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TOPIC: ISSUE4 - "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."WORDS: 545    提纲：1．跨学科研究中outsiders的重要性，早期学科的发展。2．Outsiders的需求推动了研究领域的发展。3．部分研究领域只需要有insiders的思考和推理，不需要outsiders的知识和经验。I agree that to improve the study of many fields, the knowledge and experience of outsiders are very important, especially in the fields which are based on the study of other disciplines. But in some field, the outsiders bring nothing since the thinking activities of its researchers play the vital role.In recent years, the knowledge and experience from other fields sometimes are vital to a different field with more and more interdisciplinary studies coming up. In modern science, the methods and research results of a field might be used for another field. 这句话略显多余！这句话只是简单的interdisciplinary的解释。我认为可以递进一下，比如说：Other fields’ development provides new methods and angels, crucial factors for advancement, for one. OK, 个人愚见了。 For instance, many biologists use chemical methods to extract certain materials from plants or cells of animals, with which they can advance the study on biology. Without those chemical methods, biological study may not advance as significantly as it is now. Promoting the study of both disciplines, the interdisciplinary research becomes increasingly popular and the help of outsiders becomes increasingly important, too. Furthermore, even in early years of some fields, the knowledge of another fields are of great importance, since some methods and formulas of one discipline might be the base of another discipline. The relationship of physics and mathematics serves as a persuasive example. To conclude, the knowledge and experience brought by outsiders sometimes significantly promote the study of certain field. 论证力度不够，significantly突出一点比较好。什么东西一上来，哗，翻天覆地的变化……嘿嘿，虽然我自己也没有这样的例子。找找吧！For another, the knowledge and experience of outsiders play a vital role in the study of many fields, since they have new needs.这个ts和后面的论证不大一致。后面只是说outsiders的需要给了研究者动力和方向，而ts里面你说的是outsiders的知识和经验，我认为是否应该去掉这个knowledge and experience？With the development of science and technology, the outsiders know more and ask for more. When they can talk with each other far away, they ask for seeing, and when they can see, they ask for touching. In most circumstances, the studies advance according to the new needs. After all, the aim of science and technology research is to meet the needs of their people.怎么讲，如果是写argument的话，你这里可是和第三个ts自相矛盾了一点点哦？呵呵…… The inquiries and need from the outsiders or the public often accelerate the development of technology and science. Supposing that the outsiders stop making inquiries, the "insiders" might loose the direction and interest of doing research or they might not be sure what is worthy being researched.这里也会削弱第三个ts的。 If they do not know why and on what they should doing research, the study will stay still, then the development of the field will stop.我认为这第二段论证基本上有点点偏题呀？似乎你在说的是需求可以推动研究。但是题目说的是advance significantly，这个significantly有得推敲。Although the experience of outsiders are really important to the study of many fields, there are a few study fields that can advance significantly without the experience and knowledge of outsiders such as philosophy and mathematics. These fields are different from other fields in that the philosophers and the mathematician can do researches simply by rational thinking and deducing.  Kant, one of the most famous philosophers in the world, did not leave his hometown all his life. He just thought and deduced something without the knowledge and experience of outsiders, since the most serious and sublime philosophy comes from the ration of human.例子还是没有达到significant的力度！The development of philosophy and mathematics is not to meet the need of outsiders, but the philosophers and mathematician themselves because it is the insight need that prompts them to do research.这第三段分析得不错哦To sum up, although there are many field of study that advance significantly with the aid of some knowledge and experience of outsiders, some discipline can develop quickly only with the thinking of "insiders".我们也算是老搭档了，就不说客气话，你也知道我的那点底子。

我认为总的来说，文章思路清晰。但是论证力度不够，挖得不深！重上Issue之路，兄弟姐妹帮忙看看。