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发表于 2008-8-24 21:04:04 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Agree or disagree: Teachers should assign homework for students every day.

Is it necessary for teachers to assign homework for students everyday? As far as I am concerned, the answer is no. My point of contention stems from the particular aim of education and distinctive characteristics of students themselves.

Undeniably, doing homework usually help the students to review those have been learned in the class. For example, to fully acquire a formula in mathematics, students should do some extra exercises, generally in the form of homework. This will help them to acquire what have learned in the class, following by a probable good score in the examination.

However, what has been learned in the class is merely a portion of what the students have to learn in their life. And students who are totally occupied with homework—which is very possible if teachers of all subjects are encouraged to assign homework, will lose opportunities to do some other things which are significant for their development. For instance, they will have little time to communicate with their friends, to play basketballs or some other games with them, and to do some interesting things such as traveling together. Yet these are important for the growth of students since they have to learn how to cooperate with others so as to be more sociable when they entering into society. If education is solely focused on learning in the class, it doomed to be a failure.

In addition, students are curious creatures. They have an insatiable appetite for various kinds of knowledge. Some have a special talent in music and arts, some like mathematics, some prefer history, and some are fond of literature. All these talents and interests should be fully displayed or satisfied in order to make students happier in the future life. If all of them are obsessed with those homework, which is part of standard education, they would probably have to choose between a good score and their own interests. In that case, the possible achievement in those areas beyond the standard education might be killed in the cradle.

Therefore, I would suggest that teachers do not assign homework everyday. Instead, they should spare time for the students’ own arrangement.

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发表于 2008-8-25 10:08:47 |只看该作者

Agree or disagree: Teachers should assign homework for students every day.

Is it necessary for teachers to assign homework for students everyday? As far as I am concerned, the answer is no. My point of contention stems from the particular aim of education and distinctive characteristics of students themselves

Undeniably, doing homework usually help the students to review those have been learned in the class. For example, to fully acquire a formula in mathematics, students should do some extra exercises, generally in the form of homework. This will help them to acquire what have learned in the class, following by a probable good score in the examination.这个例子不错，我想了半天不知道举什么，学习下！
However, what has been learned in the class is merely a portion of what the students have to learn in their life. And students---students' time，主谓一致，不知道改的对不对哦。who are totally occupied with homework—which is very possible if teachers of all subjects are encouraged to assign homework, will lose opportunities to do some other things which are significant for their development. For instance, they will have little time to communicate with their friends, to play basketballs or some other games with them, and to do some interesting things such as traveling together. Yet these are important for the growth of students since they have to learn how to cooperate with others so as to be more sociable when they entering into society. If education is solely focused on learning in the class, it doomed to be a failure.这句不错！

In addition, students are curious creatures. They have an insatiable appetite for various kinds of knowledge. Some have a special talent in music and arts, some like mathematics, some prefer history, and some are fond of literature. All these talents and interests should be fully displayed or satisfied in order to make students happier in the future life. If all of them are obsessed with those homework, which is part of standard education, they would probably have to choose between a good score and their own interests. In that case, the possible achievement in those areas beyond the standard education might be killed in the cradle.思路不错
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Therefore, I would suggest that teachers do not---should not assign homework everyday. Instead, they should spare time for the students’ own arrangement.

这篇文章思路很清晰，第二段为转折段，放在第二段很好，如果放在后面就会变成结尾又否定了自己。
语言上很流利，但是感觉明显没有上一篇那么琳琅满目啊，上一篇论证得很深刻，努力！

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发表于 2008-8-25 10:20:49 |只看该作者

呵呵,上一篇花了40分钟,这片终于在30分钟完成了,情急之下就顾不上语言了,完全是第一反映,不过还是没时间检查:mad: 第一段的例子还是qawsed提醒的呢!你上次改我作文时给的建议哦!这篇就用上了,充分体现了互改的好处!:)继续一起fighting!

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发表于 2008-8-25 11:35:55 |只看该作者

我粗粗读了一遍，有一点我看得很别扭，就是一段里面两个acquire，第一个acquire可以替换成master或者其他，写得不错，加油;d:

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发表于 2008-8-25 12:48:17 |只看该作者

sharp!!写的时候没注意,后来自己也意识到了,谢谢鼓励!:loveliness:

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发表于 2008-8-25 14:16:36 |只看该作者

Is it necessary for teachers to assign homework for students everyday? As far as I am concerned, the answer is no. My point of contention stems from the particular aim of education and distinctive characteristics of students’ themselves
Undeniably, homework usually helps the students review knowledge learned in the class. For example, students should do some extra exercises, in the form of homework, to fully acquire a formula in mathematics. It can be helpful for the students to master what they have learned in the class, following by a probable good score in the examination.

However, what has been learned in the class is merely a portion of what the students have to learn in their life. And students who are merely occupied with homework—which is very possible if teachers of all subjects are encouraged to assign homework, will lose opportunities to do some other things which are significant for their development. (我觉得有点长，如果能缩短点更好) For instance, they will have little time to communicate with their friends, to play basketballs or some other games, and to do some interesting things such as traveling together. Yet these are important for the growth of students since they have to learn how to cooperate with others so as to be more sociable when entering society. If education is solely focused on learning in the class, it doomed to be a failure.
In addition, students are curious creatures. They have an insatiable appetite for various kinds of knowledge. Some have a special talent in music and arts; some like mathematics; some prefer history, and some are fond of literature. All these talents and interests should be fully displayed or satisfied in order to make students happier in future life. If all of them are obsessed with homework, which is part of standard education, they would probably have to choose between a good score and their own interests. In that case, the possible achievement in those areas beyond the standard education might be killed in the cradle.
Therefore, I would suggest that teachers do not assign homework everyday. Instead, they may spare time for the students’ own arrangement.
我觉得写得很好，有的句子有点长，如果能精炼点更好。稍微改了点。大家共勉吧！

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发表于 2008-8-25 16:34:56 |只看该作者

共勉!!:handshake

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发表于 2008-8-25 20:16:32 |只看该作者

If education is solely focused on learning in the class, it doomed to be a failure
这句是不是有语法错误呢？改成：if education solely foceses on learning in the class, it would doom to be a failure.???

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