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发表于 2003-7-7 17:45:36 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

“Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress”

The speaker claims that mistakes are the unavoidable experience on our way to discovery or progress. Just like the old Chinese saying, ”failure is the mother of achievement”. But is it true that mistake is the ONLY way to discovery and progress? I don’t think so.

Admittedly, in some cases it is the mistakes that lead to the ultimate discovery or progress. The most typical example is Galileo’s famous experiment took on the Leaning Tower Of Pisa. Before Galileo, people had been admitting Aristotle’s point that the heavier an object was, the faster it fell down to the ground. But Galileo didn’t think so. He believed that the velocity of an object falling to the ground had no business to do with the weight. And he did the experiment on the tower to prove his point of view. Thus a new discovery of “这里不知道怎么说，就是关于自由落体的” was born through the mistake made by Aristotle.

But when it comes to the word “only”, things become too absolute. Mistakes do lead to discovery or progress, but a great deal of other situations can also make progress, for example, an inspiration aroused by an unexpected phenomenon or a clear destination, careful study and precise calculation can make great discovery and progress too.

Doubtlessly, inspiration is a key element to discovery. Maybe you have been thinking about a problem for quite a long time but achieved nothing, and then accidentally, some ordinary matter that happened every day appears, which lighted your inspiration showing you the way to the right solution. Watt’s kettle, Newton’s apple and the invention of microwave oven are all this kind of discovery. And I also have the similar experiences. When I was in junior middle school, I was once pondering over a very hard geometry problem for a whole day but reached no progress at all. Then during the night when I was sleeping, the right solution just came into my dream! I jumped up and wrote it down. So, you can see that actually inspiration is a way to progress too.

Another approach to discovery and progress is thorough and detailed plans. For example, the designing, engineering and launching of a rocket permits no mistake – one mistake may lead to the loss of several lives, let alone a good deal of money. Thus careful preparing work is of great importance in such cases like detailed plans, precise calculation and the solutions to any occasion unexpected to happen.（以上这句话自己也觉得不顺，但不知道怎么改） Another example is the invention of atomic bomb. There can’t be any large –scale experiment for this kind of dangerous thing; the experiment have to be taken in the deep desert and the dweller even living far away from it should be warned beforehand for the radiation really threatens. It is indeed an effort-taking job. The whole process also permits no mistakes. But the success of developing an atomic bomb is a huge progress in human history.

To sum up, it is true that mistakes can bring discovery and progress to us, but to say only mistakes can do it for us appears one-sided. As I said, there’re other occasions that help us stepping forward – a slight flash that light up the flame of our thought, or the hard work behind those accurate numbers of engineering. That is to say, we should change this sentence into: “through mistakes…” or “not only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress.”

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发表于 2003-7-8 05:51:18 |只看该作者

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板凳

发表于 2003-7-8 23:01:14 |只看该作者

先抱怨一下

我好不容易写完，提交时，我们学校的网络提示我没有登陆，sigh! 这个破网络，总是莫名其妙的掉线，我只好重新来过

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发表于 2003-7-8 23:13:20 |只看该作者

我觉得你的语言很好，能吸引读者读下去，比如用了很多问句，我很喜欢这种方式
但我觉得你始终停留在一个层次上论述，就是“错误可以得到科学发现，但不是only，很多其它因素会促使科学发展，如预料不到的发现，明确的目标，认真的研究，精确的计算”
我想应该更深一部的论证一下为什么错误会导致科学成果，是因为人类认识世界的局限性，科学总是不完善的，甚至错误的，人们总在不断完善自己的知识，不断接近真理，G和A的例子很恰当
错误的目的是不再犯同样的错误，像你所说，很多试验是不能出错的

结合你的作文，我写了个提纲：
错误导致科学发现或进步只是表面现象，人们应注重的是明确的目标，认真的研究，精确的计算
1。由于人类认识世界的局限性，科学总是不完善的，甚至错误的，人们总在不断完善自己的知识，不断接近真理。所以看起来很多发现从错误中得来，举G和A的例子
2。人们应该从错误中得到经验，而减少错误，很多试验是不能出错的，举航天飞机和核试验的例子，人们肯定要做大量的工作保证最后的万无一失
3。人们应注重的是明确的目标，认真的研究，精确的计算，这些才是得到发现和进步的前提

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