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63:There is little justification for society to make extraordinary efforts—especially at a great cost in money and jobs—to save endangered animal or plant species.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

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TS: Although some people shirk the resposibility of the extinction of species
to the rule of best survival, it's still necessary to protect endanger animals
and plants in consideration of the distinguish of species would disturb the
balance of ecology and decrease the richness of the sources.

ts1:Human beings are indifferent with the disapperence of species because of
the their opinion of natural selection while it is the people's activities
that are always the leading consequence of killing species.
人类因为一些利益而大肆捕杀野生动物或者偷采野生植物，导致它们的种群数量大大减少。人类活动将生物的栖息地范围骤然缩小并使得剩余的变得支离破碎。人类对环境的破坏也直接污染了生物的生存环境。
然后举例展开：1，比如对象牙的谋取导致大象数量锐减，对鱼翅的需求导致很多鲨鱼被残忍杀害。2.在濒临灭绝的鸟类中, 有82% 的鸟类的灭绝危机主要来源于栖息地的丧失3.白鳍豚(white-flag dolphin)作为食物链顶端的生物功能性灭绝，是由于污染的原因。

ts2:The disapperance of species weaken the balance of ecological system.
在生态系统中，物种之间都是通过食物链、食物网联系在一起的，如果这个食物链、食物网中的某一组成部分缺失了，会对其他的物种造成一定的影响。生态系统确实自己有一定的自我修护性，但是如果人类活动使得食物链食物网中的很多物种灭绝，严重破坏生态系统的稳定性，那么生态系统就会受到不可逆转的损伤。例如，人们对海洋的过度利用导致大部分的珊瑚礁死亡，从而直接导致依赖于珊瑚礁生存的动植物的灭绝，从而严重影响靠捕食这些动植物的其他动物的数量减少。

ts3:Nature is the abundant storage of all kinds of sources, the endangered species can be the potential sources of valuable genes.Once they were distinguished, people may spend longer time and effort to find the solutions to some certain problems.
比如人们从杨柳中提取出阿司匹林的有效成分，而阿司匹林止痛消肿的功效让很多人远离痛苦甚至避免死亡，那你怎么知道灭绝的植物是不是另一个杨柳呢？

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发表于 2014-12-4 08:19:53 |只看该作者

碎叶流光发表于 2014-12-4 00:11
TS: Although some people shirk the resposibility of the extinction of species
to the rule of best ...

我没有看到TS和ts123之间明显的呼应关系
注意原题讨论的是如何justify efforts to save endangered species 并且尤其指出在经济（金钱和就业方面）的损失因此你的几个分论点应该回应这个问题
你的ts1似乎没有直接回应经济问题
ts2 讲生态平衡本来和经济是有关的但是你没有联系上
ts3 第三个点指出生物多样性对医药产业的意义是很好的例子但是也没有直接回应 economics

所以总的来说你需要从经济的方面justify the efforts to save endangered species
当然你也可以从其他方面justify 但是你必须首先指出仅仅从经济方面考虑是不够的并提出你认为重要的其他角度

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-12-4 08:19
我没有看到TS和ts123之间明显的呼应关系
注意原题讨论的是如何justify efforts to save endangered spe ...

Introduction and TS: Overused chemical pesticides wind into the river and ocean at last through the hydrologic cycle and putthe aquatic species at the risk of dangerous living environment .The development of urbanization shinks and fragmented the habitats of the terrestial organism and dramatically lessen the density of population.Under such circumstances, can we shirk the resposibility of the extinction of species to the rule of best survival and unwilling to make some economical efforts? And protecting species may as well create much more value by digging out their potential useage while the opposite behavior will weaken the balance of ecosystem,for the consequence of which people will pay even more. Besides, the investment of the government on species protection has a positive effect on creating a certain amount of jobs.

ts1:Nature is the abundant storage of all kinds of sources, the endangered species can possess the potential value what we need to use urgently. Once they were distinguished, people may spend longer time and effort to find the solutions to some certain problems.
比如人们从杨柳中提取出阿司匹林的有效成分，而阿司匹林止痛消肿的功效让很多人远离痛苦甚至避免死亡，节省了大批的财力物力。那你怎么知道灭绝的植物是不是另一个杨柳呢？

ts2:The disapperance of species weaken the balance of ecological system if we don't cast a eye over the endangered species, the reaults of which always exasperate the mistake for which human being need to pay more while we are all connected.
在生态系统中，物种之间都是通过食物链、食物网联系在一起的，如果这个食物链、食物网中的某一组成部分缺失了，会对其他的物种造成一定的影响。生态系统确实自己有一定的自我修护性，但是如果人类活动使得食物链食物网中的很多物种灭绝，严重破坏生态系统的稳定性，那么生态系统就会受到不可逆转的损伤。例如，人们对海洋的过度利用导致大堡礁的珊瑚礁大量死亡，从而直接导致依赖于珊瑚礁生存的动植物的灭绝，从而严重影响靠捕食这些动植物的其他动物的数量减少，这在一方面减少了当地政府的税收，另一方面当地政府需要大量的财力用于修复和还原被破坏的生态系统。

ts3:As one of the three important factor to push the economy froward, governmentinvestment is a method to creat the jobs .
政府在保护濒危物种这种公益事业上的投能够提供一定程度的就业岗位，促进社会资金的流动以及财富的分配。例如罗斯福新政（The New Deal）中，有一项是组织男青年种树，这就在保护生态环境的同时，提供了大量的就业岗位，是美国更快走出大萧条的阴影。

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