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TOPIC: ISSUE61 - "High-profile awards such as the Nobel Prize are actually damaging to society because they suggest that only a few people deserve such recognition."
WORDS: 486          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2008-7-28 16:49:34

Every time when Nobel Prize was published, the worldwide attention would be attracted by the high-profile award and accomplishment was given to the award receiver, invariably the most eminent people. However, the speaker holds a view that such huge awards are detrimental to the well being of society since the recognitions are deserved to only a few people. I do not agree with this statement due to the great function of the high-profile awards.

First and foremost , important rewards are set for encouraging and comment the eminent accomplishment of distinguished people who has made a excellent contribution to the development of society. For instance, Yang Chen-ning and doctor T.D.Lee share the Nobel Physical Price for their huge discovery on the Question of Parity Conservation in Weak Interactions which overturn the classic balance theory in the physical history .Their contribution has laid a foundation for the further research in the future and the prize is a certificate for their endeavor and talent. Hence, high-profile rewards have been a symbol of a statue in particular field which is of vast value to stimulate more and more descendants to chase truth and devote themselves to their beloved career. That is why we pay huge attention on the high-profile rewards and why some organizations set up a series of awards and profitable measures for their members to stimulate their potential and morals.

As to the point that it will bring in some damage to the society since the big prize is given to a small number of people, i have a diverse view that if a vast majority of people have the opportunity to receive the prize, it is meaningless and useless for its original purpose. Why the price is valuable lies in its rarity and difficulty to get otherwise it is common and not so charming and precious, as a result, the particular role of impetus and encouragement will lost .What is more, it is not practical to reward plenty of people with such high prize. Hence it is fallacious to draw the conclusion that high-profile awards are not benefit for the society.

Surly,there exist plenty of problems needed to be concerned in order to be fairer. After all, it takes a large number of energy and costs to carry out huge prizes from the selection of excellent discovery and contribution to the preparation for the whole process of endowing of prize, it is in the great need of fair and open, in which the process should be broadcast lively and present to the public transparently. n the contrary , were the fabrication in the whole process, the trueness of the prize and the value behind would invariable decreased and nobody will be care for it any more. （再加点内容充实一下，感觉没有紧扣主题的例子和严密的论证）

To sum up, it is not difficult to get the conclusion that the huge prize ia instrumental for the progress of society due to its rarity and value.（结尾怎么这么简单？）

读了一遍，感觉这两篇文章感觉没有你以前写的好了，论证方面还要下功夫，我也是，也存在这个缺点