular work, such as fright is created for cooling and preservation of fresh meal or vegetables, machines in factory
are made to help alleviate human's burden and do some dangerous or boring works replace of men. In these respects, according to the aim from human, scientists make codes, create software, import certain technology ,and ultimately combine every part together to create a new machine, so we from the process we can see, machines are just given birth to working for human under control, which means they can not surpass human on the wisdom level.

In the second place, despite the merits from the claim, the author fails to take some alternative fields which may only needs repeating the same work into account.
With the respect of mass production, doing the same process and making sure there will be less fallacies are more essential, such as in factories, it is more valuable to see that as machines by coding can only do one specific work, that is to say they can work without feeling boring which can diminish human's morale, what's more they can work more efficiently with less mistakes than human beings. Under such situations, it is reasonable to say that machines outweigh than human force on the level of repeating works.

Finally and maybe the most importantly, from my perspective, it is meaningless to judge whether human mind is superior or machines are superior, as their leading forces differ from the distinctive situations. If, the situations
more focus on repeating the same work, machines are bound to be superior due to their repeating procedures, while if the job needs more creative ideas or various methods, then human mind must surpass machines. So what human being should focus on is to strive a bright between them, combining their individual qualities for better boost
the development of our modern society. It will be a win-win game that through according to the breakthroughs which can help relief human's boring work or enhance one job's efficiency and effectiveness, scientists could feedback these new theories into machines. Thus, it is safely to say they human mind associated machines are the best avenue for human prosperity.

From the analysis above, I would like to commit to the optimal conclusion that in various situations, human mind and machines play distinctive roles and main positions, and it will more useful and profitable to combine these two force for better contributing society.

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发表于 2010-7-20 19:27:15 |只看该作者

lz的核心句子
一：they can not surpass human on the wisdom level.
二：machines outweigh than human force on the level of repeating works.
写得已经很不错了，考场上应该5分以上，不过说到第一个观点，真的在 wisdom level方面机器就不可能超越人类吗，lz若能大胆联想或许能写的更精彩。

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发表于 2010-7-21 21:23:34 |只看该作者

TOPIC: ISSUE159 - "The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds."
WORDS: 547
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-7-20 16:52:58

Is it invariably true that the human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds as the author suggested? In response to this issue, one needs to analyze it comprehensively and systematically. The assertion has merit, which I agree that machines are tools of human minds which work under control of human beings. However, I can not entirely agree with the whole assertion after close consideration. In my point of view, the author overlook the function of human being, even machines are just tools, they can also be superior to human beings in some certain situations.

First and foremost, there is no denying that machines, which created by human being's excellent brain-stream and profound knowledge, are the tools working for human and society. It is a matter of fact that, machines are always designed for a particular work, such as fright (这是？fridge？)is created for cooling and preservation of fresh meal or vegetables, machines in factory are made to help alleviate human's burden and do some dangerous or boring works replace (instead)of men. In these respects, according to the aim from human, scientists make codes, create software, import certain technology ,and ultimately combine every part together to create a new machine, so we （去掉）from the process we can see, machines are just given birth to working for human under control, which means they can not surpass human on the wisdom level.

In the second place, despite the merits from the claim, the author fails to take some alternative fields which may only needs repeating the same work into account.
With the respect of mass production, doing the same process and making sure there will be less fallacies are more essential, such as in factories, it is more valuable to see that as machines by coding can only do one specific work, that is to say they can work without feeling boring which can diminish human's morale, what's more they can work more efficiently with less mistakes than human beings. Under such situations, it is reasonable to say that machines outweigh than human force on the level of repeating works.

Finally and maybe the most importantly, from my perspective, it is meaningless to judge whether human mind is superior or machines are superior, as their leading forces differ from the distinctive situations. If, the situations more focus on repeating the same work, machines are bound to be superior due to their repeating procedures, while if the job needs more creative ideas or various methods, then human mind must surpass machines. So what human being should focus on is to strive a bright between them, combining their individual qualities for better boost the development of our modern society. It will be a win-win game that through according to the breakthroughs which can help relief human's boring work or enhance one job's efficiency and effectiveness, scientists could feedback these new theories into machines. Thus, it is safely to say they human mind associated（+with） machines are the best avenue for human prosperity.
From the analysis above, I would like to commit to the optimal conclusion that in various situations, human mind and machines play distinctive roles and main positions, and it will more useful and profitable to combine these two force for better contributing society.
论点清晰，语句流畅。有偶尔小错误，但不影响得分。
想问下同学你练了多久？现在已是气度非凡啊~

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