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发表于 2007-7-23 16:40:25 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

虽然写了不少，但很少被拍到，也懒得传上来。希望这次有同伴抽时间拍一下，如果有需要的话我一定回拍！

ISSUE36 “The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries."
When Van Gogh died lonely and in poverty, he would never have known that he will be thought of one of the greatest artist in the human history. When Bruno was burn to die, he believed that sooner or later human would understand the value of what he had fought for. He is right that finally he was recognized as a great man in human history not only because of his contributions to the science but also his fighting for truth all over his life. wIt seems that whether a person is great should be decided by those living after him or her while not his or her contemporaries. This is true in some extent as it will need time to understand the value a person's contributions to the society. This time may be very long which depends on the development of the society and what fields the great people are working in.
First of all, the development of the society plays a key role in the recognition of a person's value. With the development of the society, people are to be more and more civilized and are prone to analyze and accept or even enjoy something that seems radical to the society. If it were several thousand before, Newton would never have the chance to become a professor of Cambridge University and soon a fellow of the Royal Society. Thus he got a great many important discoveries in Physics. On the other hand, with the great development of technologies, we can get the information and communicate with each other easier than before. Thus it is more convenience for us to verify the results of a person's contributions. Thus we can understand the person's value easier than before and a person can get the honor he deserve more easily than before. And until now our society are being more and more tolerant that we can get many different and radical ideas. With our deep analysis we can find the values of most of them.
In addition, whether a person can get the honor he or she deserves still lies on the fields he or she is devoting to. This depends on the nature of different fields. For example, most results in sciences must to be verified in experiments which may not be available in some ages of history limited by the level of the technologies. Even some of them can not be demonstrated by experiments their foundations and hypothesis must be evincible and solid, and their process must be held water. This may still out of most people's capabilities to demonstrate the hypothesis of these theories in a time. The field of arts is also a case. We may need many years to understand the value of a masterwork or a philosopher’s idea. Thus it is usually the case that a great writer may get his honor years after his death. The great English novelist D.H Laurence is the case. He has created many masterpieces but only after tens of years later could he got his honor he deserved. On the contrary, the politicians and the community leaders can have their honors more easily because their great effects and the values can be understand more easily than the scientists and the persons devoting to arts.
Overall, no great individual will be forgotten sooner or later so long as they contribute a great to the development to the human society. As the society and the technologies proceed forward we will can be sure that we can understand the values of the great individuals 'contributions and honor them more promptly.

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发表于 2007-7-23 21:58:58 |只看该作者

开始一直不知道怎么写，郁闷了一下。后来看了一些习作，有了一点想法。
我不知道写提纲有没有必要。开始写的几篇都认真的写了提纲，现在觉得好像不是特别必要所以就没写了。
我觉得ISSUE想写出自己的一点看法真的好难。不能泛泛而谈，要有深度，要有逻辑，这些要在45分钟之内完成似乎很难的，至少我现在都是想清楚了之后再动手的。

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发表于 2007-7-23 23:02:40 |只看该作者

简单看了一下。第一，开头太长了。一般只要简明表明自己的观点。具体论述要放到后面。第二，开头的概述没有包括后面的全部内容。第三，society前面没有“the”，这是高中语法。第四，有些语法错误。第五，逻辑有点乱。不过你的例子挺丰富的，看来是下了不少功夫，我这方面欠缺啊。

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发表于 2007-7-25 00:30:35 |只看该作者

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关于开头的长短实际上没有一个比较统一的说法。看ETS官方范文基本上开头都挺长的。但是北美范文280篇则非常简单，简直都是一个模版出来：I agree that...并不是说这样不好，感觉还是太呆板了。对于初期刚开始准备我觉得这样很好，但到后来自由发挥，只要能够在开头表明自己的态度就可以了。
“第三，society前面没有“the”，这是高中语法。第四，有些语法错误。”惭愧，我写作文都是凭感觉的，所以很多地方都误用了冠词等一些小品词。我会好好改正的，谢谢指证！
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