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发表于 2005-7-23 17:25:33 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
Issue 103
The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives.

History is a treasure case of experience and wisdom of our forefathers. We can benefit so much form it that it will be too narrow and limited to focus the value of studying history on people's daily lives. The study of history can also shed lights on personal inspiration, culture succession, and guidance of the future.

In school education, the study of history can provide student inspiration and courage. By learning the stories of great individuals in history, student may inspired by the wisdom and tenacity of the heroes and may choose careers just like them, and they also will resort to the stories of heroes for courage and strength in facing of difficulties. Take one of my friends for example, he started his career in law business inspired by the story of Abraham Lincoln, who became a lawyer by diligence and tenacity. This friend of my was touched by the characteristics of Lincoln and decided to be a man like him. He encouraged himself every time he failed in the LSAT: would Lincoln succeeded if he gave up? And he finally became lawyer just as he wanted. This illustrate that by studying the great individuals in history students can make these heroes idols and goals of future, and when students are in the adversity they can seek for strength and courage from these idols.

Study of history can also help transfer culture and tell people whom they are. In the era of culture impact and amalgamation, people can easily stray in the river of time and forget whom they are. Recent years in china, the younger generation is quite different from their fathers. They celebrate Christmas, eat McDonald’s and KFC, dye their hair into different colors, and speak better English than Chinese. These people may ask: who are we? By studying history they will know that their traditional holiday is Spring festival, their traditional food is dumpling, they are Chinese with black eyes, black hairs and yellow skin. Without learning history they may confused by different cultures that have entered their lives, and some day these people may entirely forget their traditional values and accept other value form different cultures, then the culture of a nation may vanished.

Another important value of studying history is people can learn from the mistakes that our ancestors made so that we will not make the same mistakes today. If we can go back in time, we can stop numerous mistakes that people made, but we cannot, so the only thing we can do today is to learn experience and lesions of the past, and to avoid making them again. Open the book of history, the disasters involving nuclear power are startling: the nuclear bombs used in the second world war, the accident at the Three Mile Island nuclear-power plant, the disaster at Chernobyl nuclear-power plant in the Soviet Union, all these striking truth from history are telling people that human are not ready for the nuclear technology, and be careful while using it. Hopefully if we can learn the lessons that history has taught us, the same disasters will never happen again.

To sum up, the study of history do not only has values in our daily lives, but also benefit in cultivating the young, passing down traditions and culture, and helping make dicisions to avoide mistakes that has been made in the history.
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越写越烂了~~~思考了一上午还是超时,语感全没了,一个句子要想半天,还有几天就考了,急死我了!!!!!
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发表于 2005-7-23 17:34:31 |只看该作者
别急.我那还有你一篇I 177存着每改. 加油
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发表于 2005-7-23 17:35:44 |只看该作者
大家都一样.
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发表于 2005-7-23 17:40:04 |只看该作者

别急,放松点会考得好些的

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发表于 2005-7-23 17:45:19 |只看该作者
thanks every body~~
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发表于 2005-7-23 20:03:34 |只看该作者
DING
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ding a !~~
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din !
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发表于 2005-7-24 13:49:42 |只看该作者
帮帮忙吧,我一定会回拍得!
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ding
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发表于 2005-7-24 18:02:27 |只看该作者
Issue 103
The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives.

History is a treasure case [I have not seen such an expression!]of experience and wisdom of our forefathers. We can benefit so much form it that it will be too narrow and limited to focus the value of studying history on people's daily lives. The study of history can also shed lights[some light] on personal inspiration, culture succession[transmission may be better], and guidance of the future.

In school education, the study of history can provide student inspiration and courage. By learning the stories of great individuals in history, student may inspired by the wisdom and tenacity of the heroes and may choose careers just like them, and they also will resort to the stories of heroes for courage and strength in facing of difficulties. Take one of my friends for[as an] example, he started his career in law business inspired by the story of Abraham Lincoln, who became a lawyer by diligence and tenacity. This friend of my was touched by the characteristics of Lincoln and decided to be a man like him. He encouraged himself every time he failed in the LSAT: would Lincoln succeeded if he gave up? And he finally became lawyer just as he wanted. This illustrate that by studying the great individuals in history students can make these heroes idols and goals of future, and when students are in the adversity[ when they face adversity] they can seek for strength and courage from these idols.[这样展吧:great figures in history are often of desirable attributes and personalities, and therefore, we can learn a lot from form them. For example, --------]

Study of history can also help transfer[pass down] culture and tell people whom they are. In the era of culture impact and amalgamation, people can easily stray in the river of time and forget whom they are. Recent years in china, the younger generation is quite different from their fathers. They celebrate Christmas, eat McDonald’s and KFC, dye their hair into different colors, and speak better English than Chinese. These people may ask: who are we? By studying history they will know that their traditional holiday is Spring festival, their traditional food is dumpling, they are Chinese with black eyes, black hairs and yellow skin. Without learning history they may confused by different cultures that have entered their lives, and some day these people may entirely forget their traditional values and accept other value form different cultures, then the culture of a nation may vanished.

Another important value of studying history is people can learn from the mistakes that our ancestors made so that we will not make the same mistakes today. If we can [could]go back in time, we can stop numerous mistakes that people made, but we cannot, so the only thing we can do today is to learn experience and lesions of the past, and to avoid making them again. Open the book of history, the disasters involving nuclear power are startling: the nuclear bombs used in the second world war, the accident at the Three Mile Island nuclear-power plant, the disaster at Chernobyl nuclear-power plant in the Soviet Union, all these striking truth from history are telling people that human are not ready for the nuclear technology, and be careful while using it. Hopefully if we can learn the lessons that history has taught us, the same disasters will never happen again.

To sum up, the study of history do not only has values in our daily lives, but also benefit in cultivating the young, passing down traditions and culture, and helping make dicisions [decisions]to avoidep[avoid] mistakes that has been made in the history.

没什么大问题的。感觉中文化太浓了!
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发表于 2005-7-24 19:33:34 |只看该作者
thank you !

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发表于 2005-7-24 20:00:43 |只看该作者
Issue 103
The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives.

History is a treasure case of experience and wisdom of our forefathers. We can benefit so much form(from) it that(怎么能有个that 后面就是句子了呢,非主语从句,非宾语从句,不是很好,换成thus , therefore) it will be too narrow and limited to focus the value of studying history on people's daily lives. The study of history can also shed lights on personal inspiration, culture succession, and guidance of the future.(最后一句不错)

In school education, the study of history can provide student(s) inspiration and courage. By learning the stories of great individuals in history, student may inspired by the wisdom and tenacity of the heroes and may choose careers just like them, and they also will resort to the stories of heroes for courage and strength in facing of difficulties. Take one of my friends for example, he started his career in law business inspired by the story of Abraham Lincoln, who became a lawyer by diligence and tenacity. This friend of my was touched by the characteristics of Lincoln and decided to be a man like him. He encouraged himself every time he failed in the LSAT: would Lincoln succeeded if he gave up? And he finally became lawyer just as he wanted. This illustrate(s) that by studying the great individuals in history students can make these heroes idols and goals of future, and when students are in the adversity they can seek for strength and courage from these idols.(中心意思很好,举身边人的例子的话,一定指明时间地点,人物姓名,要不别人以为你编)

Study of history(studying history) can also help transfer culture and tell people whom they are. In the era of culture impact and amalgamation, people can easily stray in the river of time and forget whom they are.(这句不错) Recent years in china, the younger generation is quite different from their fathers. They celebrate Christmas, eat McDonald’s and KFC, dye their hair into different colors, and speak better English than Chinese. These people may ask: who are we? By studying history they will know that their traditional holiday is Spring festival, their traditional food is dumpling, they are Chinese with black eyes, black hairs and yellow skin. Without learning history they may confused by different cultures that have entered their lives, and some day these people may entirely forget their traditional values and accept other value form different cultures, then the culture of a nation may vanished.(例子挺好,我觉得有一个问题,举例的时候不要老举中国和美国对比的,老美一看是中国人要求就提高了,把上面例子换成日本人,还可扁它一下,开玩笑的,只是不要太中国化的例子)

Another important value of studying history is people can learn from the mistakes that our ancestors made so that we will not make the same mistakes today. If we can go back in time, we can stop numerous mistakes that people made, but we cannot, so the only thing we can do today is to learn experience and lesions of the past, and to avoid making them again. Open the book of history, the disasters involving nuclear power are startling: the nuclear bombs used in the second world war, the accident at the Three Mile Island nuclear-power plant, the disaster at Chernobyl nuclear-power plant in the Soviet Union, all these striking truth from history are telling people that human are not ready for the nuclear technology, and be careful while using it. Hopefully if we can learn the lessons that history has taught us, the same disasters will never happen again.(例子不错)

To sum up, the study of history do not only has values in our daily lives, but also benefit in cultivating the young, passing down traditions and culture, and helping make dicisions(decisions) to avoide(avoid) mistakes that has been made in the history.(例子和观点都还算清晰,结尾开头太平常了,记机个句子,把前后磨磨,对考试会有好处的)
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发表于 2005-7-24 20:31:50 |只看该作者
The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives.

History is a treasure case of experience and wisdom of our forefathers. We can benefit so much form (from)it that it will be too narrow and limited to focus the value of studying history on people's daily lives. The study of history can also shed lights on personal inspiration, culture succession, and guidance of the future.(我觉得开头满好的,点出下面的三个论证点)

In school education, the study of history can provide student inspiration and courage. By learning the stories of great individuals in history, student may(be) inspired by the wisdom and tenacity of the heroes and may choose careers just like them, and they also will resort to the stories of heroes for courage and strength in facing of difficulties. Take one of my friends for example, he started his career in law business inspired by the story of Abraham Lincoln, who became a lawyer by diligence and tenacity. This friend of my(mine) was touched(我觉得这里用touch不合适,用inspire更好) by the characteristics of Lincoln and decided to be a man like him. He encouraged himself every time he failed in the LSAT: would Lincoln succeeded(succeed) if he gave up? And he finally became(a) lawyer just as he wanted. This illustrates that by studying the great individuals in history students can make these heroes idols and goals of future, and when students are in the adversity they can seek for strength and courage from these idols.

Study of history can also help transfer culture and tell people whom(who) they are. In the era of culture impact and amalgamation, people can easily stray in the river of time and forget whom they are. Recent years in china, the younger generation is quite different from their fathers. They celebrate Christmas, eat McDonald’s and KFC, dye their hair into different colors, and (even)speak better English than Chinese(有点怀疑这话,呵呵). These people may ask: who are we? By studying history they will know that their traditional holiday is Spring festival, their traditional food is dumpling, they are Chinese with black eyes, black hairs and yellow skin. Without learning history they may confused by different cultures that have entered their lives, and some day these people may entirely forget their traditional values and accept other value form different cultures, then the culture of a nation may vanished.

Another important value of studying history is people can learn from the mistakes that our ancestors made so that we will not make the same mistakes today. If we can go back in time, we can stop numerous mistakes that people made, but we cannot, so the only thing we can do today is to learn experience and lesions of the past, and to avoid making them again. Open the book of history, the disasters involving nuclear power are startling: the nuclear bombs used in the second world war, the accident at the Three Mile Island nuclear-power plant, the disaster at Chernobyl nuclear-power plant in the Soviet Union, all these striking truth from history are telling people that human are not ready for the nuclear technology, and be careful while using it. Hopefully if we can learn the lessons that history has taught us, the same disasters will never happen again.

To sum up, the study of history do not only has values in our daily lives, but also benefit in cultivating the young, passing down traditions and culture, and helping make dicisions to avoide mistakes that has been made in the history.
(我觉得你写得挺好的了,结构清晰,例证也比较充分,语言错误再改改就好了)

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