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1月20日 110211NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes.

I agree with the statement that parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes. The reasons are as follow:

First, parents cannot cover everything for their children. The circumstances that the two generations live in are very different, that is why we have the phrase ‘generation gap’. Time changes, so it might be right at one time, but totally wrong at the other one. If parents force their children to obey their advice, as a result, a sad story may occur. What is more, parents are older than their children naturally. Normally, parents die before their children. How could their children do, if they are not independent enough?

Second, people can learn a better lesson from their very own mistakes. I bet every parents love their own children, they don’t want their got hurt. But as an old Chinese saying goes: You’d better teach him how to fish rather than simply give him two fish. For instance, when I learnt how to cook from my mother, she told me do not put water before the oil is hot enough, but I would easily forget this advice until I cooked myself alone.

Third, they can be tougher mentally, and not afraid to face up to mistakes if they can make mistakes and learn from their own mistakes. Nowadays, it is a social phenomenon that some young man cannot handle the pressure of failure, so they simply commit suicide. If they could learn from their previous mistakes, and reach the conclusion that failure is the mother of success. It will be a different story. And they parents will be truly proud of their children then, because that is how a mature person should do.

But every coin has two sides. Parents should not allow their children to make the same mistake too many times. Since parents are also their children’s teacher, they have the responsibility to nurture them. And when their children are confused about something, they should give them some advice.

In conclusion, although parents have more experiences and we can learn from them, it is never a bad idea to let ourselves be the master of our own.

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Have you ever had a friend who cries with you when you seem to be a loser? Have you ever had a friend who points out your mistakes even when you won a laureate? Have you ever had a friend who shares the same dream with you?

If you have never had such experiences, you would never understand that rich people can be friends with the poor ones.

When we make friends with others, we should always remember that men are created equal. And that is why the value of a person should never be measured by his/her bank account. Whether a person has compassion, faith, knowledge and many other merits should be the vital thing. Money, as an old Chinese proverb goes, is not in your hand when you came out of your mother’s belly, and cannot be brought away when you passed away. And it is universally known that money is an invention by people, but friendship is one of the most precious natural emotions. So, why let money, a man-made concept, be the barrier to a true friendship?

While we claim that men are created equal, I don’t deny that we have different backgrounds. Some people are rich, while others are poor. Some people are white, while others are black. But don’t you think it is all these differences that makes our world so various and dynamic? It is actually a piece of cake for people who are looking for a true friend to overcome all these differences. We all know Dianna, the former princess of Britain, made friends with many poor Africans.

But don’t you remember that Martin Luther King once had a dream that poor black people can be friends with the richer white people? It was a luxury dream for him at that time. However, with the development of our understanding on friendship, we know that we are all brothers and sisters sharing the same blue planet. We can be friends for rich or for poor.

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发表于 2012-1-28 00:24:12 |只看该作者

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Rather than help their children do school work, parents should encourage their children do work independently. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think parents should help their children do their school work, while others hold the opinion that parents should encourage their children do work independently. As far as I am concerned, the latter one sounds more reasonable.

To learn better, students should finish their school work independently. With no doubt, school work can consolidate the knowledge they learned in the classroom. But if they get help from their parents, they might have an illusion that even without hardworking at school, they could also earn a good mark. And that could be a vicious cycle, for they will probably not pay much attention to next day’s lessons.

School work is not just vital for students, it is also functional to teachers who assigned them. To assess students’ learning outcome, school work is always a good choice for teachers. As a teacher myself, I would rather to receive the school work made by my students themselves, than to get the so called perfect papers with the help of their parents. From the work made by themselves, teachers can get the information whether students have grasped the knowledge or not. So, if their parents help them to get an A, teachers might misunderstand the true level of their students.

Actually, helping their children do school work may not only fool the teachers, parents would also be exhausted at last. There will certainly be one day that parents don’t have the ability to help their children, but their children are way too much dependent on their parents. Not just school work do they want their parents to help, but also all sorts of problems in their daily life. How can the parents cope with this crucial situation?

Of course, there would be some school work that is too difficult for children. So why can’t parents just help them with advices or tips? But always remember, everyone is an independent person, and should be independent.

Thank you!

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2月2日 110304NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems affecting our society today could be solved within our lifetime.

Our society nowadays faces a lot of problems. We inevitably curious about the question: Can they be solved within our lifetime? Some is confident about it, while on the other hand, some hold the point that things won’t change overnight. In my opinion, the most important problems affecting our society today, such as culture, energy and health, could not be solved within our lifetime.

People are really concerned about the problem that how to balance domestic culture and imported culture. It is well known to the whole world that LiJIang, YunNan’s special culture. Tourists go to there want to peer into its extraordinary culture and enjoy the special atmosphere. But when I visited it last month, folks live in there told me that they are really worried about how to maintain their very own culture because it has shocked by imported culture, as a result, their life has changed dramatically. LiJiang is not alone, it is now actually a universal problem that many tourist attractions are losing their very own culture, to solve this problem within one generation is a mission impossible.

After talking about culture, let’s shed light on the energy issue. The main energy the crude oil has been used for more than a century, and we realized that it is not environmental friendly. Not only did it cause some brutal wars, but it is also the culprit of the greenhouse gas. It is a Satan instead of an angle, so during decades scientists came up with solar energy, nuclear energy and many other alternatives, but apparently, none of them is the Mr. Right. Although we want to solve the problem as soon as possible, but with the Copenhagen Climate Change Summit ended up with no solid result, and some countries don’t want to lose their own interests. It is not an easy one that can be solved within a short period.

As mortal beings, we never deny the fact that one day we will die. But no rational person wants to die early. That’s why we hope medical science can kill the fatal illness like cancer and HIV. Although scientists have fight for so many years and have got some progress, we are still vulnerable to these fatal diseases.

In light of the above facts, it is obvious that some most important problems affecting our society today could be not solved within our lifetime. Just like we cannot be muscular overnight.

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2月2日 110304NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems affecting our society today could be solved within our lifetime.

Our society nowadays faces a lot of problems. 应该是Nowadays,our society ....这样 We are inevitably curious about the question: Can they be solved within our lifetime? Some people is confident about it, while on the other hand, someone hold the point that things won’t change overnight. In my opinion, the most important problems affecting our society today, such as culture, energy and health 个人意见哈这几个名词列出来作为PROBLEMS 不太合适比如如果你想说能源问题是否应该写成 the lacking of energy 这样表达比较好, could not be solved within our lifetime.

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First,People are really concerned about the problem that how to balance domestic 是不是用native 更好呢 culture and imported culture. It is well known to the whole world that LiJIang, YunNan’s special culture. Tourists go to there want to peer into its extraordinary culture and enjoy the special atmosphere. But when I visited it last month, folks live in there told me that they are really worried about how to maintain 赡养？ their very own culture because it has shocked by imported culture, as a result, their life has changed dramatically. LiJiang is not alone, it is now actually a universal problem that many tourist attractions are losing their very own culture, to solve this problem within one generation is a mission impossible.

Also,after talking about culture, let’s shed light on the energy issue. The main energy the crude oil has been used for more than a century, and we realized that it is not environmental friendly. Not only did it cause some brutal wars, but it is also the culprit of the greenhouse gas. It is a Satan instead of an angle, so during decades scientists came up with solar energy, nuclear energy and many other alternatives,这个句子好哇抱走 but apparently, none of them is the Mr. Right. Although we want to solve the problem as soon as possible, but with the Copenhagen Climate Change Summit ended up with no solid result, and some countries don’t want to lose their own interests. It is not an easy ？？不明白one that can be solved within a short period.6 ~% \- ~0 I* a- E8 _5 ]7 p

Finally,as mortal beings, we never deny the fact that one day we will die. But no rational person wants to die early.我没看懂这里的意思 = = That’s why we hope medical science can kill the fatal illness like cancer and HIV. Although scientists have fight for so many years and have got some progress, we are still vulnerable to these fatal diseases.

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In light of the above facts, it is obvious that some most important problems affecting our society today could be not solved within our lifetime. Just like we cannot be muscular overnight.

行文很流畅，我想连接词可能是忘记写了，例子很充分，可以考虑适当加一加论证，每段开始结尾最好亮一亮自己的观点，然后再上例子一起加油哇
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Our society nowadays faces a lot of problems. We inevitably curious about the question: Can they be solved within our lifetime? Some is confident about it, while on the other hand, some hold the point that things won’t change overnight. In my opinion, the most important problems affecting our society today, such as culture, energy and health, could not be solved within our lifetime.

People are really concerned about the problem that how to balance domestic culture and imported culture. It is well known to the whole world that LiJIang, YunNan’s special culture(own special culture). Tourists go to there want to peer into its extraordinary culture and enjoy the special atmosphere. But when I visited it (there) last month, folks live in there (folks, living in there, told…觉得这里应该改成插入语比较好) told me that they are really worried about how to maintain their very own culture because it has shocked by imported culture, as a result, their life has changed dramatically. LiJiang is not alone, it is now actually a universal problem that many tourist attractions are losing their very own culture, to solve this problem within one generation is a mission impossible.
After talking about culture, let’s shed light on the energy issue. The main energy the crude oil has been used for more than a century, and we realized that it is not environmental friendly (and nonrenewable). Not only did it cause some brutal wars,(其实我觉得这块应该再加一下逻辑推理，contesting for the oil and distributing unfairly cause the wars) but it is also the culprit of the greenhouse gas. It is a Satan instead of an angle, so during decades scientists came up with solar energy, nuclear energy and many other alternatives, but apparently, none of them is the Mr. Right. Although we want to solve the problem as soon as possible, but with the Copenhagen Climate Change Summit ended up with no solid result, and some countries don’t want to lose their own interests. It is not an easy one that can be solved within a short period.

As mortal beings, we never deny the fact that one day we will die. But no rational person wants to die early. That’s why we hope medical science can kill the fatal illness like cancer and HIV. Although scientists have fight for so many years and have got some progress (breakthrough可以当同义替换), we are still vulnerable to(when exposed to) these fatal diseases.

In light of the above facts, it is obvious that some most important problems affecting our society today could be not solved within our lifetime. Just like we cannot be muscular overnight.
楼主真心写作大牛~语言很漂亮，有各种比喻。结构很清晰。小小的建议，有些地方逻辑推理有些不充分，可能你觉得很明白，但是ETS考官。。naive你懂得。总之很不错！向楼主学习~！

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本帖最后由 alexfanfan 于 2012-2-4 22:24 编辑

2月4日 100619NA When people need to discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others, some people prefer to use e-mail or text messaging, other like to use telephone or voice messaging. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer.

Communicate with other, especially when you need to discuss upsetting or controversial problems, is always good for you. With the development of technology, we have lots of ways to do it. Some people prefer to use e-mail or text messaging, other like to use telephone or voice messaging. In my opinion, no matter how we communicate, it is important for us to discuss with others under these circumstance. I will try to demonstrate my point in the following paragraphs.

It is our nature that we feel depressed when we are upsetting or facing a dilemma. So, the sooner we could get an advice from our friends or family members, the better we might feel. As a result, we resort to a faster way to communicate by using telephone or voice messaging. By doing this, what’s more, we can speak to them directly. And we know that verbal communication is easier to vent our emotion. Before we make spill the milk, we might get a hand to help us to hold the bowl tight.

Speaking is one of the many methods for us to communicate. Writing is also one of them. Actually, by using e-mail or text messaging is writing down how you feel and the perspectives of yourself on the specific problem. Compared with speaking, as we all know, writing is more logical. As a result, it helps us to comb through the problem. Maybe we can get the answer we need even before replies are sent back by our friends. With no doubt, writing cannot give us the relieve that chatting can bring. But on the other hand, it can foster us the merit of patience.

E-mail or telephone, is really not a true or false problem, instead they are a twin and a pair of gift for us to communicate. Why shouldn’t we try both methods in order to get the best outcome.

求狂拍。。。。。这篇文章写得我好崩溃。。。

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本帖最后由 loveinwc 于 2012-2-5 21:59 编辑

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您二月四日的独立。。。汗，为啥连作文里的字色都不能加了？？逼迫我用附件呐。。。

高人对不起，我晚交了………感觉这篇独立您写的轻松而且游刃有余，我简直想飙泪啊，水平初级……所以改得不好，您千万别在意………

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before we make the milk spill, we might get a hand to help us hold the bowl tight.
这句话其实我是这么想的：It's too late to cry over spilled milk. 囧

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