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====================Argument ===================
【题目】
Argument67（2005年2-9月总频24次）
The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a newspaper serving
the villages of Castorville and Polluxton.
"Both the villages of Castorville and Polluxton have experienced sharp
declines in the numbers of residents who pay property taxes. To save money
and improve service, the two villages recently merged their once separate
garbage collection departments into a single department located in
Castorville, and the new department has reported few complaints about its
service. Last year the library in Polluxton had 20 percent fewer users
than during the previous year. It follows that we should now further
economize and improve service, as we did with garbage collection, by
closing the library in Polluxton and using the library in Castorville to
serve both villages."
【翻译】
Castorville和Polluxton两个村镇都经历了地产税纳税居民数量的下降。
为节省开支并提高服务质量，两个村镇最近合并了它们一度独立的垃圾收集部门，成立了座落于Castorville的单一部门，新部门所上报的关于其服务的投诉很少。去年Polluxton的图书馆使用者比前一年减少20％。这表明我们现在应该象我们在垃圾收集方面所作的一样进一步经济化和提高服务，通过关闭Polluxton的图书馆和使用Castorville的图书馆来为两个村镇提供服务。
【提纲】
1、新部门投诉少，不代表服务好，开支节省，可能刚开始，大家还处在新鲜阶段，过些日子就会多起来；也可能原来投诉就少；
2、一年20%的减少不能说明问题也许以后会增多,而且本身居民数量就下降，可能图书馆使用者占总人口比例还上升
3、图书馆和垃圾站的情况不能完全类比，业务和运作都不一样
4、没有考虑其他可行的方案，而且即使关闭图书馆，也不一定要关闭Polluxton，要选择
【正文】（470words）
In the argument, the arguer wrongly believes that merging the library in Polluxton into the one in Castorville will save money and improve its service. Tough the method of combination of garbage collection departments has received few complains, however, the assertion with no careful consideration seems rather hasty and warranted.

First and foremost, the major problem is the evidence that the new department has reported few complaints about its service could not indicate anything for the service improving and money saving, and thus lends little sport to the argument. It is possible that people here in this two villages does not essentially like to complain no matter the garbage collection departments merge or not; It is also possible that because the department is newly opening, complains comes few and as time goes, people will become more and more unsatisfied; besides, no information about the cost and service is provided.

Second, the mere fact that the library in Polluxton had 20 percent fewer users than during the previous year last year does not equals to bad service of it. As a matter of fact, both the villages of Castorville and Polluxton have experienced sharp declines in the numbers of residents who pay property taxes, which may also contribute the decrease in library users and maybe the exact proportion who used the library last year is increased. In addition, the decline doesn’t necessarily keep all the time. Unless ruling out these possibilities the arguer should not

In addition, given that the mergence does effect for garbage collection departments; it does not indicate that this kind of method will also work for libraries. The comparison between them is incomplete for they have different dealing way and various needs for clients. Therefore, the conclusion which simply equals the above two seems not so compelling.

Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out several other flaws in the argument. On the one hand, the arguer ignores other possible ways to improve the services and save money for the libraries except mergence. Changing the books in the library may improve a good idea if the books there are now old enough to read. On the other hand, even if it is decided to merge the two libraries, which to be closed also needs consideration. It is probable that the readers in Polluxton are much fewer than ones in Castorville, and if so, we should close the one in Castorville rather than the one in Polluxton.

To sum up, the argument is not well reasoned as it stands according to the analysis above, since it does not base on a false analogy, but also the evidence cited lacks necessary information, so lends little support to the argument. To make it logically accept the arguer should investigate more information and make a complete consideration.

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发表于 2006-1-16 22:43:31 |只看该作者

额外批这次给队长【提纲】
1、新部门投诉少，不代表服务好，开支节省，可能刚开始，大家还处在新鲜阶段，过些日子就会多起来；也可能原来投诉就少；
2、一年20%的减少不能说明问题也许以后会增多,而且本身居民数量就下降，可能图书馆使用者占总人口比例还上升这篇的思维角度和我完全不同啊
3、图书馆和垃圾站的情况不能完全类比，业务和运作都不一样
4、没有考虑其他可行的方案，而且即使关闭图书馆，也不一定要关闭Polluxton，要选择呵呵
【正文】（470words）
In the argument, the arguer wrongly believes that merging the library in Polluxton into the one in Castorville will save money and improve its service. Tough the method of combination of garbage collection departments has received few complains, however, the assertion with no careful consideration seems rather hasty and warranted. （概括精炼是好事但似乎漏了）

First and foremost, the major problem is the evidence that the new department has reported few complaints about its service could not indicate anything for the service improving and money saving, and thus lends little sport to the argument很好我没想到这一层我只是认为不见得是合并带来好处（. It is possible that people here in this two villages does not essentially like to complain no matter the garbage collection departments merge or not; It is also possible that because the department is newly opening, complains comes few and as time goes, people will become more and more unsatisfied; besides, no information about the cost and service is provided.

Second, the mere fact that the library in Polluxton had 20 percent fewer users than during the previous year last year does not equals to bad service of it. As a matter of fact, both the villages of Castorville and Polluxton have experienced sharp declines in the numbers of residents who pay property taxes, which may also contribute to the decrease in library users and maybe the exact proportion who used the library last year is increased. In addition, the decline doesn’t necessarily keep all the time. Unless ruling out these possibilities the arguer should not ?嗯？后面呢

In addition, given that the mergence does effect for garbage collection departments; it does not indicate that this kind of method will also work for libraries. The comparison between them is incomplete for they have different dealing way不好 and various needs for clients. Therefore, the conclusion which simply equals the above two seems not so compelling. 这段太短，而且每句话几乎都有点问题。

Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out several other flaws in the argument. On the one hand, the arguer ignores other possible ways to improve the services and save money for the libraries except mergence. Changing the books in the library may improve a good idea if the books there are now old enough to read. On the other hand, even if it is decided to merge the two libraries, which to be closed also needs consideration. It is probable that the readers in Polluxton are much fewer than ones in Castorville, and if so, we should close the one in Castorville rather than the one in Polluxton. 观点独到但是我认为写太多了

To sum up, the argument is not well reasoned as it stands according to the analysis above, since it does not base on a false analogy, but also the evidence cited lacks necessary information, so lends little support to the argument. To make it logically accept the arguer should investigate more information and make a complete consideration.

文法错误似乎很多啊有些不是仅仅粗心造成的语言还是要注意
观点很好很有说服力我这篇题目没有看透你做得很好
还有写这么多应该超时很多了吧有的观点似乎不一定非要

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