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本帖最后由 sd1053774 于 2011-11-8 22:21 编辑

大家好，希望大家多提批评的意见哈。

以后我就把文章发在这里了。方便大家下载。

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sd 你的文章我已改好。。。
這個題目我已寫過，所以就寫了一下1016考試那天的題目。。。
也希望得到你的評價哦。。。https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1309557-2-1.html
希望我們共同進步，幹掉小T！！！

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10月18日，独立
Do you agree that the government should support the scientific research even there's no practical use?

Science plays a crucial role in improving our lives. It has changed our life styles and made them more convenient. All improvements the science has made should be attributed to the success of scientific researches which come from the results of a large number of them, including all ones no matter they have practical uses or not. I believe the government should support those scientific researches which haven’t practical use.

First of all, practical use of many scientific successes usually cannot be found at the beginning of the research. For instance, the electricity, when it was invented, might somewhat scare people because it could hurt them. And since the transportation of it was seemed as an unbridgeable problem to keep it from wide use, it was thought as no practical use. But anyone at that time who can imagine that it has become into the main energy resource of the world now? The convenience comes with it is beyond the imagination of people in the past. If the government stopped supporting the scientific researches which currently seems no practical use, the practical use that behind them would never be discovered to improve our lives.

Besides the potential practical use exists in scientific research, the more serious thing is the consideration of practical use will confine scientists' thought and keep them from success. We cannot even do usual things right if there are many confinements. Take writing for example, if a writer always keep in mind of writing a popular book, he/she is most likely cannot to write a popular book. Because the thought of what makes a popular book has limited his/her mind. If he/she cannot stop thinking if they fit the "standard" of popular when some ideas came into his/her mind, the mind cannot be wide open, and the article could not be classic. Likewise, scientists might not make any attainment when their minds are confined by a limitation: practical use of the scientific research.

Finally, even though there is no obvious practical use of a scientific research, the results of it might be helpful for the success of other researches that have practical use. Everything in the universe is connected with each others. Similarly, connections exist in scientific researches. The development of stream engine had prompted the invention of train; electricity had made bulb available for all people. Internal connections are there between those scientific researches. Therefore, the government should support scientific research even there is no obvious practical use of it.

In a word, it is rather superficial to simply judge whether a scientific research needs support by its current promising practical use. The government should make a more comprehensive investigation on it before making a conclusion that it should not be supported.

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Science plays a crucial role in improving our lives. It has changed our life styles and made them more convenient. All improvements the science has made should be attributed to the success of scientific researches which come from the results of a large number of them, including all ones no matter they have practical uses or not. I believe the government should support those scientific researches which haven’t practical use.（don't have). y: w% U, W6 U" b% y. c, r! ?! }: A. H
First of all, practical use of many scientific successes usually cannot be found at the beginning of the research. For instance, the electricity, when it was invented, might somewhat scare people because it could hurt them. And since the transportation of it was seemed as an unbridgeable problem to keep it from wide use, it was thought as no practical use. But anyone at that time who can imagine that it has become into the main energy resource of the world now? The convenience comes with it is beyond the imagination of people in the past. If the government stopped supporting the scientific researches which currently seems no practical use, the practical use that behind them would never be discovered to improve our lives.7 Y" f$ V& l( h& ?) ~# M: W& f

3 P$ p! [! i- x' ~% pBesides the potential practical use exists in scientific research, the more serious thing is the consideration of practical use will confine scientists' thought and keep them from success. We cannot even do usual things right if there are many confinements. Take writing for example, if a writer always keep in mind of writing a popular book, he/she is most likely cannot to write a popular book(病句）. Because the thought of what makes a popular book has limited his/her mind. If he/she cannot stop thinking if they fit the "standard" of popular when some ideas came into his/her mind, the mind cannot be wide open, and the article could not be classic. Likewise, scientists might not make any attainment when their minds are confined by a limitation: practical use of the scientific research.. S: [7 S' |1 i- R) W
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Finally, even though there is no obvious practical use of a scientific research, the results of it might be helpful for the success of other researches that have practical use. Everything in the universe is connected with each others. Similarly, connections exist in scientific researches. The development of stream engine had prompted the invention of train; electricity had made bulb available for all people. Internal connections are there between those scientific researches. Therefore, the government should support scientific research even there is no obvious practical use of it.2 j0 L1 {- ?5 \+ h
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In a word, it is rather superficial to simply judge whether a scientific research needs support by its current promising practical use. The government should make a more comprehensive investigation on it before making a conclusion that it should not be supported

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发表于 2011-10-19 15:55:12 |只看该作者

例子和论据都很好

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发表于 2011-10-19 16:43:24 |只看该作者

Science plays a crucial role in improving our lives. It has changed our life styles and made them more convenient. All improvements the science has made should be attributed to the success of scientific researches which come from the results of a large number of them, including all ones no matter they have practical uses or not. I believe the government should support those scientific researches which haven’t practical use.% ~4 M! l8 J" S, f. h
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First of all, practical use of many scientific successes usually cannot be found at the beginning of the research. For instance, the electricity, when it was invented, might somewhat scare people because it could hurt them. And since the transportation of it was seemed as an unbridgeable problem to keep it from wide use, it was thought as no practical use. (But anyone at that time who can imagine that it has become into the main energy resource of the world now?) Who would be able to imagine at that time that it would become the main energy resource of the world?
The convenience comes with it is beyond the imagination of [people]anyone in the past. If the government stopped supporting the scientific researches which currently seems no practical use, the practical use that behind them would never be discovered to improve our lives.
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# _' ]( D g1 V# L) I6 ~9 YBesides the potential practical use exists in scientific research, the more serious thing is the consideration of practical use will confine scientists' thought and keep them from success. We cannot even do usual things right if there are many confinements. Take writing for example, if a writer always keep in mind of writing a popular book, he/she [is]删 most likely cannot [to]删 write a popular book. Because the thought of what makes a popular book has limited his/her mind. If he/she cannot stop thinking if they fit the "standard" of popular when some ideas came into his/her mind, [the] their mind cannot be [wide]widely 副词修饰形容词open, and the article could not be classic. Likewise, scientists might not make any attainment when their minds are confined by a limitation: practical use of the scientific research.这段例子写得有点乱丫~想想怎么写清楚些撒~

Finally, even though there is no obvious practical use of a scientific research, the results of it might be helpful for the success of other researches that have practical use. Everything in the universe is connected with each others. Similarly, connections exist in scientific researches. The development of stream engine had prompted the invention of train; electricity had made bulb available for all people. Internal connections are there between those scientific researches. Therefore, the government should support scientific research even there is no obvious practical use of it.
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In a word, it is rather superficial to [simply]删 judge whether a scientific research needs support simply by its current promising practical use. The government should make a more comprehensive investigation on it before making [a]the conclusion that it should not be supported.
写得不错啊~继续加油~

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发表于 2011-10-19 23:00:53 |只看该作者

Generally, nobody wants to be treated impolitely by anyone. Being polite is essential to build a harmonious working environment and a healthy relationship between friends and families. Being impolite to others will damage all of that. People shouldn't ever be impolite to other ones.

Impoliteness will destroy the working atmosphere. Usually, how do other people treat you depends, to a large extent, on the way you treat them. That means if you treat them politely, them （they）will be polite to you, and vice versa. If one person is impolite to the second one（这种表达不好）, the second one will feel bad, and he/she probably would be impolite to the third one or the forth one. This is a cycle of impoliteness, and it will become worse and worse after it once come（comes） out. Everyone in the cycle will be uncomfortable and feel angry may be（放得位置不对如果是MAYBE的话应该放在feel前面）. The cycle is not only(is) harmful for（to） the productivity of that group, it （but）also make(s) people leave and damage the whole group. If the group is a part of company, the company will suffer from a large economic loss or even break down.

Be(being) impolite to friends or family will hurt them and weaken the relationship with them. Unlike people from work place, family and friends are these ones who are really care about us. What they have said or done to us are for our good, at least in their sight those things are good for us. Whatever whether those things actually are good for us or not(这句话不太对), if we are impolite to them, it will break their hearts. No matter how serious the damage is, when they try to help us next time, there will be a concern in their mind about whether we will accept their help or whether we will be rude to them. Those are the family and close friends would do. To some normal friends, they might just leave us and never do some help again.

Indeed, sometimes there are some people who will constantly bore you if you treat them too gently. Like the marketing seller（表达不对，可以接到前一句变成such as ）, they will never stop talking with you if you allow them to or do not refuse them definitely. Then, somebody might argue that we should be impolite to those people. But in my opinion, it is that we have not made our refusing statement to be totally understood by the marketing seller failed to stop them from talking to us, not treating them politely. Therefore, the important thing is making our selves clear to those people who don't we want to talk with rather than being impolite to them.

In general, being polite with others is essential to make a good working environment and to build a perfect relationship with family members and friends. Even when we want to refuse someone, we could do it politely. Thus, I totally agree with the assertion that we should never be impolite to another person.

论证的很充分但是要注意语法和句子表达字数这么多30分钟写不完吧？？
我这个我一直没有找到上传附件的有的用word 改完了划了这里显示不出来。。

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发表于 2011-10-20 08:12:06 |只看该作者

7# 南瓜0729
要发够20个帖子就可以附件了。去水版吧

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发表于 2011-10-20 20:18:24 |只看该作者

改好了！

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发表于 2011-10-22 21:32:35 |只看该作者

10.22已更新

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发表于 2011-10-23 09:10:03 |只看该作者

已经改好~~不妥之处还请多多包涵，下面是我的作文贴~~已经上传，O(∩_∩)O谢谢https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1232143&pid=1775536243&page=4&extra=#pid1775536243

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发表于 2011-10-24 20:01:58 |只看该作者

24综合 tpo19
The lecture is talking about what the buzzer really do by a buzzer. He said that what the reading material stated about the buzzer is very different or kind of inaccurate when compared to what happened for real.

First, buzzers in fact are telling the truth when they talking about a product. Indeed, they are paid to say something good about a product, but they are not lie. The buzzers are acutually actually those people who really think that product is good from their experience. They have used that product and are not the usual advertisers who are paid for tell a lie.

Second, consumers are not easily to trust on the buzzers. They are willing to ask many questions before making decisions on whether purchase the product or not. Thus, the buzzers have to obtain a full understanding of that product to cope with the long questions that consumers had made.

Finally, after customers have tried the good product which advised by the buzzers, they will have more trust on the buzzers. The product that the buzzers are suggested to buy is the one which they have tried by them selvesthemselves and really think it is a good product. So if consumers buy it and experience it by their own, they might think the buzzers are worth to trust on instead of consider them as dishonest people.

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