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发表于 2005-8-2 19:43:56 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

140The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.
"During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."

  In this argument the author made the concludes that in order to prevent Professor Thomas from leaving , we should raise her annual salary and promote her to Department Chairperson. To prove this conclusion, the author pointed out that Professor Thomas is very popular at the most largest class of university and the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. However this argument suffers from a series of problems, which rends it unpersuasive as it stands.

  To begin with, there is no sufficient evidence to prove that Professor Thomas is worth her annual salary of $50,000. Although author points out that she is popular in her class, there is no information about the way of surveying in this argument. Possibly just few students are asked about their attitude to Professor Thomas, which is not representative. And it is also possible that students do not answer the real feeling themselves and lie because they are fear of dislike of teachers or something others. Moreover, even assuming Professor Thomas is well worth her savory, still no evidence to prove that she should get more money every year, because maybe some other teachers or professors did better than her.

  Secondly, the trend that the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years may change in future. No evidence to prove that this trend will continue and it is possible that in the next years Professor Thomas will bring no coin at all to university. So that we can not get a convincing conclusion based on this trend which may change at any time.

  Thirdly, even assuming Professor Thomas is the best professor in university, it is not equal that she is also good at management. Without a survey about Professor Thomas’ ability on management, we can not accept the conclusion that she is suitable for the position of the Department Chairperson. Possibility that Department Chairperson has not any experience on administering and that may bring damage to the operation of university if she gets this promotion.

  The last but not the least, the author got the conclusion rudely, because even if Professor Thomas do not have any risen on salary or promotion, she possibly will not leave Elm City University. It is entirely possible that Professor Thomas does not consider these at all or she are satisfied with what she has now. So that this conclusion the author draw without convincing evidences is questionable.

  To sum up, this argument suffers several problems, which made the conclusion doubtable. To strengthen the statement of the argument, we need a detailed and representative survey about the popularity of Professor Thomas and whether she is satisfied with what she gets now. And to evaluate the argument, we also need some information about Professor Thomas’s ability on management. Moreover, without ruling out the other competitors, we still can not draw the conclusion that Professor Thomas should get this salary risen and a promotion to Department Chairperson.

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140The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.
"During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."

  In this argument the author made the concludes that in order to prevent Professor Thomas from leaving , we should raise her annual salary and promote her to Department Chairperson. To prove this conclusion, the author pointed out that Professor Thomas is very popular at the most largest class of university and the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. However this argument suffers from a series of problems, which rends it unpersuasive as it stands.

  To begin with, there is no sufficient evidence to prove that Professor Thomas is worth her annual salary of $50,000. Although author points out that she is popular in her class, there is no information about the way of surveying文中没有提到survey啊，这里放了个严重的错误以至底下攻击无说服力啊in this argument. Possibly just few students are asked about their attitude to Professor Thomas, which is not representative. And it is also possible that students do not answer the real feeling themselves and lie because they are fear of dislike of teachers or something others. Moreover, even assuming Professor Thomas is well worth her savory, still no evidence to prove that she should get more money every year, because maybe some other teachers or professors did better than her.这句也有问题啊，首先更中心句无关，其次最好是另开一段，否则有思维逻辑不清之嫌。
  Secondly, the trend that the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years may change in future. No evidence to prove that this trend will continue and it is possible that in the next years Professor Thomas will bring no coin at all to university. So that we can not get a convincing conclusion based on this trend which may change at any time. 这段是抓住了错误，不过论证很苍白，没有展开，只是说出了错误  Thirdly, even assuming Professor Thomas is the best professor in university, it is not equal that she is also good at management. Without a survey about Professor Thomas’ ability on management, we can not accept the conclusion that she is suitable for the position of the Department Chairperson. Possibility that Department Chairperson has not any experience on administering and that may bring damage to the operation of university if she gets this promotion.
感觉还是论证太苍白了
The last but not the least, the author got the conclusion rudely, because even if Professor Thomas do not have any risen on salary or promotion, she possibly will not leave Elm City University. It is entirely possible that Professor Thomas does not consider these at all or she are satisfied with what she has now. So that this conclusion the author draw without convincing evidences is questionable. 折断抓住了主要的错误，赞一个
  To sum up, this argument suffers several problems, which made the conclusion doubtable. To strengthen the statement of the argument, we need a detailed and representative survey 还是那句话about the popularity of Professor Thomas and whether she is satisfied with what she gets now. And to evaluate the argument, we also need some information about Professor Thomas’s ability on management. Moreover, without ruling out the other competitors这个前文没提到啊，再说也没关系啊, we still can not draw the conclusion that Professor Thomas should get this salary risen and a promotion to Department Chairperson.
总的来说，没有深刻抓住文中的错误，其实文中最主要的错误是1.受欢迎，其中一个证据是班级最大，但不足以证明受欢迎，常识告诉我们这两者没关系，可能原因是学这门专业的人多啊，还可能是其他专业被迫选修他的课程。2. 有好的教学能力和科研能力，证据刚过去的两年研究经费超过了工资，这边才是要说明前2年是这样可能以后会变，再说了，超过工资也未必就是研究的好嘛，还有教学好，没有证据啊。3. 没有提高工资及升为系主任会走，这只是作者的主观猜测，没证据，可能对工资和提升不看重，还可能他根本就无系主任方面的管理经验，即使科研及教学作的好。
总之，要抓住最主要的错误，还有论证一定要有力，就是有说服力，为什么是这样
不罗嗦了，让我们一起继续努力吧我爱寄托

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