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11yaoyao
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沙发

发表于 2005-12-27 11:18:01 |只看该作者

发帖子之前，这两个请务必看一下吧......斑斑们一次次的改很麻烦的哦

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板凳

发表于 2005-12-27 20:20:21 |只看该作者

简单看了下提纲，忍不住说两句．
这种写法很特别提纲的对称性很好，给人很平衡的感觉．所以认真发展分析思路，严格按照提纲来应该是篇好文章

另外，注意发帖格式咯～～呵呵，要不然＞＞＞１１斑竹会批评你的

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地板

发表于 2005-12-28 02:26:43 |只看该作者

212"If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable."
提纲：基于以下三个方面的理由，我并不赞成作者的观点。[破题点很好，就是从是否值得来否定题目的观点，而且话说得挺正宗啊，哈哈]
1）：一些企业或公司一味地追求利润，却向消费者提供假冒、有害的产品和严重污染自然环境；
2）：一些政客为了赢得选举，不惜贿赂政府官员和恐吓、威胁其竞争对手；
3）：一些学生为了考试合格或获得好成绩在考场作弊，某些教授甚至抄袭、剽窃他人研究成果；

I strongly disagree with the assertion that when one goal is worthy, it can be achieved through any measure whatever the measure is. As we all know, it is the precondition of success and the most crucial behavior for a person or a country to set a worthy target. But in order to attain the target, not all measures are justifiable. Three examples that aptly illustrate this point involve the fields of business, political, and academia.

In the business realm, profit maximization for a firm’s shareholders or other owners is generally considered as the worthiest goal of corporate executives. It is possible for business leaders to do intentional harm to their customers or to the society in which they operate—for example, by providing dangerous[这个词不好，建议用inferior,因为毕竟目的不是伤害消费者啊] products and by polluting natural environment for the goal of profit maximization.[这里就可以用minimizing cost代替了] These behaviors are all illegal and prohibitive[好词！收了], and they are unaccepted by the whole citizens neither. If so, not only the business administrators are put into prison but also the corporate will collapse immediately.[总觉得这句话有点极端，可以说管理者被法律制裁，公司经历危机或者渐渐趋于没落这类的] Factually, in modern open and free economy system business official can make great profit in many other legitimate ways, such as decreasing the cost, improving productivity and reducing products price, etc.[其实还可以说进行促销活动sales promotion，其实降低售价并不一定会使收益增加的，是吧？]

In the political realm, winning in the election is the eventually goal of a candidate. The candidate may promise a lot benefit to the electorates beforehand which prove impractical in the end in order to gain the support[vote] of electorates. To defeat opponents, it is likely that the candidate bribes government officials and even gallows[这个词能表示恐吓吗？] his or her potential opponents. It seems that in the short term these unethical and immoral public behaviors might serve a candidate’s interest in obtaining his or her power, yet in the long term such behaviors invariably result in that candidate’s down-fall, that is, in failure.

Similarly, in the academia realm, some students or even certain professors would perform something deceptive or fraudulent to do well in the examination or publish works--for example, cheating in the exam or plagiarizing other’s production. Higher grades are the main goal for a student to certain extent. Some students cheat in the exam to gain excellent grade or pass in the examination. Even certain famous professors plagiarize other’s paper in the process of study[用research吧]. Cheating or plagiarizing is[are] dishonest and immoral behaviors, which what is worse,[这个句子是不是有点问题，是不是应该while what is worse] are prevailing in today’s academia field. Educational department officials and education authorities should work together to control[这种现象还是消灭eliminate好，control到一种什么程度呢？] this phenomenon.

Even though these circumstances considered above happen sometimes, they provide enough evidences to manifest in the process of pursuing a worthy goal, some measures are unwarrantable. In this sense, the speaker’s claim is absolute and inaccuracy.
[你的思路挺好的，从各个领域来分析问题，我的那篇就是因为求大求全结果写不下去了，呵呵，学习了。另外，表示领域的词有realm,region,field正好用在你文章里不重复]

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