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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Spending time alone is the best way to relieve stress



No one can deny that people in growing number are have to face pressure and difficults nowadays. The way we solve the problem may vary as we differ from each other. A group of people may believe relieving stress alone is the better way, while others may have different views.For my part, it is hard to say that spending time alone is the best way to relieve stress, for the following reasons

Admittedly, in some cases, spending time alone is betteryou can clean your shoes, washing your clothes and doing several housework without stopping until you are tired. You also can do some exercise and take a shower alone. And yet, the spiritually barren and stress can not reduced easily only by physical activity.

Furthermore, As far as I am concerned, when I find myself in times of trouble or under the large pressure. Normally, My friends and I will go to the disco bar, accompanied by the cheerful musicwe dancesingand shouting. I drink with my friends and in the end we got drank, we talked each other heart to heart. And then, you will find that the pressure which you always try to hard to relieve are already gone.

In sum up, from what has been discussed above. We have several methods to deal with stress in modern life Thus, I firmly do not believe that spending on time alone is the best way to relieve stress. To be honest, I deem it must be more harmful when you are alone. We all know that sometimes you can not make it on your own. We need supports from friends and families.
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发表于 2010-10-4 21:37:57 |只看该作者
语言还是可以的 不过结构 思路不太清楚 主论点和分论点都比较模糊 最好写之前想清楚自己的逻辑。多花些时间构思。
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发表于 2010-10-4 21:41:59 |只看该作者
感觉结构有点混乱 思路不是很清楚 多看看构思 题目分析什么的 先练习练习 语言还是挺好的啦!分析很容易提高!加油!

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