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TIME: 01:45:45 DATE: 2009-5-31 下午 09:49:03
130. "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
现在孩子的社会化程度决定了社会的命运。可惜的是，我们还没有学会教孩子怎么样去建设一个更好的社会。
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主题：孩子如何去建设一个更好的社会，不应是我们所教的，而应该多半是他们自己去领悟和大人知道的
1.There is no denying that children is the hope of a nation so that how children are socialized is indeed crucial for the future society.
2.孩子的意识是经过大人们的指引和自己的领悟而形成的，不会是由大人的教育的思想灌输进去的。怎样建设一个更好的社会是一个灵活应用的过程，如果只凭教育的灌输而不会应用，那么教的理论再好也没有用。
3.所以孩子们应该通过自己对社会的认知去评判什么样建设社会它才会更好的发展。当然这个过程中需要大人的指引，而不是完全由孩子们去感悟。因为毕竟难免会有偏激的想法

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发表于 2009-5-31 22:01:15 |只看该作者

1# sha-shine
The author asserts that the degree of the child's community determines the fate of society. Whereas, we do not learn to teach children how to built a better society. However, in my point of view we should not be taught children how to set up a ideal society. But most of their should be cognized by themselves. To cognize which style of community life will they like.
There is no denying that children is a hope of a nation so that how children are socialized is indeed crucial for the future society. So that the children’s ideology becomes more and more important. It can set the future direction of social development. It can not be ignored by us.
Furthermore, the awareness's come in to being is based on the direct of adult and understand their own. But by the adult education into indoctrination. It is a flexible application of the process to how to built a prefect society. If indoctrination education alone will not instill application. So, no matter how well taught the theory, they are all useless.
Last but not least, I think children though their own awareness of the community to judge what it would be better to build our community development. Of course, this process needs the guidance of adults, rather than to the perception by children. Because,
after all, there is maybe the idea of radical. As a result, We can't expect children to take messages about rules or morality seriously unless they see adults taking those rules seriously in their day-to-day affairs. Certain things must be said, certain limits laid down, and certain examples set.
From what has been discuss above, we may clearly draw that the children are more and more important, they should to know how to build a better society is ground on their own apperception and the guidance of adults.

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发表于 2009-6-1 14:14:00 |只看该作者

The author asserts that the degree of the child's community这个community不好作为socialization的改写吧？ determines the fate of society. Whereas, we do not learn to teach children how to built a better society. However, in my point of view we should not be taught (teach)children how to set up aan ideal society. But most of their(them) should be cognized by themselves意思是想说，他们应该自己学会认知，但这样表达要画问号也~. To cognize which style of community life will they like. 这是作为句子成分还是句子呢？看了费解。
There is no denying that children is a hope of a nation so that how children are socialized is indeed crucial for the future society. So that the children’s ideology becomes more and more important. It can set the future direction of social development. It can not be ignored by us.
Furthermore, the awareness's come改成coming in to being is based on the direct of adult and understand their own. 不通But by the adult education into indoctrination. It is a flexible application of the process to how to built a prefect society. If indoctrination education alone will去掉will not instill application. So, no matter how well taught the theory, they are all useless.
Last but not least, I think children though their own awareness of the community to judge what it would be better to build our community development. Of course, this process needs the guidance of adults, rather than to the perception by children. Because,
after all, there is maybe the idea of radical. As a result, We can't expect children to take messages about rules or morality seriously unless they see adults taking those rules seriously in their day-to-day affairs. Certain things must be said, certain limits laid down, and certain examples set.这一段的逻辑连词一旦出现的时候就嫌太多，没有的时候就读不通句子逻辑关系。
From what has been discussdiscussed above, we may clearly draw that the children are more and more important, they should to know how to build a better society is ground on their own apperception and the guidance of adults.

沙沙，看得出来你这篇写的很in hasty哦。。。对题目的理解也不行，整个文章写的很纠结也。。。一些基本的语法错误好多哦。。。你抽空好好思考一下哦。。。

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发表于 2009-6-2 11:31:32 |只看该作者

本帖最后由 miki7cat 于 2009-6-2 11:37 编辑

The author asserts that the degree of the child's [community](socialization) determines the fate of society. Whereas, we do not learn to teach children how to built a better society. However, in my point of view we should not be taught children how to set up a ideal society. But most of [their](them) should be cognized by themselves. [To cognize which style of community life will they like.](?)

There is no denying that children is a hope of a nation so that how children are socialized is indeed crucial for the future society[.So that] (, so that) the children’s ideology becomes more and more important. It can set the future direction of social development. It can not be ignored by us.

Furthermore, [the awareness's come in to being](?) is based on the [direct](direction) of adult and [understand](understanding) their own. [But by the adult education into indoctrination. It is a flexible application of the process to how to built a prefect society. If indoctrination education alone will not instill application.(这几句没看懂) So, no matter how well taught the theory, they are all useless.]

Last but not least, [I think](去掉) children (should) [though](through?) their own awareness of the community to judge what it would be better to build our community development.(这句感觉有些中文化，把through这部分状语放在句尾比较好。) Of course, this process needs the guidance of adults, rather than(rather than的意思是“而不是”，这里是不是想表示除了孩子自己的理解还需要成人的指导？那么就不能否定孩子自己的理解，所以我觉得用as well as) [to the perception by children](这里的表达应该和前面句式一致，所以去掉to). Because, after all, there is maybe the idea of radical. As a result, We can't expect children to take messages about rules or morality seriously unless they see adults taking those rules seriously in their day-to-day affairs. Certain things must be said, certain limits laid down, and certain examples set.

From what has been discuss above, we may clearly draw that the children are more and more important, they should to know how to build a better society is ground on their own apperception and the guidance of adults.

有些句子不完整，出现了几次状语直接作为一句话使用的情况。

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