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本帖最后由 junjunbill 于 2011-10-22 13:21 编辑

第一次进小组写作文。还不熟悉论坛里的规矩。请各位多多指教!:)
Why people attend college? People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experience, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons or examples to support your answer.
  After graduating from high school, many students have the opportunity to work directly. However, most of them, for example in our nation, have chosen to go to a college for specializing in further education. In my opinion, what they do can benefit themselves both from practical thinking and personal pursue.
  Catching a degree from college can make one more welcome in the increasingly competitive job market. During a specialized education, we can learn more that may help us in the job we take years later. For instance, applicants with mechanical degrees would learn a lot in components of all kinds of machines. They may get to know where to apply a string and what size the string is in their future mechanical designing. When a company faces one such applicant and another without these necessary experiences, we can know what their choice is.
  Additionally, highly qualified applicant coming from a college can always get a higher salary. Many international corporations would like to offer attractive opportunity for an applicant not only with excellent performance in university, but also competent in more than one language. These employers would even think highly of the employees' ability and competence if it is a well-known university. In this way, college graduates can choose a job which suits their needs and offers high salaries from large amounts of offers.
  Besides practical thinking of jobs and better life, I think there are also a number of students choosing an university to pursue their dreams of science and technology, which may begin since they were children. Imagine how pure a boy who has no interests in things except computers science is. Maybe he is called nerd. Maybe he is regarded as abnormal person. Maybe he even can't get a girl-friend. But he doesn't care. He knows what attract him are, and university may be the place where he spends his whole life. I always hold the idea that getting advance in academic areas is more meaningful than just satisfying oneself. In a sense, they work for the society and we should show respect to them, and university is the home of these people.
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发表于 2011-10-21 12:11:59 |只看该作者
各位路过的兄弟姐妹们给点建议啊:loveliness:

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我是不是不应该在这里发呢?新手不太熟悉规矩:handshake

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发表于 2011-10-21 14:40:05 |只看该作者
写作文什么的最难了

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发表于 2011-10-21 14:45:56 |只看该作者
4# 藤子村 苦于无人帮忙批改:dizzy:

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发表于 2011-10-22 16:01:01 |只看该作者
我来晚了  作文改好了就给你传上来

这是我的帖子 欢迎给我改
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1292096-13-1.html
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发表于 2011-10-22 18:06:34 |只看该作者
10.22 独立 同组的哥哥姐姐们能否告诉我怎么上传附件啊?:)
I agree with theopinion that young people in today are more independent on their parents thanin the past. I want to state my argument from both global view and specific considerationof the situation of China.

Let’s talk aboutglobal view first. We all know we live in a world where knowledge is accumulatedby multiplying and there is a trend that science and technology will coverevery part of our life. With the exploding of technology, people, especiallythe young, have new things to discover almost every day. For instance, they canride a simulated bike,
even a motorbike,on the base of computer, while young people in the past learned this with theirparents. They can find many books online effectively and quickly using asearching engine, on the other hand, young people in the past often went to abookstore accompanied by
their parents.They could even try to be a parent in an online game called The Sims. AlthoughI admit that all these advancements in technology cannot take the place ofparents’ care, they have actually changed the relationship between parents andtheir children. In some extreme situation, these technology even build a coldwall between the hearts of family, which we don’t expect to see.

The fast increasingof our knowledge will also induce a gap between the thoughts of us and ourparents, which accelerates the process of independent of young people. Most ofthe friends around me, including me, have found there are less and less topicswe can share with our parents. This is probably because we are acquiringinformation at a much higher speed than them when they were young. In China,our uncles would regard carrying on their parents’ jobs, like worker in thefactory, as their goal of future. But in today, I’m sure there are very fewamong our generation would like to have the same job as their parents do. Theyoften want to approve their ability of fighting for their own future, and independenceis usually the first step.
Finally, let’stake a specific look at China. Since 1980s, China has raised the policy thatone family can have only one child to control the population. People may thinkthis is an advantage of dependence on parents since parents pour all of theirlove to the only child they have, which may lead the child cannot leave his/herparents at any time. What I want to say is that it is right when we werechildren, who hadn’t learned basic technics of life, but when we grew up intoyoung people, the competence and difficulty in life would make us be adultssoon. In most situations, we usually tell ourselves to be grown-up without thehelp of parents or brothers. So I think this is also an acceleration of beingless dependent than young people in the past.

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发表于 2011-10-22 20:21:40 |只看该作者
改好了
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发表于 2011-10-22 21:41:46 |只看该作者
8# byebyehaku 谢谢:)第一次有人帮我改作文,我改的有什么不妥的欢迎讨论哦~

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发表于 2011-10-23 10:04:10 |只看该作者
不好意思晚了些~~
逻辑框架什么的都是不错的~~
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发表于 2011-10-23 12:53:27 |只看该作者
10# xiangtuo 谢谢啦!

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发表于 2011-10-23 18:50:23 |只看该作者
10.22独立修改,不好意思改晚了
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发表于 2011-10-24 19:07:52 |只看该作者
10.24 独立 什么时候能发附件?是二十篇自己创的帖子还是回复的帖子也算到里面呢?:mad:
I don’t agree withthe idea that we should never be rude to anyone if any possibility that maylead to our anger is not considered. In other word, I think there are manyreasons for rudeness, although it is usually regarded as very bad behavior inpeople’s mind. What’s more, sometimes, in my opinion, it doesn’t equal doingharm to others.
First, when someonebeing rude to another, he/she may want the other to be better. There is aChinese old saying that a severe teacher teaches excellent student. Let’simagine a teacher who scolds a student on class because of an unforgivablemistake he just made, and the way he speaks is not so polite, even rude. Hegets so angry because he worries about the future of the student so much, andnever wants another similar mistake again. This kind of rudeness is rudeness oflove, which is common in family education between parents and children, too. Weshould think about these necessary methods of helping a person, even it mightnot be accepted by most, when we draw the conclusion that we should never berude to anyone.
Secondly, therelationship between the two should also be considered when we judge a personfor his being impolite. Maybe being rude to the other one in a terminaterelationship like lovers, brothers, even parents has nothing to do with notrespecting or wanting the other to broke heart. It is just a way of releasingoneself through this somewhat extreme way, which is usually based on understandingand support. A officer may get too tired to being so polite to his family aftera tough day of hardworking. Perhaps he only needs a way to complain a littlebit emotionally, and he may feel a lot better after being that impolite andfeel ashamed about what he just did after a while, then apologize to the other,because he doesn’t want to hurt the one who loves him. What I want to emphasisis that everyone needs an exit of emotion, and this is usually a mutual way forthe two in the terminate relationship.

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发表于 2011-10-25 17:59:50 |只看该作者
改好了~!欢迎来改我的!!
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发表于 2011-10-25 22:01:06 |只看该作者
14# byebyehaku 谢谢,你10.24的作文好像还没写诶,写好了把链接发给我哦:)

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