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发表于 2014-6-23 04:20:02 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

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发表于 2014-6-23 04:20:35 |只看该作者

The statement that one must study major cities to understand the most important characteristics claims major cities could offer plenty insightful information of their country in multiple aspects and would help outsiders get a concise view about that society. I agree that it is necessary and useful to do research on the major cities because they are well documented such that information could be obtained easily and these places are usually closely associated with important cultural elements, including economics, politics, religion, language that contribute to the tradition and development of a society. However, globalized major cities may fail to offer an extensive picture when studying certain societies, especially developing countries due to their uneven development.

Starting with major cities is efficient when it comes to an unfamiliar society. These cities are highly exposed to the outside that their names could be seen frequently on travel guides, daily news and other media. Almost everyone, no matter how knowledgeable he is, knows New York in U.S., London in U.K., Paris in French, Tokyo in Japan etc. Every aspect in these cities is well documented, from history, architecture, and tradition to transportation, food and entertainment. Enormous and detailed information could be obtained such that almost none of the travelers would get lost and could even be prepared to local life before arrival. Also, residents in major cities come from all over the country and they bring different local dialects, living habits and religious beliefs, which could give a brief overview of the society. On the other hand, small towns and villages are more isolated so that very limited, sometimes even blank information could be obtained, thus preventing outsiders to know about these places.

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发表于 2014-6-24 10:58:03 |只看该作者

1. “Paris in French” should be "Paris in France"
2.Enormous and detailed information could be obtained such that almost none of the travelers would get lost and could even be prepared to local life before arrival.

The above statement is false: people get lost all the time while traveling in big cities.

3.On the other hand, small towns and villages are more isolated so that very limited, sometimes even blank information could be obtained, thus preventing outsiders to know about these places.

This sentence is not complete and vague. e.g. "so that very limited" is not a complete object clause. And what do you mean by "blank information" in this context?

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发表于 2014-6-24 15:09:32 |只看该作者

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发表于 2014-6-24 21:59:33 |只看该作者

我怎么感觉没写完。。

“The statement that one must study major cities to understand the most important characteristics claims major cities could offer plenty insightful information of their country in multiple aspects and would help outsiders get a concise view about that society.”

标题有claim offer plenty information么。。？

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