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发表于 2006-1-12 00:49:28 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

argument47 Scientists studying historical weather patterns have discovered that in
the mid-sixth century, Earth suddenly became significantly cooler.
Although few historical records survive from that time, some accounts
found both in Asia and Europe mention a dimming of the sun and extremely
cold temperatures. Either a huge volcanic eruption or a large meteorite
colliding with Earth could have created a large dust cloud throughout
Earth's atmosphere that would have been capable of blocking enough
sunlight to lower global temperatures significantly. A large meteorite
collision, however, would probably create a sudden bright flash of light,
and no extant historical records of the time mention such a flash. Some
surviving Asian historical records of the time, however, mention a loud
boom that would be consistent with a volcanic eruption. Therefore, the
cooling was probably caused by a volcanic eruption.

summery:
1. "some accounts" which argued dimming sun may not accurate
2. although accurate, a large dust cloud may not blocking sunlight, and may not lower temperatures
3. large meteorite may not create sudden bright flash of light
4. "no extant records"
5. Asian records--> Asian, Europe
6. loud boom may not represent volcannic eruption

This argument deals with the reason for suddenly dropping of temperature in mid-sixth century. The author argues that this phenomenon could be explained by two reasons, known as volcanic eruption and meteorite collision. While there is no evidence to prove the collision exists, the plausible reason would be volcanic eruption. However, there are some logic holes according to the inference.

First of all, the significantly cold weather, studied by scientist according to some accounts would be incorrected. As the arguemnt says, there is few historical records survive from mid-sixth century, the accounts referenced by the scholars may be inaccurate and wrong-guided. Withoug enough evidence, we could be argue such an important event occured at that time. Furthermore, these accounts only observe in Asia and Europe, which could not represent the whole world for the lowering of temperature. In fact, if the suddenly cold temperature really occures, the influence of many aspects of earth, such as glacier, ocean and human life would so significant that it is ridiculous to find few records to depict.

Although the cold temperature had really existed, the author also made a mistake to argue only the dust could blocking sunlight as well as the lower temperatures only according to sunlight blocked. Firstly, there would be other factors to block the sunlight shinning through, such as accumulation of clouds, the moon moving between the Sun and the Earth, or some other objects impeted shinning. It would be inaccurate to point out that lacking sunlight is according to the dusts encompassed Earth's atmosphere generating by volcano eruption and meteorite collision. Secondly, the author infers the lower temperatures by giving evidence of the sunlight being blocked. The same mistake arouses that there also could be other elements to cause to lower temperatures other than the blocked sunlight. In this case, we could find while laking enough evidence, the dusts around Earth could not be the only reason for causing cold temperature.

Furthermore, assuming that the dusts caused lowering the temperature, volcano eruption and meteorite collision may not make the dusts and meteorite also may not create bright flash of light. This argument point out these conclution without quoting convincing documents or citing effective scientific studies. It would not likely to make us to believe this inference only according to the authors' wondering. Thus, the volcano eruption and meteorite collision could not be argued as the reason for the dusts and meterorite also could not radiate such bright flash of light. The author also points out that there are no records to prove the bright flash of light occured, however we could not simplity to make a conclution these phenomenon has not occured while not finding the evidence to prove it. It is probably the recored really exsisted, and not being discovered by humans.

The volcano eruption, agree with the authors, to be the reason for the lower temperare may not accurate. Firstly, the phenomenon is only descreibed in Asia, while are too restrictive to argue the weather alternative of the whold world. In fact, only Asia's volcano eruption may be too little-effected to cause the Earth's lower temperature. Secondly, the loud boom recored may not caused by the volcannic eruption. That is other than the volcannos, many facors also has ability to make loud boom. Thus, the volcannic eruption is not likely to occured.

In sum, this argument makes too much assuption to looking out the reasons for the lower temperature, which may not existed. To make the conclution convinced, the author should give enough evidence to illustrate the scentific events.

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发表于 2006-1-12 17:52:16 |只看该作者

呵呵,是上次弄得我头痛的那只阿狗
来顶顶,改了发上来~~~

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发表于 2006-1-13 20:04:26 |只看该作者

This argument deals with the reason for suddenly dropping of temperature in mid-sixth century. The author argues that this phenomenon could be explained by two reasons, known as volcanic eruption and meteorite collision. While there is no evidence to prove the collision exists, the plausible reason would be volcanic eruption. However, there are some logic holes according to the inference.

First of all, the significantly cold weather, studied by scientist according to some accounts would be incorrected（incorrect））. As the arguemnt says, there is few historical records survive from mid-sixth century, the accounts referenced by the scholars may be inaccurate and wrong-guided. Without enough evidence, we could be(not) argue such an important event occured at that time. Furthermore, these accounts only observe in Asia and Europe, which could not represent the whole world for the lowering of temperature. In fact, if the suddenly cold temperature really (occurred), the influence of many aspects of earth, such as glacier, ocean and human life would (be) so significant that it is ridiculous to find few records to depict.
缺少证据证明气候确实变冷
Although the cold temperature had really existed, the author also made a mistake to argue only the dust could blocking sunlight as well as the lower temperatures only according to sunlight blocked. Firstly, there would be other factors to block the sunlight shinning through, such as accumulation of clouds, the moon moving between the Sun and the Earth, or some other objects impeded shinning. It would be inaccurate to point out that lacking sunlight is according to the dusts encompassed Earth's atmosphere generating by volcano eruption and meteorite collision. Secondly, the author infers the lower temperatures by giving evidence of the sunlight being blocked. The same mistake arouses that there also could be other elements to cause to lower temperatures other than the blocked sunlight. In this case, we could find while laking enough evidence, the dusts around Earth could not be the only reason for causing cold temperature.
这一段的层次很好，同样的错误批了两点

Furthermore, assuming that the dusts caused lowering the temperature, volcano eruption and meteorite collision may not make the dusts and meteorite also may not create bright flash of light. This argument points out these conclusions without quoting convincing documents or citing effective scientific studies. It would not likely to make us to believe this inference only according to the authors' wondering. Thus, the volcano eruption and meteorite collision could not be argued as the reason for the dusts and meteorites also could not radiate such bright flash of light. The author also points out that there are no records to prove the bright flash of light occurred, however we could not simplity(simply) to make a conclusion these phenomenon has not occurred while not finding the evidence to prove it. It is probably the recorded really existed, and not being discovered by humans.
先否定作者的简单推断，然后小小地让步了一下，我们也不能简单地否定可能地存在（值得学习！！）

The volcano eruption, agree with the authors, to be the reason for the lower temperature may not accurate. Firstly, the phenomenon is only described in Asia, while are too restrictive to argue the weather alternative of the whole world. In fact, only Asia's volcano eruption may be too little-effected to cause the Earth's lower temperature. Secondly, the loud boom recorded may not caused by the volcanic eruption. That is other than the volcanoes, many factors also have ability to make loud boom. Thus, the volcanic eruption is(was) not likely to occurred（过去可能没发生过，这篇的时态有点麻烦，要注意哦~~）.

In sum, this argument makes too much assumption to （looking） out the reasons for the lower temperature, which may not existed. To make the conclusion convinced, the author should give enough evidence to illustrate the scientific events.
结尾简单了点点，但前面论述地很清楚了，不错不错！
阿布的阿狗比以前进步了，主要在语言表达上熟练多了，现在可以固定一个写ARGU的模版，就顺手多了

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