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发表于 2009-8-8 20:39:50 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

这次是限时写的大家狠批吧
Do you agree or disagree: governments should spend more money in support of arts than in upport of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams

1、怎么投资要是城市而定
2、文化名城就多投文化，比如维也纳
3、运动名城就多投运动，比如雅典
4、大多数时候二者并不矛盾，比如北京，我们既要发展体育，比如国家队，奥运会；又要发扬文化，比如京剧
5、总结

With the development of economic, government have more money to administrate, not only on benefit people's life, but can also cost on some others what can make life more colourful. For example arts or athletics. But should we spend more money on arts than sports without any excuse, is that intelligent? I think it depends on the city which is under discussed.

Considering there are a lot of famous people in a city, and this is why it is known around the world, spend more money on art is correctly. Take Vienna as an example. This is a great city as there are a lot of artists come to front from here, such as Mozart, Beethoven. Lots of people go to there in order to feel these famous people's spirit, and attend a concert to taste the fascination of music. Government must pay a lot of money to protect these place of historic interest, and invite celebrated artists in the concert and so on to intrigue people comes from all over the world. These are all need a large investment. So pay more money in support of arts is more important than sports for these cities.

On the other hand, when this comes to the cities that are famous for the athletics, government should change the investment to the other side. Such as Athens, a well-known city because of Olympic, it is need more money paid on athletics obviously. Government must try all the best to protect and repair all the structures in the Acropolis, not only for the tourist, but also for all the people in the future which is more important.

However, develop arts and sports are not contradict to each other for most of the cities in the world. For example, the capital of China Beijing is the center of physics, most of the national teams are exercising in this city now. Further more, a successfully Olympic games have already held in this city in 2008. Beijing is also the heart of art in China. The Chinese Opera is came from Beijing and now the representive of China. Therefore, Beijing's Government must equal the two sides and make a sensible way to invest.

In conclusion, before make a correct payment, government must obviously know what is the city need, and how to develop it instead of spend more money on the arts than physics or the opposite choose stupidly.

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发表于 2009-8-9 11:33:56 |只看该作者

看了别人的作文感觉自己写偏了。。将错就错了这就是限时的水平了

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发表于 2009-8-9 21:04:40 |只看该作者

一天就送我 2 声望我RP真好啊哈哈

狠狠批评吧内容估计不行

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发表于 2009-8-9 21:26:22 |只看该作者

我看你的中文思路，感觉非常清晰，特别赞～～
With the development of economic, government have more money to administrate, not only on benefit people's life, but （） also （） on some others what can make life more colourful. For example arts and athletics. But(However,) should we spend more money on arts than sports without any excuse, is that intelligent? I think it depends on the city which is under discussed.6

Considering there are a lot of famous people in a city, () the reason why it is well known all around the world, spending more money on art is correct. Take Vienna as an example. This is a great city as there are a lot of artists come to front from here, such as Mozart, Beethoven. Lots of people go to there（这，那的。。晕了。。） in order to feel these famous people's spirit（, ）and attend a concert to taste the fascination of music. Government must pay a lot of money to protect these place of historic interest, and invite celebrated artists in the concert and so on to intrigue people （）all over the world. These are all need a large investment. So () more money in support of arts is more important than sports for these cities.

On the other hand, when this comes to the cities that are famous for the athletics, government should change（这次不对，不是一个政府。） the investment to the other side. Such as Athens, a well-known city because of Olympic, it is need more money paid on athletics obviously. Government must try all the best to protect and repair all the structures in the Acropolis, not only for the tourist, but also for all the people in the future which is more important.% Z. Z( y: g! V' S" i& Z5 k( V4 c- G

However, developing arts and sports are not contradict to each other for most of the cities in the world. For example, the capital of China, Beijing, is the center of physics, most of the national teams are exercising in this city now. Further more, a successfully Olympic games have already held in this city in 2008. Beijing is also the heart of art in China. The Chinese Opera is came from Beijing and now the representive of China. Therefore, Beijing's Government must equal 不现实。。the two sides and make a sensible way to invest.

In conclusion, before making a correct payment, government must obviously know what is the city need, and how to develop it instead of spend more money on the arts than physics or the opposite choose stupidly.

我觉得你写的不偏，很好。
值得注意的是不要一个主句里面出现两个动词！！

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我发觉我好像应该改他们的作业，不是你的。。。不过见识一下也蛮好的，呵呵～

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发表于 2009-8-10 12:40:38 |只看该作者

With the development of economic, government have more money to administrate, not only on benefit people's life（lives好些）, but can also cost on some others what can make life more colourful（colorful）. For example arts or athletics（这句话怎么有点别扭）. But should we spend more money on arts than sports without any excuse, is that intelligent? I think it depends on the city which is under discussed.

Considering there are a lot of famous people in a city, and this is why it is known around the world, spend more money on art is correctly. Take Vienna as an example. This is a great city as there are a lot of artists come to front from（时态应该变现一下是过去的）
here, such as Mozart, Beethoven. Lots of people go to there in order to feel these famous people's spirit, and attend a concert to taste the fascination of music. Government must pay a lot of money to protect these place of historic interest, and invite celebrated artists in the concert and so on to intrigue people comes from all over the world. These are all need a large investment. So pay more money in support of arts is more important than sports for these cities.（本句感觉太中式了！）. }7 r. A
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On the other hand, when this comes to the cities that are famous for the athletics, government should change the investment to the other side. Such as Athens, a well-known city because of Olympic, it is（助动词和动词在一起，还是被动语态？） need more money paid on athletics obviously. Government must try all the best to protect and repair all the structures in the Acropolis, not only for the tourist, but also for all the people in the future which is more important.
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However, develop arts and sports are not contradict to each other for most of the cities in the world. For example, the capital of China Beijing is the center of physics（物理学）, most of the national teams are exercising in this city now. Further more, a successfully副词 Olympic games have already held in this city in 2008. Beijing is also the heart of art in China. The Chinese Opera is came from Beijing and now the representive of China. Therefore, Beijing's Government must equal the two sides and make a sensible way to invest.

In conclusion, before make a correct payment, government must obviously know what is the city need, and how to develop it instead of spend more money on the arts than physics or the opposite choose stupidly.（搞得有点歧义了！）

限时能写出这样的已经很好了，到时候注意叙述的衔接性就行了！