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发表于 2007-8-7 21:01:19 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

writing(Personal Philosophy):
Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why.

On the question of whether to chose an altered life or static life, I prefer to enjoy change in every aspect of my life, such as work and study.

Change is helpful for us to reach out greater success in our work or study. Not every one make correct and perfect decision at first time. In other words, we need change or modify the origin determination sometimes to guarantee the most effective and efficient work or study. A example of my brother could serve to illustrate my point. He used to be a successful doctor who worked 100 hours a week meanwhile earned a high-paid salary. All of sudden, he felt extremely tired from this occupation and therefore a detective novel writer became his new career, which has been his dreamy job for years. Until now, he has three best-solder novels and works as a popular columnist for the largest local newspaper. Thus, in my opinion, the greatest success is equivalent to combine one's interest with the consideration of affording his or her own expense. In this sense, my brother's determination about altering a career does lead to a greater life and success.

Also, the effect of change towards improving our interpersonal skills should not be ignored. As we all know, we are nothing if not societal animals, and how to deal with the relationship between family members, friends, co-workers and teacher is a complicated question, especially when we have a problem, or quarrel with somebody. For instance, in my preparation of GRE, I became testy and impatient when I talked with my friends, which meanwhile affected my efficiency of study adversely. One day I realized this problem and changed my mood and attitude towards this examination in time, then I find the efficiency of study raised and my friends said: Thank you for coming back again.

Admittedly, leading a steady and quite lives has its own advantages to the extent that we can spend more time in enjoying lives, staying with families, improving our health situation. This life style is virtually recommended by a large amount of people. Nevertheless, in my point of view, I recognize the advantages, which is brought about by change, far outweigh that is brought about by a stable ordinary lives. Therefore, I am inclined to enjoy distinctive experiences every day, every month and every year.

写完自己检查拼写错误好多。自己汗一个。辛苦修改的同学啦。

[ 本帖最后由 lizzy1986 于 2007-8-7 21:03 编辑 ]

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发表于 2007-8-8 13:28:52 |只看该作者

On the question of whether to chose (choosing) an altered life or static life, I prefer to enjoy change in every aspect of my life, such as work and study.

Change is helpful for us to reach out (reach out我记得是伸出的意思，还有别的意思么？如果没有，删掉out) greater success in our work or study. Not every one makes correct and perfect decision at first time. In other words, we need change or modify the origin （original） determination sometimes to guarantee the most effective and efficient work or study. An example of my brother could serve to illustrate my point. He used to be a successful doctor who worked 100 hours a week meanwhile earned a high-paid salary. All of sudden（all of sudden 用在此处不妥，每周工作100小时和下面的感到疲惫可以用因果的连接词）, he felt extremely tired from this occupation and therefore a detective novel writer became his new career, which has been his dreamy job for years. Until now, he has three best-solder novels and works as a popular columnist for the largest local newspaper. Thus, in my opinion, the greatest success is equivalent to combine one's interest with the consideration of affording his or her own expense. （这里跑题了，或者说是啰唆了，没有必要在例子里添加这样总结性的话，否则容易被认为是跑题。） In this sense, my brother's determination about altering a career does lead to a greater life and success.

Also, the effect of change towards improving our interpersonal skills ，should not be ignored. As we all know, we are nothing if not societal animals, and how to deal with the relationship between family members, friends, co-workers and teacher is a complicated question, especially when we have a problem, or quarrel with somebody. For instance, in my preparation of GRE, I became testy and impatient when I talked with my friends, which meanwhile affected my efficiency of study adversely. One day I realized this problem and changed my mood and attitude towards this examination in time, and then I find the efficiency of study raised and my friends said: Thank you for coming back again. (例子挺好，但是你写到态度恶劣以后，我觉得应该加一句写你们关系恶化这样的句子。稍微带一下就好，不然有思维跳跃的嫌疑。）

Admittedly, leading a steady and quite life has its own advantages to the extent that we can spend more time in enjoying lives, staying with families, improving our health situation. This life style is virtually recommended by a large amount of people. Nevertheless, in my point of view, I recognize the advantages, which is brought about by change, far outweigh that is brought about by a stable ordinary lives （life）. Therefore, I am inclined to enjoy distinctive （changeful这个词更贴近主题）experiences every day, every month and every year.

Lizzy要多注意单复数，太多的小错也会扣分的。
蓝色部分是不确定的，仅供参考