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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country.

It's not rare to see we going to school to learn knowledge, such as math, English, Chinese, the ability that get along with classmate. So, I largely agree that improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country, but not absolutely.

Admittedly, improving schools is a vital factor; however, the experience is as important as the improving school.

Schools are a convenience in our life which provides us with the basic knowledge. The
knowledge from schools allows us to be a pillar in the society. So, if the quality of schools
is improved, the knowledge will be more useful for our students. For example, I receive the formal education from my elementary school, secondary school, and university. With this plenty of knowledge, I find a job in a company, which makes me to sale some product to public, but, I don’t improve the development of my country. With the reform of education, I go back to university to gain advanced degree, then I finally get the master degree which give me chance to run a company of my own, in addition, this company not only become my wealth, but also a measure for my country, because, my company pay the tax to government, give the technology to government construction at the same time. My company, indeed, develop the society.

School is a factor in the successful development of a country, but the experience that absorbing from others is also a factor when it comes to the great decision of country.
For instance, when government make a construction decision, they will look through the document from other province, such as how to build the street, how to prevent the unexpected
factor, how to maintain the street ,and etc. Experience is vital for us, when we decide to do anything, it endows us with the ability to solve problems and enlarge our experience.

In a word, improving school and experience plays a important role in our life.

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发表于 2010-8-29 19:35:24 |只看该作者

综合 v6:

The reading passage thinks that communal encyclopedias have several shortcoming that make themselves to be less valuable than printed encyclopedias, however, the lecture argue against it in three points.

First, the reading passage states that communal encyclopedias often lack academic credential, and misunderstand the users. But, the lecture thinks that traditional encyclopedias have errors that can remain for decades, compared with printed encyclopedias, the online encyclopedia are easy to be corrected.

Second, the reading passage thinks that online encyclopedias always give hackers chance to delete the information in encyclopedia, and lead to the hamper. However, the lecture thinks that the online encyclopedia will save a format that everyone can read it, but no one can change it. In addition, there is an editor who will manage the broken change, and change it into correct answer.

Third, the reading passage thinks that online encyclopedias focus too frequently, and children can't understand it. But, the lecture thinks that printed encyclopedias have limited space, which the scholar select the topics which don't reflect the public's real interest. At the same time, the online encyclopedias actually reflect the user's interest which include the academic topics.

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宿舍熄灯，简单改改

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It's not rare to see weus going to school to learn knowledge, such as math, English, Chinese, the ability that get along with classmateclassmates. So, I largely agree that improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country, but not absolutely.

Admittedly, improving schools is a vital factor; however, the experience is as important as the improving school. 经验和发展学校一样重要？总觉得怪怪的，发展学校可以和发展经济或者保护环境相互比较和经验很怪

Schools are a convenience in our life which provides us with the basic knowledge. The
knowledge from schools allows us to be a pillar in the society这个是不是中式的想法啊fundation of the society . So, if the quality of schools
is improved, the knowledge will be more useful for our students. For example, I receive the formal education from my elementary school, secondary school, and university. With this plenty of knowledge, I find a job in a company, which makes me to sale some product to public, but, I don’t improve the development of my country. With the reform of education, I go back to university to gain advanced degree, then I finally get the master degree which give me chance to run a company of my own, in addition, this company not only become my wealth, but also a measure for my country, because, my company pay the tax to government, give the technology to government construction at the same time. My company, indeed, develop the society.

School is a factor in the successful development of a country, but the experience that absorbing from others is also a factor when it comes to the great decision of country.% Q5 s; k8 b5 n d. z* A4 w! @; s% p4 w
For instance, when government make a construction decision, they will look through the document from other province, such as how to build the street, how to prevent the unexpected
factor, how to maintain the street ,and etc. Experience is vital for us, when we decide to do anything, it endows us with the ability to solve problems and enlarge our experience.

In a word, improving school and experience plays aan important role in our life.

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