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发表于 2009-1-3 20:47:55 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Topic: It is better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who have a good sense of humor.
Nowadays, there is trend that people seem to feel lonely than ever before. Everyone seems to carve for a true friendship. When it comes to the topic that what kind of friends you want to make, intelligent or humor, in the point of my view, both two kinds of friends are necessary and presious, as discussed below.

To begin with, we can learn a myriad of good qualities from intelligent friends, such as their methods toward study or their critical thinking. Their ideas or suggestions serve as catalyst for our further development in our career or in our academic field. In other words, with a lot of intelligent friends, you seem to be easier to get success. Actually, in our society, bigmans always make a lot of intelligent friends and gain nutrients from them. For example, Bill Gates, the founder and CEO of Microsoft, benefit from a friendship dated form his high school years. Gates and his other two friends was interest in math. During their college years, they kept touch with each other. After that, they made an amazing decision that to build a software company meanwhile stopped every courses in university. Although the initial road was very tough, Gates and his very smart friends built a new software kingdom, which is the biggest one all over the world. Therefore, it is the truth that we can gain nutrients from our intelligent friends.

In addition, humorous friends also are necessary pieces of our life. To me, I'd like to spend time with friends who can make me laugh. Those ones hold a special (special) ability that adjusts the surroundings. With those humorous (humorous) friends to be around, you would never feel lonely and depressed. Sometimes, getting along with friends who are very intelligent and smart often make me a little nervous and depressed. They always want to be the first one and their ambition for success might hurt others and add some composition of competitive to our friendship. However, with those humorous friends to be around, I never worry about that. It is really relaxed time.

To sum up, we should cherish all friendship, no matter your friends are intelligent or full of humorous cells.

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发表于 2009-1-4 09:50:16 |只看该作者

Nowadays, there is trend that people seem to feel lonely than ever before. Everyone seems to carve for a true friendship. When it comes to the topic that what kind of friends you want to make, intelligent or humor(humourous), in the point of my view(In my point of view), both two kinds of friends are necessary and presious, as discussed below.
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To begin with, we can learn a myriad of good qualities from intelligent friends, such as their methods toward study or their critical thinking. Their ideas or suggestions serve as catalyst for our further development in our career or in our academic field. In other words, with a lot of intelligent friends, you seem to be easier to get success. (换形式主语更地道)Actually, in our society, bigmans (大人物?)always make a lot of intelligent friends and gain nutrients(不好,建议换词) from them. For example, Bill Gates, the founder and CEO of Microsoft, benefit from a friendship dated form his high school years. Gates and his other two friends was interest in math. During their college years, they kept touch with each other. After that, they made an amazing decision that to("to "excluded) build a software company meanwhile stopped every courses in university. Although the initial road was very tough, Gates and his very smart friends built a new software kingdom, which is the biggest one all over the world. Therefore, it is the truth that we can gain nutrients from our intelligent friends.
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   In addition, humorous friends also are necessary pieces of our life. To me, I'd like to spend time with friends who can make me laugh. Those ones hold a special (special) ability that adjusts the surroundings. With those humorous (humorous) friends to be around, you would never feel lonely and depressed. Sometimes, getting along with friends who are very intelligent and smart often make me a little nervous and depressed. They always want to be the first one and their ambition for success might hurt others and add some composition of competitive to our friendship. (不要这么写,因为它削弱了你第二段的论述)However, with those humorous friends to be around, I never worry about that. It is really relaxed time.
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   To sum up, we should cherish all friendship, no matter your friends are intelligent or full of humorous cells.
      点评:本文既然支持双面观点,那么就应该以同样的篇幅,同样令人信服的论述来支持你的观点,而不是使它们互相矛盾.像第3段的这两句话实在没必要写.而且你第2段的论述应该再充实下.收尾也比较仓促.

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发表于 2009-1-4 13:09:55 |只看该作者

Topic: It is better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who have a good sense of humor

Nowadays, there is trend that people seem to feel lonely than ever before. Everyone seems to carve for a true friendship. When it comes to the topic that what kind of friends you want to make, intelligent or humor, in the point of my view, both two kinds of friends are necessary and presious, as discussed below.(首先,题目是问你是不是一个比另一个更好,应该回答,如果反驳,要提出反驳的理由,而不是单说两个都重要.)

To begin with, we can learn a myriad of good qualities from intelligent friends, such as their methods toward study or their critical thinking. Their ideas or suggestions serve as catalyst for our further development in our career or in our academic field. In other words, with a lot of intelligent friends, you seem to be easier to get success. Actually, in our society, bigmans always make a lot of intelligent friends and gain nutrients from them. For example, Bill Gates, the founder and CEO of Microsoft, benefit from a friendship dated form his high school years. Gates and his other two friends was interest in math. During their college years, they kept touch with each other. After that, they made an amazing decision that to build a software company meanwhile stopped every courses in university. Although the initial road was very tough, Gates and his very smart friends built a new software kingdom, which is the biggest one all over the world. Therefore, it is the truth that we can gain nutrients from our intelligent friends.

In addition, humorous friends also are necessary pieces of our life. To me, I'd like to spend time with friends who can make me laugh. Those ones hold a special (special) ability that adjusts the surroundings. With those humorous (humorous) friends to be around, you would never feel lonely and depressed. Sometimes, getting along with friends who are very intelligent and smart often make me a little nervous and depressed. They always want to be the first one and their ambition for success might hurt others and add some composition of competitive to our friendship. However, with those humorous friends to be around, I never worry about that. It is really relaxed time.

To sum up, we should cherish all friendship, no matter your friends are intelligent or full of humorous cells.
觉得太折中主义了,并且没有明确回答文章的问题.
个人之间,请勿见怪,我也有类似的很多问题.也要改.

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