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看了你给我改的文章,真的有猛醒的感觉,获益匪浅,有些问题过会儿再讨论,先看你的
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The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives.
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不同意。
1, 历史为将来指明了方向,以防再犯
2, 历史对科学研究的作用
3, 研究历史不应走入极端。
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To say that it is only have value to study history when it is relevant to our daily livesonly应该放在when前面 is to ignore the great effecteffect有点negative,改成importance that history have to future even that give us a direction to our future.
First, history give us a map to where human will go and how human can reduce their mistakes lesserlesser去掉. By Searching in history, we will found how human evolve to the stage today, and all that today happen are just similar as 应该为be similar towhat have happened yesterday. For example, about two thousand years ago, ancient Greek collapsed, who had been a paragon of ancient democracy Then ancient Roman was established at another area, just as the ancient Greek, it had developed greatly, but at last also diminished. The same things were also happened happen 不及物 in the ancient China. How should we explain these things? The reason that historians give is just the value to research history, because not to do so, it would be a real fact that today's civilization collapse语法不对. It is hard for us to accept but if we do not search for history, that day may come to tomorrow写成 that may be tomorrow 是不是更好. So studying history can let human to live longer.
这个例子很不好,把读者都吓死了.开个玩笑,呵呵!
这一段分论点:历史为将来指明了方向,以防再犯
你的论据:西方和中国的朝代更替
你的假设:历史循环,昨天发生的近日会重现,实际上这个假设还不具有科学性的
所以历史学家发现了朝代更替的原因,这个原因可以使人们更好的走向未来,这是历史研究的未来价值。
我的感觉是这样大而空的例子很难说明问题
In science and technology search, historyhistoric experience can benefit people greatly. Maybe you will ask that the material world have changed so much and what have found Most foundings in science and technology some are most absurd, what can we get from the history studying? Yes, it is necessary. You should tell me why it is necessary be reesoning before giving examples For example, Archimedes, a greats scientist in ancient Roman, could found buoyancy theory when he was bathing, and then, which is most important, he can use this theory to determine whether the crown is pure gold or not. Considering this progress, it is helpful to the research today, not for the establishment of a theory, but the method how buoyancy theorywas found. Indeed, it is hard for human to determine whether a research is happened today or not. Those great founding in physics area, such as relativity theory, re also affect today's research greatly. So I can conclude that studying history in academic research, the scientists today can find a way to comprehend today's thing and then find a best method to solve it. Which will be have of great value to tomorrow's life.
你这一段要表达意思是不是:科学史的研究对科学发展,进而对明天有价值,但是这并不是与日常生活明显相关的,感觉最后一点没讲到
Admittedly, I don not think the studying of history is just for studying. That is mean, the history we study should benefit us today or future. Otherwise it is not necessary. For example, some scientists like to find when a king born and when he dead, I think this is no useful and extreme. 论证?是不是没时间了?
In sum up To sum up / In sum, studying history is valuable for us to do today not only for human's future, but also for the life we have today. 这个结尾句很别扭,是不是可以考虑分成几个句子来讲清楚一些
总评:这篇文章目前最大的缺点是语言,意思讲得很不清楚,而且有一些低级语法错误,可能是限时的缘故,但是给人的印象却极为不好。
论证反对的两个方面,应该是对的,但是这两个方面联系很少,各自为战,从一个到另一个的过渡很突兀。我觉得还是在提纲上在深入的想一下。
我原来对这篇 issue 的题意理解错了,看了你的这篇 issue 再去看自己的, 发现很多漏洞,哎呀,闭关修炼去了 |
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