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发表于 2007-2-16 22:03:45 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

2.The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting."

七年前，附近的Brookville社区的业主实施了一系列关于该社区的庭院应如何布置以及房屋应涂何种颜色的规定。从那以后，Brookville的地产平均价格翻了三番。为使Deerhaven Acres的地产升值，我们也应该对于景观和房屋涂色实施自己的规定。

In this argument, the committee cites a fact of Brookville community, and advises to adopt restriction on landscaping and house painting in order to raise property values in Deerhaven. However, I find this argument unpersuasive, in some reasons.

To begin with, the fact that Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions is necessarily indication that those homeowners in Brookville adopted the requirement of Brookville community in deed. The letter fails to substantiate this crucial assumption. Accordingly, the committee can not draw any firm conclusion that what is responsible for the increase in Brookville property values.

Even assuming that those homeowners in Brookville implemented these restrictions, it does not necessarily indicate that the increase in property values is attributed to the implementation of those restrictions. Perhaps other factors are instead responsible for the increase. Property values are a function of supply and demand. Maybe the supply of housing has decreased. For example, the houses on sale in Brookville become fewer and fewer these years. Or, perhaps the demand has increased in the past seven years. For example, a new shopping center has been founded in the past seven years.

Even if the increase in property values is due to the implementation of those restrictions, it does not necessarily indicate that it is helpful to adopt restrictions for Deerhaven. Maybe the taste of people today has changed and they are not interested in uniform landscaping and house painting anymore, especially since that seven years have passed. If so, it is not wise for homeowners in Deerhaven to adopt this advice.

In conclusion, the author fails to substantiate whether homeowners in Brookville implemented Brookville’s restrictions and what is the real cause for the increase of property values in Brookville. Moreover, failing to consider the difference of Brookville and Deerhaven, the recommendation that Deerhaven should also adopt restrictions on landscaping and house painting is unsubstantial.

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发表于 2007-3-1 21:01:56 |只看该作者

In this argument, the committee cites a fact of Brookville community, and advises to adopt restriction on landscaping and house painting in order to raise property values in Deerhaven. However, I find this argument unpersuasive, in some reasons.To begin with, the fact that Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions is necessarily （an）indication that those homeowners in Brookville adopted the requirement of Brookville community in deed. The letter fails to substantiate this crucial assumption. Accordingly, the committee can not draw any firm conclusion that what is responsible for the increase in Brookville property values.(既然是restrictions凡是守法的人就应该遵照执行这一点的说服力不强)Even assuming that those homeowners in Brookville implemented these restrictions, it does not necessarily indicate that the increase in property values is attributed to the implementation of those restrictions. Perhaps other factors are instead responsible for the increase.（这句话的语法有问题，是不是可以这样说：Perhaps other factors instead of implementation of the restrictions are responsible for the increase.） Property values are a function of supply and demand. Maybe the supply of housing has decreased. （供需变化尽管可以很好的解释房价的上涨，但是LZ在这里没有说清楚是如何影响的）For example, the houses on sale in Brookville become fewer and fewer these years. Or, perhaps the demand has increased in the past seven years. For example, a new shopping center has been founded in the past seven years.(这个例子和需求的增加有什么必然的联系，我没看出来)Even if the increase in property values is due to the implementation of those restrictions, it does not necessarily indicate that it is helpful to adopt restrictions for Deerhaven. Maybe the taste of people today has changed and they are not interested in uniform landscaping and house painting anymore, especially since that seven years have passed. If so, it is not wise for homeowners in Deerhaven to adopt this advice.（这一点是一个很明显的相似性薄弱的攻击点，是不是因为LZ怕落入俗套才没有从这个角度来攻击，但是这种论述方法给人一种说服力不太强的感觉）

另外还有一个点可以简单提一下，在正式向Deerheaven委员会提出建议前，负责任的建议者应该认真征询居民的意见，应为如何装饰自己的房屋毕竟是他们自己的权利，作出这一限制后真正受益的并非居民本身，而是房地产开发商，在剥夺他们的装饰自由的权利之前应该认真考虑他们的意见。（我的这一点建议是和LZ的第一点对应的，我认为一旦作出了restriction后就必需遵照执行）In conclusion, the author fails to substantiate whether homeowners in Brookville implemented Brookville’s restrictions and what is the real cause for the increase of property values in Brookville. Moreover, failing to consider the difference of Brookville and Deerhaven, the recommendation that Deerhaven should also adopt restrictions on landscaping and house painting is unsubstantial.

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