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本帖最后由 onebelieve 于 2017-11-14 09:33 编辑

大家好，我还是One。

我是在2016年3月26日的考试中第一次写作拿到满分，之后又考了3次都是满分。

另外需要注明，我2015年的GRE写作拿了5分，后来又拿了5.5分。但是我用GRE的作文思路写托福，就是2015年11月我口语拿满分的那次考试，作文只有27。
后来托福作文满分之后，用托福作文的思路去写GRE issue，分数只有惨不忍睹的4.5，说明Issue的部分是拿了3分的，最多也只有4分，argu部分我有比较大的把握是满分。
所以我个人认为GRE和托福的思路是不一样的！看到论坛上很多人说，可以用GRE来写托福，我提出一下我个人的经验。

昨天有小伙伴发信息，想看写作的示范，因为我的重心主要在口语上，所以写作还没有开始系统的整理。
因此我决定换一个形式，大家想要讨论哪篇，我就写这一篇。大家可以在我的个人平台上给我留言，大家一起讨论，共同进步！

对于不尊重作者劳动成果，只想看范文的伸手党童鞋，不回复任何提名

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TPO 30 独立写作

本帖最后由 onebelieve 于 2017-11-14 12:54 编辑

昨天的小伙伴提名的TPO 30 独立写作：

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

After about 6 years at home, playing with mud, and 16 years in school, struggling with textbooks, most of us will finally step into our career. It is safe to say that our job is the eternal subject of our lives since job accompanies us for the longest time. Thus, it is really common, normal or judicious to discuss what kind of job suits us better. Of course, people with different perspectives treat this question with different understanding. But for me, I shall not agree with the standpoint in the prompt. In other word, a relatively more frequent work schedule with shorter hours in each shift is better.

Firstly, working for a long time in a row is bad for our body. Just like we do not put the food we need to consume each day or each week in one single meal, we should also not put the whole amount of tasks for a week in three days. Once you overeat foods, your stomach, colon and other systems or organs of your body will be pushed into excess stress whose negative influence will accumulate, even causing serious diseases. Similarly, if you always work for a long time without appropriate rest or exercise, you may first feel stong uncomfortable feelings due to muscle strain which can be really irksome. And then, acuter malady may come after you and you can never get rid of it. This undesirable situation should be avoided instead of being encouraged.

Besides, there can be emergencies or regular events that needed to be handled on time. A man in financial industry will seldomly or never think of the first suggestion. Since on every workday, the transaction of stocks, gold or other financial product happens for millions of time, a financial practitioner needs to have the professionality to catch the information and analyze it timely. If he/she waited till his/her workday to finish the work mentioned before, then probally he/she would not have been enrolled in the first place or could be fired immediately. After all, time is equal to money in finance. On the other hand, even you are in some industries with lower intensity, you are also not equipped with the superpower to forecast that the events related to your work will only show up in the three days you pick as your workday. In this case, maybe you have to be recalled when you are supposed to be off work. That is definitely not what you preconceive in mind.

The disadvantages of the first kind of work shift are more obvious in the employers' perspective, meaning that even if someone likes it, the possibility of achieving it is perilous close to zero. In conclusion, for the sake of both our body and our job prospect, I would like to choose the second suggestion and stand in the opposite side of the prompt.

PS，大家如果想顺便练下听力的话，我也录了英文朗读录音：

TPO 30 独立写作英文朗读录音

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发表于 2017-11-14 10:09:40 |只看该作者

可以加点分析吗

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发表于 2017-11-15 06:40:43 |只看该作者

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发表于 2017-11-15 06:49:45 |只看该作者

我来试试一个上周北美的考题，可能记得不太清楚了。大意为：
In the coming semester, You will need to register new courses. If a professor just received an award for his achievement of research, and the other one is highly rated in a recent survey of the most popular professor. Which one are you going to choose? Why

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