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题目:The following was written as a part of an application for a small business loan by a group of developers in the city of Monroe.
"A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, our proposed club, the C Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer, several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight. Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. It is clear that the C Note cannot help but make money."
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Before giving a loan to this group of developers in the city of Monroe, the evidence given in the argument should be examined from several other angles: Whether the jazz is popular in Monroe only considering the evidences provided? Whether a jazz club would be popular and profitable without examining other factors?
Firstly, just because the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away do not warrant the fact that the C Note would have the local market all to itself. There may be a club in near city which has great influence on the jazz fans in Monroe. Furthermore, it is entirely possible that some businessmen program to establish a large club in Monroe or near city, which would compete for market in Monroe with C Note.
Furthermore, it is an arbitrary conclusion that jazz is popular in Monroe. The several evidences provided are unconvincing. Firstly, the fact that over 100, 000 people attended Monroe’s jazz festival last summer dose not ensure the popularity in Monroe, since it is entirely possible that the majority of people attending festival are living in out-of-town. What is more, the fact that several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe lends no strong support the applicant’s assertion. Perhaps these jazz musicians are playing in other cities and living in Monroe for the enjoyable climate, not because of the love in jazz of people in Monroe.
The argument appears to assume that the typical jazz fan in Monroe would spend close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment just because this is an average nationwide. Yet this might not be the case, for a variety of possible reasons. Perhaps the residents in Monroe are poor and receiving the governments’ assistance, and thus could not afford to attend the jazz club. Perhaps
people in this area are prudent and do not want to waste money in the jazz entertainment. Without ruling out such possibilities, the author can not justifiably conclude that the C Note can not help but make money.
Even we conceded the fact that the jazz is popular in Monroe and jazz fan in Monroe spends a lot of money in jazz entertainment, this does not necessarily mean that it is a wise venture to found an jazz club. For example, do the fans spend the majority of the money in club but not in other activities? Will the local ratio program compete with the jazz club?
In conclusion, the argument is not convincing as it stands. To make it logically acceptable, the applicant should show that the jazz is really popular in Monroe and an jazz club would be welcome. Additionally, the applicant should prove his/her credibility. Only with more convincing evidence could the fund could be loaned to the applicant. |
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