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The intellectual benefits of attending a university or college are vastly overrated: most people could learn more by studying and reading on their own for four years than by pursuing a university or college degree.
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When we talk about the university or college, many people show suspect to the education of university. Why, you wonder, could most people learn more by studying and reading on their own for four years than by pursuing a university or college degree? As far as I am concerned, fetching a college degree is of great importance, however college not only give us a degree but also teach me other skills such as the ways of consideration, the ability of learning on their own and how to be a successful man.
To begin with, pursuing a university or college degree is of great significance to do favor to find a good job. University is a nice place which supplies with us good learning condition and environment. We can also learn some job-related skills and pursue a university or college degree by learning all the required courses. This college degree is beneficial to our future job. That may be the reason why so many students learn hard and compete with each other to enter the college, especially the most famous university. We have to concede that one of their direct purposes is to fetch a college degree and find a good job. For instance, if you take a Beijing University degree in the market, you will deserve great welcome and offer.
However, only pursuing a college degree is not sufficient for us to live in contemporary times. We should also learn ways of consideration, ability of reading on our own and how to behave in society. Firstly, After all, we only learn limited knowledge during this four years and part of them may not be used when we connect with society. Thus, ability of reading on our own is useful for us to meet with new things, which can drive us quickly master the entity of new things. Secondly, how to behave is also critical important factor. Without morality and good personality it is impossible for us to attain success even if we have a college degree. In China, owning good communication with others plays a key role on attaining our success.
Last but not the least, it is entirely unfair to blame the intellectual benefits of attending a university. Whether people could learn more by studying and reading on their own during this four years due to his/her hard working and own action. A great number of college students attained success in society, meanwhile, countless ones also failed in their jobs, however, we should attribute both of them to college. Similarly, what a student can learn is due to his own endeavor instead of college. Therefore, Individual factor is the most important one.
To sum up, we should not cast doubt on the function of a university or college. Pursuing a college degree has some merits such as helping us to find job, however, it is not sufficient for us to be applicable the contemporary society. Only by mastering the ability of reading on our own, communication, methods of thinking can we make further success.作者: comingsoon 时间: 2005-3-19 19:13:45
When we talk about the university or college, many people show suspect to the education of university. Why, you wonder, could most people learn more by studying and reading on their own for four years than by pursuing a university or college degree? As far as I am concerned, fetching a college degree is of great importance, however 这里为什么要用转折？ college not only give us a degree but also teach me 前面是us，这里又用me? other skills such as the ways of consideration, the ability of learning on their own and how to be a successful man.
To begin with, pursuing a university or college degree is of great significance to do favor to find a good job. University is a nice place which supplies with provides us good learning condition and environment. We can also learn some job-related skills and pursue a university or college degree by learning all the required courses. This college degree is beneficial to our future job. That may be the reason why so many students learn hard and compete with each other to enter the college, especially the most famous university复数. We have to concede that one of their direct purposes is to fetch a college degree and find a good job. For instance, if you take have a Beijing University degree in the job market, you will deserve great welcome and offer. you will probably get offers with higher salaries.
However, only pursuing a college degree is not sufficient for us to live in contemporary times. We should also learn ways of consideration, ability of reading on our own and how to behave in society. Firstly, After all, we only learn limited knowledge during this four years and part of them may not be used when we connect with enter society. Thus, ability of reading on our own 自学应该是learn by oneself is useful for us to meet with new things, which can drive us quickly master the entity essentiality of new things. Secondly, how to behave rational behavior is also a critical important 重复了，两个adj.修饰？ factor. Without morality and good personality it is impossible for us to attain success even if we have a college degree. In China, owning 应该不要owning good communication with others plays a key role on attaining our success.
Last but not the least 我记得好像是last but not least, it is entirely unfair to blame the intellectual benefits of attending a university. Whether people could learn more by studying and reading on their own during this four years due to depend on his/her hard working and own action. A great number of college students attained success in society, meanwhile, countless ones also failed in their jobs, however, we should attribute both of them to college. Similarly, what a student can learn is due to his own endeavor instead of college. Therefore, Individual factor is the most important one.
To sum up, we should not cast doubt on the function of a university or college. Pursuing a college degree has some merits such as helping us to find job, however, it is not sufficient for us to be applicable the contemporary society. Only by mastering the ability of reading on our own, communication, methods of thinking can we make further success.
感觉似乎走题了，题干中的more几乎没有进行回应
楼主多少号考？作者: boyjim 时间: 2005-3-21 00:22:42
The intellectual benefits of attending a university or college are vastly overrated: most people could learn more by studying and reading on their own for four years than by pursuing a university or college degree.
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When we talk about the university or college, many people show suspect to the education of university. Why, you wonder[口语化了！], could most people learn more by studying and reading on their own for four years[college time就好了] than by pursuing a university or college degree? As far as I am concerned, fetching a college degree is of great importance, however college not only give us a degree but also teach me[us] other skills such as the ways of consideration, the ability of learning on their own and how to be a successful man.[观点清晰]
To begin with[第N个人这么写了~快点换掉，宁愿不要都不要写上去了], pursuing a university or college degree is of great significance to do favor to find a good job[残酷的现实啊~]. University is a nice place[不是去旅游~ivory tower吧] which supplies with us good[换词] learning condition and environment. We can also learn[acquire] some job-related skills and pursue a university or college degree by learning all the required courses. This college degree is beneficial to our future job[太单调了~]. That may be the reason why so many students learn hard[去查金山~换词] and compete with each other to enter the college, especially the most famous university[单复数]. We have to concede that one of their direct purposes is to fetch a college degree and find a good job. For instance, if you take a Beijing University degree in the market, you will deserve great welcome and offer.[这个假如的太过势力了！]
However, only pursuing a college degree is not sufficient for us to live in contemporary times. We should also learn ways of consideration, ability of reading on our own and how to behave in society. Firstly, After all, we only learn limited knowledge during this four years and part of them may not be used when we connect with society. Thus, ability of reading on our own is useful for us to meet with new things, which can drive us quickly master the entity of new things. Secondly, how to behave is also critical important factor. Without morality and good personality it is impossible for us to attain success even if we have a college degree. In China, owning good communication with others plays a key role on attaining our success.[你生怕别人不知道你中国人似的]
Last but not the least[换掉！], it is entirely unfair to blame the intellectual benefits of attending a university. Whether[后面找不到or not] people could learn more by studying and reading on their own during this four years due to his/her hard working and own action. A great number of college students attained success in society, meanwhile, countless ones also failed in their jobs, however, we should attribute both of them to college. Similarly, what a student can learn is due to his own endeavor instead of college. Therefore, Individual factor is the most important one.
To sum up, we should not cast doubt on the function of a university or college. Pursuing a college degree has some merits such as helping us to find job, however, it is not sufficient for us to be applicable[这个的主语通常是物！] the contemporary society. Only by mastering the ability of reading on our own, communication, methods of thinking can we make further success