[i习作temp] issue5 我的第一次issue [复制链接]

各位同学，我第一次鼓足勇气把自己的作文发到网络上。我以前考过G, 上次得了3.0,觉得自己这个分数很危险，很想知道自己错在哪里，也想把写作水平提高上来，希望大家多多评价，给我挑错误，我也是献丑了！！希望大家不要笑话~~

5."Anation should require all its students to study the same national curriculumuntil they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of thenation to determine which academic courses to offer."

Firstly, withthe same national curriculum, it is convenient for educationist of differentparts of the nation to scientifically arrange and prepare the classes of thecurriculum.

Secondly,thinking of the possible differences, it is unwise to allow schools rather thana nation to choose the courses for the students.

A nation ratherthan the schools in different parts of the nation determine the nationalcurriculum for the students, however, it does mean that the local schools haveno freedom to choose any course for local students.

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At the first glance, there is an universally accepted idea that a nationshould require all its students to study the same national curriculum until thyenter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation todetermine which academic courses to offer, which is accordance with what thearguer advocated. As far as I am concerned, while I concede that  a nationshould require the students to study the same national curriculum has become amore central concern. Nevertheless, the argument unnecessarily extends thebroad of the assertion and I think the nation allow schools in different partsof the nation to determine which academic courses to offer is justifiable insome parts, also.

I turn first to my points of agreement with the argument. The idea thatnation require the students to absorb the same national lessons has someadvantages. To illustrate this point clearly, we can see that the children canfound an equally level basis before they come enter college. Just like BillGates, before he dropped out from Harvard university, he was also receive thesame national curriculum from his school.

But, an excess of maybe cause severe aftermath, also. The exactly samelesson maybe decrease the funny from learning knowledge in some students. Inshort, the most same curriculum in a nation should be required on moststudents, but the teachers should observe the students who has superinteresting on some majors.

I turn next to my chief points of assertion with the argument.

Some different parts of a nation should determine some special coursesaccord their local characteristics. Factors, such as a city which has lots ofmusicians were born before and everybody likes and knows more knowledge thanthe other city, so the government should allow schools in the city to determinethe music courses to offer. Beethoven, the German Composer born in a great cityand he learn piano in his hometown since his childhood, so he become one of themost famous composers in arts history and he try his best in his interestingthings. However, in order to appropriately conclude what the most studentsrequire, the arguer must first rule out the extremely possibility. For example,if a child born in a poor and has not development city, and the parents are alldo not like to take their children into school but make them to earn money, thenational government should take their children to get the same education inpolicy ways.

In sum, from what has been discussed above, I agree with the arguer that anation should require all its students to study the same national curriculumuntil they enter college. Consequently, we may finally draw the conclusion thateither of the same national curriculum and the local curriculum is justifiable,for better or worse. Since all persuasive theories are considered on acase-by-case basis.  

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