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发表于 2012-1-9 21:23:47 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

求猛拍~ 谢谢~

共同进步是目标啊>~<

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发表于 2012-1-9 21:34:12 |只看该作者

心中很忐忑啊~
1月9日 101211NA  Which would you prefer, Working 3 days a week with long hours or working 5 days a week with short hours?

Do you feel attractive if a company provides employees with a form of policy on working 3 days per week with long hours as an alternative to the regular five-day working time? Do not feel too exciting--long-hours working time per day isn't perfect either. In my view of point, the irregular working way is unable to ensure efficiency during working and maintain person's health. My preference, therefore, is five-day work.
Firstly, the core reason to support the five-day schedule is due to the working efficiency based on the physical strength and mental vigor which exists limitation. To an employee, errors occurred in work are inevitable. And the frequency and extent of mistakes are due in part to the contribution of concentration which gradually declines with extending the working hours. Thus the high rate of inaccuracy or blunders in work may as the result of compressing the amount of work from five days into three days and extending the working hours in these three days. Taking the experience from my part-time job as an example, once because of suddenly short hand I was required to continuously work 12 hours as a waitress in a family restaurant. And especially in the last two working hours, the strong sense of out of energy led to  much more blunders occurred such as mixed the first table's order with the sixth's, miscalculated bills and so on forth.
Besides, another appeal of the five-day schedule is its relatively benefit of health: it is easier for a person to balance his or her time and energy in working and rest, and there is a litter danger that the healthy conditions of employees are gradually impaired by the irregular life habit or overloaded work at a time, as it is there are some opposite examples happened by my side.  My roommate Daisy, for instance, is a free interior designer accustomed to spend three days to accomplish amount of five-day's work. To retain quantity and quality, during her working days she satisfies her dining and sleeping time, alone in room while depending on assorted of nutritious substances to refresh her mind. After repeating this pattern several times, her stomach got pain at intervals and according to doctor’s assessment this symptom would become worsen if she insists on that kind of living way.
Of course not all the aspects of five-day schedule prove good ones for the employees. One advantage of three-day schedule, apparently, is it offers a longer integrated time to employees who are able to enjoy a more flexible holiday every week. Therefore some, especially engaged as a job itself with low-intensity requirement, will probably consider such benefit as an irresistible attraction.
By and large, in my perspective the policy of working five days a week with short time is overwhelming benefits for considering the aspects of efficiency and health. But the question of whether approves me or not, is contingent on an individual's specific surroundings and the properties of occupation.

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发表于 2012-1-10 01:32:51 |只看该作者

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... ghlight=&page=2
晚了，时差党睡过头了，不好意思

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发表于 2012-1-10 01:50:32 |只看该作者

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力求两个月二战飞跃

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发表于 2012-1-10 21:47:35 |只看该作者

猛拍吧~
1月10日 101105NA  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Spending money on traveling or vacation is better than saving money for future.
Yet doubtlessly one of the ultimate goals of making more money is to enjoy the luxurious traveling or vacation, it is immature to approve a statement that spending money on that is better than saving money for future. This point is imprudent and irresponsible. Imprudent, because it underestimates the impact and frequency of unexpected accidents in life. Irresponsible, because those who hold such point are too indulge into currently happy to ignoring the importance of retaining long-term stability of life.
   The core purpose of saving money for future is a sort of guarantee: sufficient money available for us to countervail any negative impacts under any predicaments. In fact, more suddenly than almost anyone assumed, our lives has already been collapsed by an unexpected accident such as the whole of house destroyed by a natural disaster, or one of your family member or yourself diagnosed as having a kind of serious disease. At this time, the fund that deposited in the past is functioning beyond imaging. In last year, for instance, my father was unexpectedly informed the immediate need for receiving a heart bypass surgery, the total cost of which was almost equal to the amount of disposable income of a whole year for my family. Fortunately, since my parents are accustomed to deposit money in bank, rather than spending large portion of incomes on traveling or vacation, my father's surgery and his recovering was carried on smoothly without any barriers in respect of monetary. So there are ways in which saving money for future wields big help.
   Besides, another primary reason of saving money is up to the job of safeguarding the long-term stability of life.  Some, supposed that only if have been engaged as a well-paid job, are stable enough to carry on their comfortable lives and vacations without the need for investment in assured future. In theory, that plausibly makes sense. But in practice, not least under currently such swinging economy situation, the climate is changing quickly and no one could predict when he or she has to face unemployment and after that how long could be employed again. It must be a sort of big relief if one is aware of having sufficient deposits to retain the normal standard of living at that time. What's more, under such condition the best response to that is to switch one's mind, and to grasp this jeopardy as an opportunity to improve one's own value by receiving further education or retraining, if one has saved enough money. Therefore the funds that deposited in past would not only conduce to relieve unemployed person's stress from affording life necessities, but also be used for financing the training of honing professional skills.
   By and large, in my perspective it is a wiser choice to save money for future according to what mentioned above.

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发表于 2012-1-10 21:56:23 |只看该作者

开头很赞啊～

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发表于 2012-1-10 23:20:14 |只看该作者

谢谢~
被表扬了好开心啊~
仿的是economist 上的句式~

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发表于 2012-1-10 23:25:37 |只看该作者

结构很赞～不过too to那里有点问题～

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发表于 2012-1-11 08:23:27 |只看该作者

LZ的essay水平很高啊，很多高级词汇，菜鸟学习了。
个人感觉，有些句子写得有点长，不知道拆开一些会不会好点。

什么让我一直努力至今？神。

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发表于 2012-1-11 09:33:52 |只看该作者

写的时候我也觉得句子有点长...然后拆开吧就又觉得是不是有点过于重复啰嗦了....然后就很纠结啊.....

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发表于 2012-1-11 12:59:22 |只看该作者

LZ论证地超好

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发表于 2012-1-12 22:33:12 |只看该作者

本帖最后由柠檬阿猪于 2012-1-12 22:42 编辑

被表扬了很高兴但也真心觉得压力好大啊啊。。。。其是我也就是跟着economist 上仿啊。。。。

1月12日 100130NA Do you agree that the government should support the scientific research even it has no practical use.

Unlike the investment in financial markets, profits or losses to be predicable within a definite period, no one could foresee the consequences of a scientific research or experiment. And the benefits of that brought in may not show immediately as well as may include to help comprehend the world or bolster the image of a nation. Therefore, it is doubtlessly to give a thumbs-up sigh to that the government should support the scientific research even it has no practical use.

Firstly, the core reason to approve this statement is the subsequent influence of a scientific research is unpredictable. In fact, numerous results in science are mistreated as meaningless discoveries at first, and then after a long period improvement of relative theories and technology, finally made a name as a great breakthrough in human history. A typical example is the case of silicon, which was discovered by a Swedish chemist barely as an element in the early of nineteenth, but after almost two centuries continuous research, eventually now it is widespread in our lives, such as applied in integrated circuit of laptops or optical fiber connecting Internet. Hence the government should finance the scientific researches, especially theoretical ones which less gain investment funds from those profit-oriented companies.

Besides, another purpose of scientific researches, except for practical use, facilitates us to comprehend this world at a more appropriate and accurate angle. The belief of god created the world has been replaced by the big bang theory; the puzzle of where human beings come from has been explained by Darwin's theory of evolution. Most important, those shifts of human's minds and faiths have been accumulated little by little even continuous several generations and finally have turned our society on its head, from darkness Middle Ages into brilliant modern era. Therefore, the government should stand on a more broadly view to determine whether subsidize the scientific research rather than be blinded by the short-sightedness.

Finally, as the by-product yield by the cutting-edge scientific researches is up to the job of propping up the image of a powerful nation, it is motivated enough for government to support those researches even which are far ahead of the cognition of the public and the practical use.

By and large, in my perspective the government has no reason not to support the scientific research as what mentioned above.

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发表于 2012-1-13 01:08:54 |只看该作者

原来高手在这里，看完之后，羡慕嫉妒恨。。。。。。。。。求赐教......

写的太好，水平差距太大，修改意见仅供参考。。。。

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发表于 2012-1-16 13:17:40 |只看该作者

挣扎了很久写综合的结构到底是跟着阅读的论点走还是跟着听力的论点走啊....最后还是跟着阅读的了...但心里很没底啊....... 求指点求猛拍啊......
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The research investigated by a company found the result of a group of people as a team to work is not effective and advantages as the reading material mentioned.
Firstly, the professor refuses what the reading material argues that a group of people as a team could accomplish a work better because they are benefit from their different professions. In fact, according to the research of the company, many team-members are free-riders, who contribute nothing to the work.
Secondly, the reading material points out when meet problems the team can solve them by a quicker and more creative way. The professor disagrees with that statement. One reason is the team will take too much time to reach an agreement due to that a team contains many people whose thoughts are different from one to another. Another reason is due to the creative ideas might be forced dropped if the influential person in a team doesn't approve it.
Finally, the professor disapprove of the argument in reading material that there are a better reward for members of a team and a better chance to every member "shine", because the reading material neglects some circumstances. Especially if the influential person in the team proves a convincing suggestion which may lead the whole group ignore the risks which point out by some less influential members, but finally, if this suggestion doesn't work or lead the group to wrong direction, the blame is for the whole of the group members even those who point out the weakness part of that suggestion.

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