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发表于 2010-11-30 18:59:57 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to improve the quality of education in a country is to increase teachers’ salaries.

Education is an important foundation of the development of a country. Nowadays the competition among countries embodies the competition of science and technology and the competition for the talented people. Both of them depend on a high quality of education. But the best way to improve the quality of education has to be considered circumspectly. It is not as easy as to just increase teachers’ salaries as far as I concerned. It is more complex and profound, and needs policy makers take into account many influence infectors and subsequent effect.

For many developing countries, the input of education is limited by fiscal capacity. The deficiency of money compels the local government put more attention to improve the infrastructural educational facilities, such as to build more schools and libraries, or to support poor students to finish their basic education. It is definitely of the government to construct educational system firstly, and to provide more opportunities for people to receive education. Increasing teachers’ salaries is not the most important issues. On the other hand, when the wage rates in society are general low, it is not proper to put limited money to increase teachers’ salaries. Despite that, there are still some ways to promote teachers’ qualities. The government can afford opportunities for teachers to get continual education, give teachers more respect and conduct a good tendency to beneficial to teachers, or make preferential policies to promote people to choose education as a career.

Even in some countries, the great progress has been made in advancing educational level. It is not an effective method to enhance the quality of education merely by increasing teachers’ salaries. For instance in China, we have a large education system. In many places a teacher’s pay is not low. But our quality of education is far from satisfied. Many problems in our educational system hamper our students gain fair and free development. And those problems are nothing to do with the payment of teachers. In china, the most serious issue is the inequitable educational resources’ distribution. In some metropolitan cities, top schools and universities aggregate together. Children in those places can receive better education and have more opportunities to enter into universities than those in the countryside. It is better to put all money fair to all the schools, students and teachers than to keep having a rise in teachers’ wages indiscriminately.

The development of education in a country is always in a complicated situation. So solving a concrete problem needs a concrete analysis. I don’t appreciate to believe increasing teachers’ salaries is a best way to promote the quality of education.





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Increasing teachers’ salaries is not the most important
[url=]issues[/url][MS1] . On the other hand, when the wage rates in society are general low, it is not proper to put limited money to increase teachers’ salaries. Despite that, there are still some ways to promote teachers’ qualities.
[MS1]应该是单数


我觉得写得非常好,字数也很给力, 我学习了很多。

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改好了~~~

除了开头部分,我有一些疑问以外,觉得EEEE456258 这篇文章写的很好,论述很充分,特别是句式很丰富,真是自愧不如啊,EEEE456258加油!!!

我对开头那几个句子的疑问如果你确定用法没问题的话告诉我哈~~

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.

I definitely agree that advertising should be responsible to people’s unhealthy eating habits. In modern times, our world is saturated with substantial various advertisements, which have deeply influenced people’s lifestyle especially in eating habits. In order to gain a victory of the campaign in the market, fast food chains, snack manufacturers, beverage brand holders try every means to persuade people to consume their products more and more. Most of those messages are passed by sale advertisements through powerful modern media, but majority of those products are junk foods and impact people’s traditional eating habits.

Macdonald, a representation of world fast food industry, always allures consumers with juicy big Mac. But those kinds of foods, such as pizzas, fries, are high fat and calorie and low nutrient foods. A major consequence is that increasing people become overweight and hardly keep fit. Some serious diseases will easily harm their bodies, for example the heart disease and hypertension. But in the past, vegetables and fruits are abundant in our plates, which provide useful vitamins and plant fibers necessary for people’s health. The change of our component of diet is derived from businessmen’s propaganda. The advertisements educate people abandon the tradition of eating a variety of nutrient-rich foods, and turn to junk fast foods. This new recipe of foods is one of numerous adverse effects originated by advertising.

In term of products, the advertisement plays a role as a cheat. In term of the lifestyle, advertising conduct a worse tendency in society. First of all, people more like to eat any where and at any time than before. All sorts of snacks filled in our pockets are ready to feed our appetites. We eat not because we need replenish our energies, but because advertising teach us that we should enjoy ourselves by tasting delicious snacks without limited. Nevertheless, the result is we have no appetites at the dinner time. Secondly, advertising make a fast lifestyle prevail. We are always chasing time even at meals. Without a relaxed mood, is it possible to us to get completive absorbing of foods? Furthermore, we may take ill and suffer from stomach diseases when we always have a hasty dinner under the stress. So those demeanours advertised by fast food enterprises are quiet unhealthy, and advertising made those bad demeanours become our eating habits.

Advertising penetrates thoroughly and into every part of our lives. But we should maintain our own discretion. Because advertising is the most important cause of many unhealthy lifestyles including eating habits.

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本帖最后由 EEEE456258 于 2010-12-2 14:32 编辑

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Being creative, rather than planning carefully, helps people come up with the best solution to a problem.

I quite approve of creativity plays an important role in solving problems. Being creative is an indispensible capability of people at crucial moment facing a problem. Maybe a careful plan can help people deep the understanding, intensify the arrangement and substantial the preparation for a problem, but it can not conduce an ultimate solution spontaneously most of time. No matter whether we have a plan or not, we always face unpredicted situations. What we have to do is to find a feasible method and try it, which relies heavily on wise and creativity in an emergency. On the other hand, an excessive dependence on planning beforehand will restrict people’s free performance, and maybe impede an extraordinary progress.

The most important reason we need creativity in front of a problem because we constantly face uncertainty. Uncertainty means we can not anticipate and prepare well everything in advance. Uncertainty demands our concrete analysis and proper actions timely without the direction of plans. So being creative gives us abilities to jump out the plan, the old way and the negative experience. We need use new thoughts to come up with the best way out of the trouble.

For example, in business, a company invariably makes purchasing, production and marketing plans of next year, also makes a budget. Those plans are requested to strictly comply with in order to achieve a predefined revenue goal and maintain company’s continuous development. However, changes are too quick that make the plans behind. A real leader of a company needs a strategic mind, and constantly focus on internal renovation, and is ready to meet the new challenges from outside anytime. A strategic mind requires standing on high and made particular decisions to concrete and critical problems, which all need creativity. Those decisions not only include the methods to get rid of a dilemma but also include catching a fleeting opportunity. A person who is confined by plans can not become an outstanding leader. Another similar example is military leaders. That the skills of a commander always seems as an art demonstrate creativity is high recommended in war.

Admittedly, plans are necessary, but are secondary to achieve a solution to a problem. Creativity can help people to find the best way to solve problems. So improve our ability of creativity is quite important in our life.

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发表于 2010-12-2 19:32:59 |只看该作者
改好了,红字部分是我学习的,自动忽视即可^_^
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TOEFL is a game

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发表于 2010-12-3 09:34:41 |只看该作者
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12,2  改好嘞~^ ^
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发表于 2010-12-3 17:56:58 |只看该作者
我把12,2号的贴出来了~~嘿嘿,不好意思哦,怎么都说我的文件打不开呢?我用的是07版的

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发表于 2010-12-3 19:37:43 |只看该作者
不好意思发晚了呢,语言很不错的,加油哈!~
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改好了
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ETS, you must have a pain in your balls.

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本帖最后由 EEEE456258 于 2010-12-3 21:52 编辑

12.03
Do you agree with the following statement? Children should only study or play and don’t have to do household chores.

In china, parents are confined to have one child under the national birth policy from decades ago. The only child of a family then is cherished like jewelry of parents and grandparents. Many parents think that children should only study or play. It is not necessary to allocate some household chores to them. Those parents indeed should not be blamed for spoiling their kid, but excessively doting on them may be disadvantageous to their growth. So my advice, that is to offer some simple household chores to children, may prove better than the opposition.

First of all, a child is also a substantive member of a family. It is essential to make he/she feel playing an important role on family affairs, that is to say to commit a responsibility to the family. Therefore, giving a chance to the child to do some helpful things for his\her parents can arouse his\her feelings of belongings. It likes these familiar scenes we can see between a mother and a son. A mother always encourages her son with the words: your little man, you will protect your mum, won’t you? The mother doesn’t really need a little boy’s protection. However, it is effective to make the little boy become strong and responsible immediately. Similarly, doing some household chores make children think him/her being needed and gain achievement. That promotes the attachment of a family.

Second, to let children do some house works is beneficial to their independent lives in the future. They need to learn some basic life skills, such as making some food, washing their clothes, cleaning the house, and so on. When they train those everyday, they will not only acquire the skills but also gradually foster a good manner to arrange things by themselves. With the growth of the age, they will easily form an independent mind and a strong character. An independent character is elemental for their surviving in modern society.

Finally, labor is a useful way to train children’s practical ability. The comprehensive ability of a person comprises the abilities of theory and practice. Knowledge in books needs be trained by practice. Those house works can give them experience from life, and let them learn different things from their class.

In summary, giving some household chores to children is not harmful to their happy childhood, and will give them a better beginning as an adult.

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已下载,明天改
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改好了,谢谢你的修改,很细心,启发很大,每一处几乎都可以说是我的硬伤,希望以后还能互改~~
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12.07
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.

Ordinarily, people want to get a good job with a high salary, more vacation time, not too much burden, and more freedom. But it is always far from satisfied when you find a job that can offer you some conveniences but make you lose the others. The common case is you should devote more time to gain a higher payment, or give up some incomes to trade space for private time. The choice between a job with more salaries but less spare time and the counterpart may be worthy to consider seriously. In my opinion, a more spare time job may be better than the opposition.

First of all, too much work has been proved bad for a healthy life. We need enough time to rest, not only it is beneficial to replenish our energy, but also give us an opportunity to renew our mind. A long period working will cause stress and physical discomfort. With the extension of the work time, overuse of our mind and body may make us digress, be unable to concentrate, and become forgettable. Our mental condition also becomes unstable. We are easy to get angry and depress. That is detrimental to the health and disadvantageous to the work itself. Having a vacation of your. To take some time to put the work behind and do some entertainments may make the things different. When you came back to work after a vocation, you may find troubles are not such trouble and people are apt to communicate and understand each other. As the Chinese saying goes, a better rest brings a better work.

Secondly, work doesn’t mean a whole life. We have parents, friends, and lovers. Many related persons definitely need us pay attention to. Before long, we will built a new family and have babies. Our affections in the family need be tied more. We are supposed to become the model they can appreciate and rely on. So we really should pay more time staying with our family members, taking care of them, communicating with them and giving support to them as they always do to you. So don’t ignore your family no matter how much you want to chase your career.

Finally, the way of our life to realize ourselves should not be confined merely in a job. We should diversify our living style. We should have some hobbies at home, or travel out to the world. It is advantageous to us to recognize and understand ourselves deeply. With experiences out of a job, we may find our potential talent, and know what is really we like to do and wealthy to do. That is a new meaning of life in front of us, which may help us achieve an ultimate goal of our life we always want to gain.

For the reasons above I therefore agree that we should choose a job with more vacation time. Although the payment is the goal of work, it is not of life. And a job is the means of life but not the meaning of it.

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