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发表于 2009-8-8 11:02:12 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

137 The following appeared in an editorial in the Mason City newspaper.

"At present, Mason City residents seldom use the nearby Mason River for any kind of recreational activity, even though surveys of the region's residents consistently rank water sports (swimming, fishing, and boating) as a favorite form of recreation. Since there have been complaints about the quality of the water in the river, residents must be avoiding the river because they think that it is not clean enough. But that situation is about to change: the agency responsible for rivers in our region has announced plans to clean up Mason River. Therefore, recreational use of the river is likely to increase, so the Mason City council will need to increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the Mason River."

F1:对当地居民的调查可能缺乏科学性，被调查者参与运动的情况不明，调查不能显示实际参与情况，现代人生活节奏忙，没有时间参与水上运动
F2:不去MR运动的可能有很多，比如安全设施不好，或者居民已经有其他地方去进行相关运动（pool、water park），因此水质改善不一定使居民放弃原有的运动场所
F3:并未给出证据证明此趋势会一直持续，可能过一段时间水上运动不再流行

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The author of the editorial advocates that the Mason City (MC) council should boost its investment on the improvements to the publicly owned lands along the Mason River (MR), since the water sports activities is likely to ascend in the river. However, further reflection reveals that this assumption lacks solid buttressing fundaments.

Firstly, weather the surveys could truly reflect the status quo of the residents taking water sports is what I take leave to doubt, for maybe those who took the surveys don't often go for any kind of recreation themselves. Besides, perhaps the fast pace of modern life renders most of the citizens inconvenient doing water sports, for they don't have adequate time needed for such activities. Thus, the author failed to provide any trustworthy statistics showing that people in MC are really engaged in taking water sports.

Secondly, even assuming the residents really have a habit of water recreational activities, hasty attributing the rare usage of the MR to the poor quality of the water would be unwarranted and far-fetched. The author doesn't rule out other probabilities may lead to the same result. It's entirely possible that it's because the live-saving system of the MR has not been well established yet, which makes the citizens concern about their safety when playing in the river. Or perhaps that there are plenty of swimming pools, fishing ponds and water parks built in the MC, which are served as better choices for people to practice water activities.

Thirdly, granted that the water quality is the very reason preventing residents from utilizing the MR, there is no solid evidence given proving that the favor in water sports would continue to prevail in the foreseeable future. In that way the author has committed the “all things are equal” fallacy. It would be totally possible that by the end of the improvement of the quality of the water, people in the MC have changed their habits to other types of recreational activities. They may start to be fond of non-water-related activities such as basketball and baseball, thus the great efforts made by the MC council would be ended in vain.

In the final analysis, to make his article more persuasive, the author ought to conduct some comprehensive surveys and detailed researches showing that the improvement in the quality of the water would be favorable for the residents to choose the MR as the place of their water activities. What's more, the author needs to provide more evidences showing that the trend of water sports would continue to prevail in the coming years.

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发表于 2009-8-8 21:41:35 |只看该作者

F1:对当地居民的调查可能缺乏科学性，被调查者参与运动的情况不明，调查不能显示实际参与情况，现代人生活节奏忙，没有时间参与水上运动（个人觉得这一点在整个文章的错误中是minor的）
F2:不去MR运动的可能有很多，比如安全设施不好，或者居民已经有其他地方去进行相关运动（pool、water park），因此水质改善不一定使居民放弃原有的运动场所
F3:并未给出证据证明此趋势会一直持续，可能过一段时间水上运动不再流行

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The author of the editorial advocates that the Mason City (MC) council should boost its investment on the improvements to the publicly owned lands along the Mason River (MR), since the water sports activities is likely to ascend in the river. However, further reflection reveals that this assumption lacks solid buttressing fundaments.

Firstly, weather the surveys could truly reflect the status quo of the residents taking water sports is what I take leave to doubt, for maybe those who took the surveys don't often go for any kind of recreation themselves. Besides, perhaps the fast pace of modern life renders most of the citizens inconvenient doing water sports, for they don't have adequate time needed for such activities. Thus, the author failed to provide any trustworthy statistics showing that people in MC are really engaged in taking water sports.

Secondly, even assuming the residents really have a habit of water recreational activities, hasty attributing the rare usage of the MR to the poor quality of the water would be unwarranted and far-fetched. The author doesn't rule out other probabilities may lead to the same result. It's entirely possible that it's because the live-saving system of the MR has not been well established yet, which makes the citizens concern about their safety when playing in the river. Or perhaps that there are plenty of swimming pools, fishing ponds and water parks built in the MC, which are served as better choices for people to practice water activities.

Thirdly, granted that the water quality is the very reason preventing residents from utilizing the MR, there is no solid evidence given proving that the favor in water sports would continue to prevail in the foreseeable future. In that way the author has committed the “all things are equal” fallacy. It would be totally possible that by the end of the improvement of the quality of the water, people in the MC have changed their habits to other types of recreational activities. They may start to be fond of non-water-related activities such as basketball and baseball, thus the great efforts made by the MC council would be ended in vain.

In the final analysis, to make his article more persuasive, the author ought to conduct some comprehensive surveys and detailed researches showing that the improvement in the quality of the water would be favorable for the residents to choose the MR as the place of their water activities. What's more, the author needs to provide more evidences showing that the trend of water sports would continue to prevail in the coming years.

觉得文章的推论结构应该是
1，MR的水质不好，所以大家不去玩了，then，2 有一个计划改善水质，之后大家一定会去MR玩，conclude，应该增加投资去改善MR周边的用地.
觉得2这个推论也很有问题，但lz没有说到。

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