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作者: 986630036 时间: 2013-9-6 17:14:18 标题: 第一次写issue，求拍板。。。。

第一次写issue，求拍板。。。。字数：404，是不是太少了。但是怎么写现在也写不下去了。。。。求指教

Date: 09/06/2013
Time:00:49:00
Concerning the issue whether our human beings should lend a hand to help those species endangering due to the intervention of human activities, I, to some extent, disagree with the claim.
Admittedly, each species on this planet exerts an irreplaceable influence on the whole eco-system. But using present-day technology, we could not solve the problem of detection endangered species yet: the mechanism of self-equilibrium of eco-system and the profound changes in nature is often accompanied by the extinction of some species. Basically, human brilliance may lose its lust when facing this perplexity.
Nevertheless, adopting the recommendation proposed in the claim might bring us to another difficult situation. Undoubtedly, in the guise of nice slogan: making this world a better place, human has caused a great damage to the nature, the great amount of carbon dioxide outpouring after the Industrious Revolution, the pollutant water from the factory. In this situation, other species is sure to be exposed to the pollution. Thus, when we realize a single species may be on the verge of extinction, we just cast an unemotional sidelong glance at it and say: it has nothing to do with me, it does not fit in this nature. This nature? Ridiculous. Our polluted-nature is suitable.
Moreover, the nature we live in is unbreakable as a whole. A single abnormal fluctuation may case a remarkable change in the eco-system chain. Considering this fact, if a large amount of species is on the blink of extinction, our human being, definitely, will die, too. As a result, we can’t let other species at risk face the extinction alone, we should help them. May be it is also the only way that our human can live in this planet much longer.
Surely, there will be other better ways to soothe, or even solve this problem. Firstly, we should keep in our mind that we are not the mater of the nature, we are the friends. Helping nature maintain a beautiful and pure state, we give us a beautiful and pure life, too. Secondly, governments all around the world now should burden the responsibility of establishing some rigorous laws to regulate human’s behavior so that the influence imposed by us on the nature can be minimized. Thirdly, each of us should join in effort to improve our environment, it absolutely will make a difference.
In sum, that protecting the endangered species is a difficult problem needs our widely attention.

作者: foamfly 时间: 2013-9-6 19:10:43

建议楼主参加坛子里的互批活动哦~
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1632743-1-1.html

作者: 986630036 时间: 2013-9-6 19:20:18

foamfly 发表于 2013-9-6 19:10
建议楼主参加坛子里的互批活动哦~
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1632743-1-1.html

好的，谢谢啦！

作者: HK_House 时间: 2013-9-7 02:06:51

本帖最后由 HK_House 于 2013-9-7 02:23 编辑

I almost vomited my blood from my stomach when I was editing your article.

作者: 986630036 时间: 2013-9-7 09:05:15

HK_House 发表于 2013-9-7 02:06
I almost vomited my blood from my stomach when I was editing your article.

Your comment is very harsh. But I appreciate it. And I will pay attention to the improper phrase and sentence you mentioned next time. And I will try my best to make my composition fit in the instruction. Thanks.

作者: HK_House 时间: 2013-9-7 10:37:57

986630036 发表于 2013-9-7 09:05
Your comment is very harsh. But I appreciate it. And I will pay attention to the improper phrase ...

sorry for being harsh on you, but you will learn more in that way. looking forward to your next article.

作者: 986630036 时间: 2013-9-7 11:48:17

HK_House 发表于 2013-9-7 10:37
sorry for being harsh on you, but you will learn more in that way. looking forward to your next ar ...

Ok, my next composition, the revised version, is on the way. Hoping you can make comment on it.

作者: 986630036 时间: 2013-9-7 15:27:24

HK_House 发表于 2013-9-7 10:37
sorry for being harsh on you, but you will learn more in that way. looking forward to your next ar ...

修改了下，帮忙看下！谢谢啦

作者: HK_House 时间: 2013-9-12 00:30:56

986630036 发表于 2013-9-7 15:27
修改了下，帮忙看下！谢谢啦

harsh comments on the way

sorry for the late reply.

作者: 986630036 时间: 2013-9-12 14:16:18

HK_House 发表于 2013-9-12 00:30
harsh comments on the way

sorry for the late reply.

It is ok. i have looked at the comments in the revised article. it is not harsh. Just like what you said, i can learn more in this way. I appreciate it. Thank you.

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