[求助] 问一个作文问题，文章观点可以不要一边倒么？ [复制链接]

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发表于 2010-8-13 18:18:48 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

我想问下，人家都说托福作文观点还是一边倒的好，要么支持，要么反对。
但我想这样写可不可以啊，比如以
It is more important to reserve land for human beings than for endangered animals.
为例：

我第一段提出的论点是support human reserve more land
然后第二第三段提出human reserve more land的好处
然后第四段转折，in special condition, some animal should reserve more land。然后摆出例子。
第五段总结，重申support human reserve more land
我想问下我这样写可不可以啊

PS：附我写的文章，麻烦各位看看可不可以，谢谢啦

When it comes to the issue whether we or endangered animals should get more land, many people will stand on the side of animals because of protecting endangered spices. However, I don't consider this is a very suitable idea. In my perspective, people should reserve more land not only for the soaring population and efficient of territories utilization, but also for securing threatened creatures. I will present my following details to support my opinion.

First and foremost, people living on earth have been increasing rapidly for decades. We even could not provide enough lands for our future generations. There are six billion people in this century and scientists predict that the number will climb to 8 billion next century. More human mean more land. Granted that we could build more skyscrapers to solve this problem, but it is just a temporary method and the buildings also need land to be constructed. So for our next generations, we should keep more land.

Secondly, if people get more land, it is also positive for animals since human understand how to exploit the land efficiently. Endangered creatures, of course, are very important and we should shoulder the responsibility to protect them by no doubt. For instance, people are able to decide where should construct the human's living communities and where should establish the wild-protection distinct or zoos for these cherish animals. Human will choose the most suitable region which is advantage of living for them. On the other hand, the land will be fully utilized. So from the field of utilization of territories, we still should reserve more land.

But each coin has two sides. For some special endangered animals such as tigers which need large land instinctively, human beings should follow their living habits since if these beasts live in a small land, they will feel dangerous and fight each other for the more living areas. As a result, they will be extinct indirectly by human beings. This is not what we want to see.

Put all in a nutshell, human beings and other animals should live together harmoniously and peacefully. We all live on earth. It's our only home and we should do our best to keep the nature dynamic. And human beings could use their wisdom to make land be fully utilized——less land but more spices. This is both advantages for human and endangered animals.

[求助] 问一个作文问题，文章观点可以不要一边倒么？ [复制链接]

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