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The lecturer rejected all the three explanations in the reading passage about the probable usage of the great houses in Chaco Canyon.

First, the writer proposes that the Chaco structures were purely residential, however, as the lecturer sees it, this theory is just untenable. Although the outside look of the "great houses" do look like "apartment buildings" at Taos, New Mexico, the inside of the houses look nothing like a residential place. So few fireplaces, which are essential for residents to make meals, are found in the great houses that they could hardly serve as a place for people to live in.

In addition, the writer also supposes that the Chaco structures might used to be food storage place, especially for grain maize. However, the lecturer contends that this supposition sounds plausible but no cogent evidence could support it. From all the excavations at the site, no trace of grain maize or something that looks like a grain maize container were found. The lecturer casts doubt on this theory by questioning that why there isn't any trace of the grain maize or its container if the structures have been used to store food supplies?

Finally, the third theory proposed by the writer that the structures were used as ceremonial centers is also opposed by the lecturer. The lecturer argues that there are plenty of sand and stones found from the excavations of the mound, which are mostly likely to be trashes disposed by the workers who build the structures. There lies a great possibility that the mound is only a big trash field into which people littered their food and building trashes. So the surprisingly large number of broken pots are more likely to be trashes, rather than sufficient evidence for the "ceremony theory".

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Agree:
1. More and more people stress on personal enjoyment and waste time on it.
2. Most of the times, the right thing people should do is not the one they like to do. It's absolutely unrealistic to think that we can be successful in the long run by only doing what we enjoy doing.
Disagree:
1. Things people like to do does not necessarily have to be personal enjoyment. Doing some playful things for relaxation and working on something that people are interested in are two different kinds of things.
2. it's hard to define what are the things that people should do and what are not. Personally, I agree with the idea that the right thing you should do is the first thing you like to do. Every one has his own talent. The thing that is the necessary first for others, might be the least thing you should do in terms of your talent.
3. Lots of people are fighting for the well-being of themselves and their families.
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In the first place, indeed, more and more people don't bother to put up with the temptation of personal enjoyment and waste too much time on it. Nowadays, ever-increasing forms of enjoyment are available, such as games online, interesting TV series, and party in the KTV. It's getting easier for people to get distracted from their formal work and duty, and it's even easier to get obsessed and spend more and more time on those enjoyment. Lots of students in university like to play computer games in the dorm. They even skip their classes for playing all day long. Frank speaking I used to be one of them. But I finally realized that wasting time on games, or other seemingly enjoyable things, without a conscious control will eventually bring feelings and outcomes just opposite to enjoyable, say, unhealthiness, lassitude, lost of opportunity and the like. It will always be appropriate to remind your game-addicted roommate it's time to stop wasting time on games.

In addition, the right thing people should do, most of the times, is not the one they like to do, but the one they are not good at or eager to do. It's absolutely unrealistic to think that we can be successful in the long run by only doing what we enjoy doing. Simply take the students in primary schools for instance. As for a child in that age, study is hardly as enjoyable as playing games. To spend lots of time staying at home and doing the insipid homeworks is definitely the least thing they want to do. Nevertheless, it's a necessary for them to do it because a basic knowledge is indispensable for them to live in a such developed era. After becoming adults, they'll be grateful for those suffering in study keeping them from something more miserable, ignorance.

Last but not least, when it comes to career, the bigger scope of "thing", I advocate the idea that the right thing you should do is the first thing you like to do. Every one has his own talent. In terms of your talent, the first necessary thing for others, might be the last for you. Keeping a good image seems like a necessity for you if you are a commercial man. See Steven Jobs, who always walks barefoot and park his car in a place only for the disabled. Black sweater, jeans and sneakers are his suit and tie. He did focus and only focus on the things he's interested in, making innovations and breaking stereotypes, or as he puts, changing the world. And he did. So, the right thing, or more exactly the right career, is not anything others think to be necessary or decent for you, but the one thing you love to do from within.

Minhong Yu, the president of the New Oriental, has said that I will do what I love to do, even if I'll starve to death for it. I can't agree more. With regard to a career in the long run, one should follow his heart, doing the very thing he love to do. Of course, in the course of pursuing one's career, uncountable distractions are in the road. As for this, one should be wise to keep away from all the temporal enjoyments and pursue the ultimate one.

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发表于 2013-10-23 20:09:12 |只看该作者

当性别不定的时候, 比如主语是everyone, 后面的代词简单地用his就行么? 还是每次都要his or her.
俞敏洪的话翻译得感觉有些渣: 我就做我自己喜欢的事情，哪怕我饿死我也要做.

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发表于 2013-10-23 21:49:19 |只看该作者

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发表于 2013-10-24 09:21:15 |只看该作者

luketc3580 发表于 2013-10-23 21:49
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on persona ...

谢谢耐心读完哈!
我的第一段就是说"的确越来越多的人把时间花在娱乐上, 越来越多的娱乐方式让人们很容易从工作上分心", 我觉得已经表达观点了
然后题目中相当于把personal enjoyment和things people like to do画上了等号, 与things people should do画上了不等号, 这个观点我在第二段进行的说明, 也是支持的态度. "往往人们应该做的并不是他们喜欢的"
第三段发散了一下, 当话题扩大到career的时候, 就应该支持大家做自己喜欢做的事情.
可能最后扣题扣得不紧?