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本帖最后由 leo206 于 2011-7-22 22:12 编辑

The lecturer talks about the disadvantages some employees' proposal that they work four days every work and receive 80% of their normal salary, which the passage totally support.
First, the companies will not be benefited. By hiring more staff to ensure the amount of work stay constant, companies will inevitably increase their training and managing cost. Meanwhile, more offices and computers are required, which also add to the cost of companies.
Second, for the country as a whole, the goal of reducing employment rate by adopting the 4-weekday strategy will not be attained. When the workdays are reduced, companies will probably force their employees to work overtime. What's more, this will rise companies' expectations on employees, which will cause further unemployment.
Third, the option of four-day workweek will risk declining the quality of lives of individual employees. When working less, employees will experience a decline in their job ability, which will potentially harm their chance of seeking other jobs and make them more vulnerable to unemployment. This will also reduce their chance of promotion, because those who work full time would be preferred.
In conclusion, the proposal of four-day workweek will do harm to companies, the country as a whole and individual employees.

tpo, 综合, 作文

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The lecturer strongly opposed the passage's opinion that wood companies won't adopt new, ecologically friendly technology so as to get ecocertification for 3 reasons.
First, American consumers will differentiate between different advertisements. Ecocertification approved by a trustworthy international organization will make a difference in the eyes of American consumers, so consequently make products with such certification more popular.
Second, small difference of price will not largely determine the inclination of consumers, although the lecturer agrees that all consumers are willing to choose cheaper goods when other factors remain constant. Companies with ecocertification will attract more consumers despite a minor increase in the price of the wood it produced.
Third, the market of United States do not completely belong to American companies, who are faced with international competition. If American companies don't adopt new technology to get ecocertification, it is possible that they loss the market of United States to foreign companies with ecocirtification.
In conclusion, the lecturer disagrees with the passage and holds that American companies will seek to improve their technology and to receive ecocertification.

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The lecturer strongly opposed the passage's opinion that wood companies won't adopt new, ecologically friendly technology so as to get ecocertification for 3 reasons.
First, American consumers will differentiate between different advertisements. Ecocertification approved by a trustworthy international organization will make a difference in the eyes of American consumers, so consequently make making products with such certification more popular.
Second, small difference of price will not largely determine the inclination of consumers, although the lecturer agrees that all consumers are willing to choose cheaper goods when other factors(这里详细些好，应该是采分点) remain constant. Companies with ecocertification will attract more consumers despite a minor increase in the price of the wood it produced.
Third, the market of United States do not completely belong to American companies, who are faced with international competition. If American companies don't adopt new technology to get ecocertification, it is possible that they loss lose the market of United States to foreign companies with ecocirtification.
In conclusion, the lecturer disagrees with the passage and holds that American companies will seek to improve their technology and to receive ecocertification.
加油互助，共同进步

再好，你也就是个好心肠的死胖子

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Thelecturer strongly opposed the passage's opinion that wood companies won't adoptnew, ecologically friendly technology so as to get ecocertification for 3reasons.1 g" |! K; t"J: u5 C# k

First, American consumers will differentiatebetween different advertisements. Ecocertification approved by a trustworthyinternational organization will make a difference in the eyes of Americanconsumers, so consequently make products with such certification more popular. G7 _: b8 X. z, {+ N

Second, small difference of price will not largelydetermine the inclination of consumers, although the lecturer agrees that allconsumers are willing to choose cheaper goods when other factors remainconstant. Companies with ecocertification will attract more consumers despite aminor increase in the price of the wood it produced.

Third, the market of United States do（does） not completely belong to Americancompanies, who are faced with international competition. If American companiesdon't adopt new technology to get ecocertification, it is possible that theyloss(would,虚拟)the market of United States to foreign companies with ecocirtification.
In conclusion, the lecturer disagrees with thepassage and holds that American companies will seek to improve their technologyand to receive ecocertification.
写的太好了，只能学习，不能改了

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发表于 2011-7-22 22:08:57 |只看该作者

谢谢你们了，呵呵

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TPO 11 Integrated

The passage argued that public are reading less nowadays, which can lead to the loss of imagination stimulation, the decline of culture, and the decline of the writing of literature. It is strongly opposed by the lecturer for three reasons.
Firstly, good books do not only refer to literature. For example, books such as science writing, history or political analysis, often with high quality, can also stimulate imagination as well as literature do.
Secondly, the fact that people are reading less books nowadays do net necessarily indicate a decline of our culture. Watching movies or listening to music is not a waste of time. The culture has changed. Other than a cultural degeneration, many today抯 forms of culture are sometimes more direct to contemporary concern than literature.
Finally, it is more the writers' fault than the readers', that cause the loss of support to literature . A lot of contemporary literature is intended to be too difficult to understand.
In sum, the passage proposes three reasons to support his standpoint, which are rebutted by the lecturer one by one.

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发表于 2011-7-23 15:14:28 |只看该作者

The passage argued（应该是argues吧，主句过去时，从句现在时） that public are reading less nowadays, which can lead to the loss of imagination stimulation, the decline of culture, and the decline of the writing of literature（literature writing）. It is strongly opposed by the lecturer for three reasons.) @6 6 T/ A: n
Firstly, good books do not only refer to literature. For example, books such as science writing, history or political analysis, often with high quality, can also stimulate imagination as well as literature do（does，literature是不可数名词）.& r% p7 K9 `4 B0 _! N+ J
Secondly, the fact that people are reading less books nowadays do net（not）necessarily indicate a decline of our culture. Watching movies or listening to music is not a waste of time. The culture has changed. Other than a cultural degeneration, many today抯 forms of culture are sometimes more direct to contemporary concern than literature.,* \* C+ J. b u
Finally, it is more the writers' fault than the readers',（逗号去掉）that cause the loss of support to literature . A lot of contemporary literature is intended to be too difficult to understand.
In sum, the passage proposes three reasons to support his(悲伤地告诉你，这一篇的prof是个女的，所以最好不要出现人称代词，直接用lecturer即可) standpoint, which are rebutted by the lecturer one by one.
（建议换一套transitional words，这一套太泛滥的说, 很多词汇及用法重复出现多次，如reading less books nowadays）

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发表于 2011-7-23 20:29:20 |只看该作者

@leo206,这篇作文还没做到，做了再来看啦

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本帖最后由冰雪蜂鸟于 2011-7-23 22:06 编辑

The passage argued that public are reading less nowadays, which can lead to the loss of imagination stimulation, the decline of culture, and the decline of the writing of literature. It is strongly opposed by the lecturer for three reasons.
喜欢你的开头，特别清晰。

Firstly, good books do not only refer to literature. For example, books such as science writing, history or politicalanalysis, often with high quality, can also stimulate imagination as well as literature do.

Secondly, the fact that people are readingless books nowadays do net(not) necessarily indicate(s) a decline of our culture.Watching movies or listening to music is not a waste of time. The culture has changed. Other than a cultural degeneration, many today forms of culture are sometimes more direct to contemporary concern than literature.

Finally, it is more the writers' fault thanthe readers', that cause the loss of support to literature. A lot ofcontemporary literature is intended to be too difficult to understand.

Insum, the passage proposes three reasons to support his(her) stand point, which are rebutted by the lecturer one by one.

你的文章属于短小精湛型的，没有一句废话。我很喜欢也看不出有什么问题，所有句子都忠于了阅读文章和听力材料，所以也改不出什么，抱歉><
想请教几个问题：
1、综合写作像你这么写一两句话或者概括一下听力中的分论点就可以吗，不用把所有例子都写进去展开一下嘛？
2、是否不可以加入自己的观点？
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发表于 2011-7-25 22:21:37 |只看该作者

TPO 14 Integrated

The passage holds that salvage logging will makes room for fresh growth and minimize the danger from insects which will benefit the damaged forest environmentally. Additionally, it will benefit the economy as well. However, these are diametrically opposed by the lecturer for the reasons below.
Firstly, the lecturer says it is clear that salvage logging will not make enough room required for the growth of newbie plants. By moving away rotting logs, we are making the land less nutrient, and so less suitable for the recovery of the forest areas.
Secondly, the increase of insects will not necessarily do harm to the forest. For example, some insects, like butterflies, have been living in forests for thousands of years but have not damaged the forest.
Finally, the economical benefit from salvage logging is small and temporary. It is often necessary to transport the woods by helicopters, which are expensive. Furthermore, workers hired for salvage logging largely come from other districts and the additional jobs are not created for local residents.
In sum, the passage proposed three reasons to support his viewpoint that salvage logging is beneficial, which are rebutted by the lecturer one by one.

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