[优秀习作] issue173 关于originality [复制链接]

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发表于 2003-7-17 23:18:28 |只看该作者

yes, the sentence structure is very clear and very easy to read.
Indeed, I am not clear how to organise both complicated structure and simple one. So I asked several native speakers who are studying humanities for PhD or MBA students. Most of them suggested that use complicated and simply structure together. i.e. write in a simply way, but sometimes use complicated sentence, which you are sure how to use it.

still I suggested that you should be care about the grammatical mistakes when you write the essay, or after finish every essay, check those mistakes three times. If you lose your mark on this matter, it will be a pity, I think.

For instance the first para:
It is (a) kind of fallacy to think that originality does not mean thinking something never thought before and consequently to (erase "to") conclude that it means to (erase "to" or "to put") putting old ideas together in new ways. First of all, originality covers two kinds of thinking: one requires ideas that have never thought before while the other does not. Secondly, both two kinds of originality call for creative thinking, which is the soul of originality. Consequently(you have used once, maybe try"as a result"), referring to the question of whether putting old thing ideas together is original or not, one should seek the soul of originality, namely the creative thinking, behind the apparent form and structure.

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发表于 2003-7-17 23:29:04 |只看该作者

解释一下，
（1）
It is (a) kind of fallacy to think that......
比如说：
I am kind of hungry.
She kind of hoped to be invited.
我原本是想表示“多多少少有一点”的意思，
加个‘a’不是成了“一种”了？

（2）
It is (a) kind of fallacy to think that originality does not mean thinking something never thought before and consequently to (erase "to") conclude that it means to (erase "to" or "to put") putting old ideas together in new ways.
to conclude是和前面的to think对应的部分。
it is (a) kind of fallcay to think......and (consequently) to conclude.....

life is unpredictable.

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