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发表于 2005-7-11 09:45:21 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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Practicality is now our great idol, which all powers and talents must serve. Anything that is not obviously practical has little value in today's world.

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The author claims that practicality is the great idol and all powers and talents must sever it. What is more, anything without obvious practice has little value today. I tend to disagree with what he says. Although practicality is important, and what people should sever, it is the only criterion of the value.

Practicality plays a key role in people's lives, since anything without practicality will be hardly accepted. Without practicality, anything with effective support of theories can do nothing but thwart the development of the society. The experience of China is a case in point. After war, Chinese Chairman Mao processed the planned economic all over China, which was supported well by Marxism. However, the planned economic was not viable since China has not developed enough yet. At last, the market economic is accepted in China, and the practice testifies that it is the only way through which China can develop.

Nevertheless, practice cannot be the only criterion of the value of everything. When we face some difficulties that require us to give up our principles and surround to the practice, it is not always recommended for us to do so. Consider a general was catched by the enemies; he would live if he told the secret of his army to his enemies. However, it is against his duty as a soldier. He may not be scalded or punished but the practicality here is not the only thing he should consider. Or consider a man has little money to live no to say support his family and could not find any job even though he has tried his best, should he steal or rob from others? In this case, not only the principle but also the law will prevent him from doing so.

Further more, there are things without obvious practice but indeed are practical and with great value. If we do not value them because of the unobvious practice, we will lose a lot. When Einstein first published the Theory of Relativity, everyone regarded him mad since they could not understand it and thought it unpractical at all. At that time, no one can imagine that it will bring the great revolution to the field of science and technology, but it is valuable. It is hard for us to predict the value of many inventories and ideas of science and society alike, whether we understand them or not.

In sum, we must underscore practicality but must not consider it as the only way to evaluate everything, and we should not give up things which seem unpractical without thinking it thoroughtly.

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发表于 2005-7-11 21:27:46 |只看该作者

先up，吃点东西后帮你拍

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发表于 2005-7-11 22:48:55 |只看该作者

The author claims that practicality is the great idol and all powers and talents must sever it. What is more, anything without obvious practice has little value today. I tend to disagree with what he says. Although practicality is important, and what people should sever, it is the only criterion of the value.

Practicality plays a key role in people's lives, since anything without practicality will be hardly accepted. Without practicality, anything with effective support of theories can do nothing but thwart the development of the society. The experience of China is a case in point. After war[这个war还是说明白,要不就用After the foundation of the People’s Republic of China.], Chinese Chairman Mao processed the planned economic all over China, which was supported well by Marxism. However, the planned economic was not viable since China has not developed enough yet. At last, the market economic is accepted in China, and the practice testifies that it is the only way through [in] which China can develop.
[这个例子举的不太好,以这种描述,老美肯定很云里雾里的,毕竟他们可能不是很了解中国的历史,而且这里还涉及价值观的问题,我觉的除了涉及唯物主义哲学被东西方都接受的以外,没有十足的把握不要随便拿出来Marxism, 很难写好. 给你一段从微软百科全书上找的例子。我觉得这种中国的例子一定要看老外的表达方式，我们自己很难说的清楚。
Beginning in the mid-1950s chairman Mao advocated the rapid formation of agricultural communes, arguing that the energy of the people could help China achieve a high tide of Communist development. This ideology exploded in the Great Leap Forward in 1958. Mao called upon all Chinese to engage in zealous physical labor to transform the economy and overtake the West in industrial and agricultural production within a few years. Afraid to disappoint their leaders, peasants falsified grain production numbers. Several poor harvests caused massive famine and the deaths of millions of people throughout China. 我想你本来也是要用大跃进Great Leap Forward的例子吧?稍稍修改几句把它拉到不重视实际的角度一总结就是很好的例证了]

Nevertheless, practice cannot be the only criterion of the value of everything. When we face some difficulties that require us to give up our principles and surround [surrounding] to the practice, it is not always recommended for us to do so. Consider a general was catched [caught] by the enemies; he would live if he told the [military] secret of his army to his enemies. However, it is against his duty as a soldier. He may not be scalded or punished but the practicality here is not the only thing he should consider. Or consider a man has little money to live no to say support his family and could not find any job even though he has tried his best, [这句话语病比较严重哦] should he steal or rob from [of] others? In this case, not only the [moral] principle but also the law will prevent him from doing so. [这一段的出发点不是很好论证，为什么不从理想的角度去论证呢？想知道你想表达的是什么意思？]

Further more, there are things without obvious practice but indeed are practical and with [of] great value.[这句的表达不是很地道,看了后面的论证,你的意思是现在可能没有明显的实用价值,将来会有.我的拙见:there are things that may have no obvious practical value but indeed can be put into practice in the future] .If we do not value them because of the unobvious practice, we will lose a lot. When Einstein first published the Theory of Relativity, everyone regarded him mad since they could not understand it and thought it [was] unpractical at all. At that time, no one can imagine that it will bring the great revolution to the field of science and technology, but it is valuable. It is hard for us to predict the value of many inventories and ideas of science and society alike, whether we understand them or not. [爱因斯坦的例子有点牵强，再找找吧]

In sum, we must underscore practicality but must not consider it as the only way to evaluate everything, and we should not give up things which seem unpractical without thinking it thoroughtly.

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发表于 2005-7-11 23:03:51 |只看该作者

今天就开始有考前综合症了，你知道上财那边有没有什么便宜的招待所可以住的？我学校离那边太远了，要提前一天住过去的。

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发表于 2005-7-12 08:43:33 |只看该作者

The author claims that practicality is the great idol and all powers and talents must sever it. What is more, anything without obvious practice has little value today. I tend to disagree with what he says. Although practicality is important, and what people should sever, it is the only criterion of the value.

Practicality plays a key role in people's lives, since anything without practicality will be hardly accepted. Without practicality, anything with effective support of theories can do nothing but thwart the development of the society. The experience of China is a case in point. After war[这个war还是说明白,要不就用After the foundation of the People’s Republic of China. （不错不错，一语惊醒梦中人，一直觉得不妥，可也没想到什么办法）,Chinese Chairman Mao processed the planned economic all over China, which was supported well by Marxism. However, the planned economic was not viable since China has not developed enough yet. At last, the market economic is accepted in China, and the practice testifies that it is the only way through [in] which China can develop.
[这个例子举的不太好,以这种描述,老美肯定很云里雾里的,毕竟他们可能不是很了解中国的历史,而且这里还涉及价值观的问题,我觉的除了涉及唯物主义哲学被东西方都接受的以外,没有十足的把握不要随便拿出来Marxism, 很难写好. 给你一段从微软百科全书上找的例子。我觉得这种中国的例子一定要看老外的表达方式，我们自己很难说的清楚。（本来是想写市场经济和计划经济的，我觉得很多时候举例子都会想到用中国的，不知道到时候怎么办，是不是只能现在找好例子到时用？不能现场想？我只希望老美遇到看不懂的例子时认为是自己孤陋，和欧阳修一样）Beginning in the mid-1950s chairman Mao advocated the rapid formation of agricultural communes, arguing that the energy of the people could help China achieve a high tide of Communist development. This ideology exploded in the Great Leap Forward in 1958. Mao called upon all Chinese to engage in zealous physical labor to transform the economy and overtake the West in industrial and agricultural production within a few years. Afraid to disappoint their leaders, peasants falsified grain production numbers. Several poor harvests caused massive famine and the deaths of millions of people throughout China. 我想你本来也是要用大跃进Great Leap Forward的例子吧?稍稍修改几句把它拉到不重视实际的角度一总结就是很好的例证了] （决定下微软百科了！！！）

Nevertheless, practice cannot be the only criterion of the value of everything. When we face some difficulties that require us to give up our principles and surround [surrounding] to the practice, it is not always recommended for us to do so. Consider a general was catched [caught] by the enemies; he would live if he told the [military] secret of his army to his enemies. However, it is against his duty as a soldier. He may not be scalded or punished but the practicality here is not the only thing he should consider. Or consider a man has little money to live no[t] to say support his family[,] and he could not find any job even though he has tried his best, [这句话语病比较严重哦](这样改了以后呢) should he steal or rob from [of] others? In this case, not only the [moral] principle but also the law will prevent him from doing so. [这一段的出发点不是很好论证，为什么不从理想的角度去论证呢？想知道你想表达的是什么意思？] （是想说有时候不能因为现实而放弃原则，好像有点偏了）

Further more, there are things without obvious practice but indeed are practical and with [of] great value.[这句的表达不是很地道,看了后面的论证,你的意思是现在可能没有明显的实用价值,将来会有.我的拙见:there are things that may have no obvious practical value but indeed can be put into practice in the future] .If we do not value them because of the unobvious practice, we will lose a lot. When Einstein first published the Theory of Relativity, everyone regarded him mad since they could not understand it and thought it [was] unpractical at all. At that time, no one can imagine that it will bring the great revolution to the field of science and technology, but it is valuable. It is hard for us to predict the value of many inventories and ideas of science and society alike, whether we understand them or not. [爱因斯坦的例子有点牵强，再找找吧] （刚写完就想到录音机的例子，本来是用来录遗言，而被看不起，后来显示了更大的作用）

In sum, we must underscore practicality but must not consider it as the only way to evaluate everything, and we should not give up things which seem unpractical without thinking it thoroughtly.

后天就要去上海了，好害怕啊
勉强写完的作文就是这样的

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发表于 2005-7-12 09:01:05 |只看该作者

（本来是想写市场经济和计划经济的，我觉得很多时候举例子都会想到用中国的，不知道到时候怎么办，是不是只能现在找好例子到时用？不能现场想？我只希望老美遇到看不懂的例子时认为是自己孤陋，和欧阳修一样）

举计划经济的例子不好吧，你这里是要突出实用性和联系实际。计划经济在建国初还是有实用性的，那你要引用也得注意一下自己的点。其实除了例子本身合不合适，还要做些处理为我所用，不能简单地列出来。

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发表于 2005-7-12 09:05:25 |只看该作者

consider a man has little money to live no[t] to say support his family[,] and he could not find any job even though he has tried his best,

还是有点问题，应该是consider a man who has little money to live on and support his family，

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发表于 2005-7-12 09:12:37 |只看该作者

是想说有时候不能因为现实而放弃原则，好像有点偏了

也不能说是偏了，只是说的在准确一点，不能为了眼前的现实利益放弃原则和信仰。这样还和后面一段形成了正反论证，文章反而更有说服力哦。使用的时候就要好好想想怎么用e文往这个意思上说，还得说的让人信服。
例如：a general的例子，According to pragmatism, he can conserve his life if he told the enemies the military secrets of his troops, but that do damage his work ethic as a soldier.

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