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Argument140 The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.
"During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."

翻译：在Thomas教授作为植物学教授的17年里，她证明了自己确实是值50000元年薪的。她的班级是本校最大的班级之一，这说明她在学生中间的受欢迎度。而且，她给学校带来的研究捐助在过去两年中都超过了她的年薪。因此，鉴于Thomas教授已被证实的教学和研究能力，我们建议将她的年薪增加10000元，并提升为系主任；如果没有这些加薪和提升，我们担心Thomas教授将会离开Elm City大学到别的学校就职。

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（1）她的班级是本校最大的班级之一和她在学生中间的受欢迎度没有直接关系。受欢迎度要通过在学生中广泛调查来得到。
（2）她给学校带来的研究捐助在过去两年都超过她的年薪并不能说明什么，也许捐助是因为学校的影响力，而且每年5万多的研究捐助可能并不算多，再者，而且她每年花费的钱更多，远远超过她带来的捐助。
（3）即使她真的教学和研究能力很强，但她并不一定适合做系主任。
（4）并没有迹象表明她将要离开Elm City大学。

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In this argument, the arguer asserted that Elm City University should add Professor Thomas's annual salary from $50000 to $60000 and promote her to Department Chairperson. He supported his conclusion by several reasons. He said that Professor Thomas is popular among the students because her classes are one of the largest at the university and she has brought lots of research money to the university. The reasons seem logical, but after a careful examination, we can find several fatal flaws as follows.

Firstly, there is no direct relation between the fact that Professor Thomas's classes are among the largest and her popularity among students. It is very possible that her classes are large because her curricula are basic courses for botany department, so every student of the department should take part in her classes. It is also possible that students select her classes because it is easy to pass the examinations of her classes. In addition, whether she is popular should be proved by widely survey among student.

Secondly, it can reveal nothing that the research grants she brought exceeded her salary in the last two years. Maybe the force of the university resulted in the grants, moreover, more than $50000 research grants annually is not large for study. Moreover, it did not show how much she spends on research per year, and it is likely that she spent far more than she brought.

Thirdly, grant that she really have powerful teaching and research abilities, it does not say she have to ability to be the Department Chairperson. To be a leader, the teaching or research abilities are not most important; on the contrary, the management ability is more essential. As a Department Chairperson, he should organize the teaching activities, consider the students and teachers' opinions, try to create a good study environment for students, deal with all kinds of matters, and the like. But Professor Thomas is not proved that she has the abilities referred above.

Last but not least, there is no evidence to indicate that she will leave Elm City University for another college. Maybe she has a lifelong contract with the university, and if she leaves, she has to pay a large amount of compensation to the university. Thus, she does not likely leave for another university.

To sum up, the argument is not persuasive as it stands. To make it more convincing, the arguer has to provide more reasonable evidences and takes the facets discussed above into account.

用心就不会错过...

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发表于 2005-12-19 21:43:52 |只看该作者

饿死了，总算交上了，去做炒年糕喽，呵呵~~

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发表于 2005-12-20 01:01:56 |只看该作者

well down~amy每次都交得很及时呢，还有参考资料~赞一个！熬夜准备考试~

人生太短
出手要更大
旁观者不需理解

赢得风光
豪得精彩
自己偏偏感觉失败

自尊心都可以出卖
忘记我也是无坏
连幸福都输掉醉在长街
依然是我最大

连梦想洒一地再任人踩依然笑得爽快

WELCOME TO GRE作文版

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发表于 2005-12-20 11:20:42 |只看该作者

In this argument, the arguer asserted that Elm City University should add Professor Thomas's annual salary from $50000 to $60000 and promote her to Department Chairperson. He supported his conclusion by several reasons. He said that Professor Thomas is popular among the students because her classes are one of the largest at the university and she has brought lots of research money to the university. The reasons seem logical, but after a careful examination, we can find several fatal flaws as follows.

Firstly, there is no direct relation between the fact that Professor Thomas's classes are among the largest and her popularity among students. It is very possible that her classes are large because her curricula are basic courses for botany department学科名botany从哪里来的呀？, so every student of the department should take part in her classes. It is also possible that students select her classes because it is easy to pass the examinations of her classes. In addition, whether she is popular should be proved by widely survey among student.

Secondly, it can reveal nothing that the research grants she brought exceeded her salary in the last two years. Maybe the force of the university resulted in the grants, moreover, more than $50000 research grants annually is not large for study. Moreover, it did not show how much she spends on research per year, and it is likely that she spent far more than （what） she brought.

Thirdly, grant that she really have powerful teaching and research abilities, it does not say she have to ability to be the Department Chairperson. To be a leader, the teaching or research abilities are not (the) most important; on the contrary, the management ability is more essential. As a Department Chairperson, he should organize the teaching activities, consider the students and teachers' opinions, try to create a good study environment for students, deal with all kinds of matters, and the like. But Professor Thomas is not proved that she has the abilities referred above.

Last but not least, there is no evidence to indicate that she will leave Elm City University for another college. Maybe she has a lifelong contract with the university(终身合同不代表不能辞职呀), and if she leaves, she has to pay a large amount of compensation to the university（有可能挖这个教授的学校会替她出违约金呢，我觉得这么讲不太充分）. Thus, she does not likely leave for another university.

To sum up, the argument is not persuasive as it stands. To make it more convincing, the arguer has to provide more reasonable evidences and takes the facets discussed above into account.

总的还不错，不过句式缺乏变化，一起加油

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