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问大家个问题，各位G友是怎么提高写作速度的，我感觉半小时写完这种难度的文章没有半年的全新全意的锻炼是不可能的任务吧，难道都是英文专业的大咖吗？
我的最大问题就是速度，有思路虽然不算快，但自认为还算logic，就是有东西可写，但是就是表达跟不上，大量的时间浪费到表达上，有时候一个句子要想7,8分钟才能写出来，特别是那种中西表达差异顺序的句子的时候感觉好费劲.

这里附上我刚刚完成的写作，从9点写到现在。真心希望各位大咖能给出表达上的错误或者难理解的地方.
ISSUE governments should focus on solving the immediate problems of today rather than on trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future.

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This recommendation seems to deduce us into believing that immediate problems are much more crucial than anticipated problems of future.Admittedly it is true that governments，as established to serve to address social problems， should focus on current problems as possible as can.However，sillily simply focusing on current problems while ignoring the anticipated problems would be eventually in jeopardy.Thus I disagree the recommendation above.

Yet I concede that the recommendation stays in a philosophy side of the problem.It is guilty for governments to shirk their vocations，especially devastating and severe emergencies.There are amount of examples where governments have necessarily to deal with urgent emergencies.In retrospect，when we get close to 2008,where a deadly epidemic plagued a large range of southeastern china and are expected to spread further-SARS(a very devastating epidemic by which anyone who was infected would be definitely dead），Chinese government quickly mobilize all possible units and forces to fight fiercely against the enemy and eventually won.And also，when we date back to 2011 of the operation for hunting for Osama Bin Laden，who was the world top dangerous head of terrorists，governments should not hesitate to take any reliable forces possible to eradicate it.As we can see in these cases aforecited to which neither anybody nor any entities are capable of addressing，it is for governments to fulfill its vocations.

Furthermore，for some conditions，it is a catastrophe to turn its back on the current problems.Any current problems should be treated seriously before it evolves into more severe and intricate，or even intractable troubles.This could be clearly seen from the case where a patient of benign tumor gradually exacerbate all the way further to be the one of terminal cancer.Since overlooking the initial phase of cancer， the tumor cells accumulate a little more and eventually deteriorate to be a large detrimental cluster of terminal cancer cells.

Notwithstanding，only sillily focusing on current problems is neither a rational nor a comprehensive approach for government due to aside from these current problems there are more predictable problems.Taking a wide stance，to some extent it is a problem of somewhat paradox to strike to a balance between current problems and anticipated problems，more former means less latter and vice versa.This is particularly evident with the cruel competition between the two largest nations in the world of 1980s. Soviet union，for example，because employed a biased strategy of dedicating to developing heavy industries and military might，by which at the end has left the crippled country where their people are suffering from their poor daily lives.And America has been swamped into the trouble of unprecedented federal budget deficits largely resulted from that government sillily devoted a great number of budget on military might construction，even now，by which American government are still suffering a lot .And ironically，most recently this suffering problem is becoming to be a current problem in spotlight for America government.Therefore sometimes neglecting anticipated problems could turn these problems to be the knotty current problems of future，ironically.

In summary，like mentioned before，current problems and anticipated problems are actually a matter of paradox.Government should be very circumvent to fully consider all the possible consequences while choosing either one of them.In my observation，it is difficult to make a distinct choice in dealing two types of problems，and there is no unrivaled advantages to take exclusively either one of them.Hence，government should take a eclectic approach to strike a balance between focusing on anticipated problems and focusing on current problems.

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发表于 2017-10-5 12:18:15 |只看该作者

不好意思，第一段的deduce 改成delude

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发表于 2017-10-5 12:56:58 |只看该作者

没有人愿意评论吗？在线等，好像提高写作水平

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本帖最后由 sweepyou 于 2017-10-16 21:42 编辑

我觉得一个急功近利的方法就是把重点放在argu上，然后issue准备高频，不过这样真的对能力没啥帮助就是了。

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sweepyou 发表于 2017-10-5 14:10
我也是每次3个小时，和很多人一样，觉得复习issue真的好没效率，而且ETS给分还是5分制，感觉复习了性价比也 ...

谢谢这位兄弟的建议。
我和您的看法一样，如果放弃ISSUE，其他的难度要降低好几个难度，但是想得到高分.
兄弟能否就我写的不足的地方给出指点和纠正，怎么更地道.多谢.

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本帖最后由 sweepyou 于 2017-10-16 21:43 编辑

zzcecilia 发表于 2017-10-5 14:43
谢谢这位兄弟的建议。
我和您的看法一样，如果放弃ISSUE，其他的难度要降低好几个难度，但是想得到高分. ...

呃，我不是大兄弟。
比如sillily，词没错但基本上很少见这种用法。
还有里面的circumvent，我估计你是想用circumspect吧？还不如直接careful就得了。

另外语言和逻辑是统一的，语言表达比如句法之类，本身就是种逻辑。在写全文之前还是先参考模仿吧，推荐王老师范文，本版就能找到。

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