[i习作temp] Issue144 by (再战）小组 [复制链接]

144  It is the artist, not critic, who gives the society something of lasting value.

不同意作者观点

立场：不仅需要artists 还需critics

1 需要 artist。

2 只有artists 不行。

3 需要critics 。

I disagree with the author's assertion. In my opinion, making the art of enduring value demands not only the artists but also critics. Either of the both may refute or contradict the aim.

We can not deny that it is the artists that invent or design the art, as a result, the artists are the producers of the art such as drawing, music and so forth. In order to justify the point, there are some excellent examples that are very compelling. We all show great respect and admiration to Monet, the world known artists of impression, for having done a lot of perfect drawings, and one of his works named “Impression: Sunrise” wins the society great reputation. Another example is Beethoven’s brilliant achievement and contribution to music. When his Final of Ninth Symphonies, Chorus, was played, the audience continued their standing applause for five times for the wonderful performance until the police stopped them. At the same time, the famous Denmark writer Anderson had written some works of tale in his lifetime to influence all the children for developing the imagination and creativities. It is undeniable that without artists, without good art.

What is discussed in the last paragraph may beg a question: Whether the works can absolutely achieve success and the lasting value to the society as long as the artists invent or compose them? Probably the answer is no. There are about two reasons which account for my views. On the one hand, there is much works beyond what we, as a common people with little technical identification for art, can understand. On the other hand, some artists probably are often circumscribed to their own frigid minds or understanding of their works and cannot break through them so that these artists have not achieved greater success. As a result, the artists alone may not design some wonderful works all the time.  

How to solve this problem? For my point of view, under some kind of circumstance, in order to attain the aim the society also needs a number of critics due to a couple of reasons. Firstly, when we are hard to understand some works well or better, critics may help us to achieve it, or, in the absence of the critic’s review to the public, maybe there should be a long time to wait for understanding Monet’s works “ Impression: Sunrise”. Secondly, the critic’s proper and exact review of some works may make works remove some defects and perfect the works because the critics sometimes can perceive to some extent what artists maybe cannot perceive at all. Thirdly, by some professional evaluation or constructional advice from critics, artists can break through their fixed and particular minds so as to make works much more valuable to the society, and sometimes even outsiders just like us may give artists some inspiration of invention and composing.         

Idisagree with the author's assertion.(这句太口语话，而且即使要表示不同意见最好委婉一点，建议参考一些常用表达不同或者补充意见的模板) In my opinion, making the art ofenduring value demands not only the artists but also the critics. Denial any sides may cause refution or contradiction to the aim.(文章的第一段很重要啊一定要仔细)

Wecan not deny that it is the artists that invent or design the art, as aresult, the artists are the producers of the art（这句话同义重复）such as drawing, musicand so forth. In order to justify the point, there are some excellentexamples that are very compelling(这个词是不是重了点，建议用convincible or reasanable). We all show great respect andadmiration to Monet, the world-known artist of impression, for havingdone a lot of perfect drawings, and one of his works named “Impression: Sunrise” wins him great reputation. Another example is Beethoven’s wonderful（brilliant用来形容人比较好而不是用来形容工作） achievement and contribution to music. When his Final ofNinth Symphonies, Chorus, was played, the audience continued theirstanding applause for five times for the wonderful performance untilthe police stopped them.Moreover（ At the same time？安徒生和贝多芬是同一时代的人？还是就是此外的意思？), the famous Denmark writerAnderson had written some works of tale in his lifetime to influenceall the children for developing the imagination and creativities. It isundeniable that no artists, no good art.(语言还需要精炼)

Whatis discussed in the last paragraph may discuss(beg the question是逃避问题实质的意思) a question: Whether theworks can just achieve success and lasting value to thesociety only by the artics themselves? Definitely/Undoubtedly （ 既然要肯定你的结论就不要用怀疑让步的说法用Probably）theanswer is no. There are about two reasons in  my point of view.On the one hand, there are much works beyond what we, as a common peoplewith little technical identification for art, can understand. On theother hand, some artists probably are often circumscribed to their ownfrigid minds or understanding of their works and cannot break throughthem so that these artists have not achieved greater success. As aresult, the artists alone may not design some wonderful works all thetime.  

Howto solve this problem? For my point of view, under some kind ofcircumstance, in order to attain the aim the society also needs anumber of critics due to a couple of reasons. Firstly, when we are hardto understand some works well or better, critics may help us to achieveit, or, in the absence of the critic’s review to the public, maybe there should be a long time to wait for understanding Monet’s works “ Impression: Sunrise”. Secondly, the critic’sproper and exact review of some works may make works remove somedefects and perfect the works because the critics sometimes canperceive to some extent what artists maybe cannot get at all.Thirdly, by some professional evaluation or constructional advice fromcritics, artists can break through their fixed and particular minds soas to make works much more valuable to the society, and sometimes evenoutsiders just like us may give artists some inspiration of inventionand composing.(书面语太少，口水话比较多)