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作者: lzl124631x 时间: 2013-10-24 13:47:33 标题: 【独立写作】lzl124631x的作业贴

本帖最后由 lzl124631x 于 2013-11-1 13:21 编辑

ALL MY WRITINGS
GT10.24 In order to succeed, you should be more like others than be different from everyone else.
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GT10.25 TPO20, Integrated Writing
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GT10.26 Visiting the museums is the best way to learn about a country.
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GT10.27 It is not necessary for university students to attend classes as long as they can pass their examinations.
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GT10.28 Technology designed to make our life simpler actually makes our life more complicated.
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GT10.29 TPO19, Integrated Writing
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GT10.30 Nowadays it's easier to maintain health than the past.
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GT10.31 In 20 years from now on, students will not use printed books any more.
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作者: lzl124631x 时间: 2013-10-25 18:32:07

本帖最后由 lzl124631x 于 2013-11-1 14:17 编辑

ALL MY REVISIONS
GT10.24
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GT10.26
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GT10.27
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GT10.28
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GT10.29
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GT10.30
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GT10.31
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缄素远未找到帖子

作者: susan_ran 时间: 2013-10-25 19:34:20

今天拔牙，明天改后发给你，见谅~多谢

作者: diecan 时间: 2013-10-25 20:20:58

楼主，改好了。另外谢谢你给我的作文的精心修改。

作者: lzl124631x 时间: 2013-10-26 12:04:36

diecan 发表于 2013-10-25 20:20
楼主，改好了。另外谢谢你给我的作文的精心修改。

非常感谢, 第二段我想表达"每个人都有自己的Talent, 坚持自己的Talent, 而非imitate others, 才可以让人突出, 让人更接近成功", 可能写得没有扣题.
用户接口就是User Interface(UI), 这个还是没有错的哈.

作者: susan_ran 时间: 2013-10-26 12:25:29

10.24已改
我的https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... amp;highlight=susan

作者: lzl124631x 时间: 2013-10-26 14:09:50

susan_ran 发表于 2013-10-26 12:25
10.24已改
我的https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=1510702&highlight=susan

灰常感谢.
至于中式的问题能从文中拿一句话举个例子吗? 还是说这是通篇的问题, 难以举例...

作者: 大大的泥鳅 时间: 2013-10-26 23:12:48

楼主写的很认真，自叹弗如~

作者: lzl124631x 时间: 2013-10-26 23:23:54

大大的泥鳅发表于 2013-10-26 23:12
楼主写的很认真，自叹弗如~

收到, 灰常感谢!

作者: apollocnty 时间: 2013-10-27 15:23:31

已改

作者: 林悠悠 时间: 2013-10-27 21:27:41

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10.26已改

作者: lzl124631x 时间: 2013-10-28 10:31:12

apollocnty 发表于 2013-10-27 15:23
已改

收到灰常感谢!

作者: mimimomo666 时间: 2013-10-29 08:41:36

[attach]270885[/attach]楼主写得蛮好的，加油~

作者: lzl124631x 时间: 2013-10-29 10:47:07

mimimomo666 发表于 2013-10-29 08:41
楼主写得蛮好的，加油~

收到~ 灰常感谢!

作者: sarah666 时间: 2013-10-29 14:46:34

It seems necessary for me to quit the habit of procrastination. Sorry for being late.[attach]270902[/attach]

作者: 大圣爱吃甲鱼 时间: 2013-10-29 17:34:04

楼主写的真心不错！受教了

作者: lzl124631x 时间: 2013-10-29 20:49:39

sarah666 发表于 2013-10-29 14:46
It seems necessary for me to quit the habit of procrastination. Sorry for being late.

Hah, a commonplace problem.
Thx for the meticulous revise. So embarrassing for leaving so many little flaws.
Most of your comments have been accepted and appreciated, except:
1) If having ... I originally wrote "If you have participated... you'll learn ...", but I noticed the redundancy of subject "you". So I deleted the "you" in the if clause and modified "have" to "having". I think there is nothing wrong. But your advise is welcomed.
2) make vs making. I wanted to express "help you convey and thus (help you) make your listeners...". Maybe a little bit trivial. "that could help you convey clearly your thoughts and ideas to the listeners, making your listeners more inclined to your side. "
Anyway, thx again:)

作者: mimimomo666 时间: 2013-10-30 14:02:10

本帖最后由 mimimomo666 于 2013-10-30 22:30 编辑

[attach]271046[/attach]写的很好啊~

作者: lzl124631x 时间: 2013-10-30 16:13:23

mimimomo666 发表于 2013-10-30 14:02
写的很好啊~

Eh, it's the writing of llsss_1234... not your revision of my writing.

作者: mimimomo666 时间: 2013-10-30 22:32:24

lzl124631x 发表于 2013-10-30 16:13
Eh, it's the writing of llsss_1234... not your revision of my writing.

啊啊，so sorry，我在上一楼改过了，请去看，嘎～

作者: lzl124631x 时间: 2013-10-30 23:34:45

mimimomo666 发表于 2013-10-30 22:32
啊啊，so sorry，我在上一楼改过了，请去看，嘎～

Hah, thx a lot:)

作者: yysoong 时间: 2013-10-31 16:03:36

10.30已改
我今天第一次写，看到楼主的文章真正感受到差距，受教！

作者: lzl124631x 时间: 2013-10-31 20:10:04

yysoong 发表于 2013-10-31 16:03
10.30已改
我今天第一次写，看到楼主的文章真正感受到差距，受教！

改完咯, 见二楼. 一起进步!

作者: lzl124631x 时间: 2013-10-31 22:48:29

diecan 发表于 2013-10-25 20:20
楼主，改好了。另外谢谢你给我的作文的精心修改。

改完咯见2楼加油~~~

作者: liuyc037 时间: 2013-11-1 18:01:14

第一次给别人改文章，改的不好还望见谅~

作者: lzl124631x 时间: 2013-11-1 19:49:25

liuyc037 发表于 2013-11-1 18:01
第一次给别人改文章，改的不好还望见谅~

收到, 非常感谢! 改得很好, 对我启发很大.

作者: 缄素远 时间: 2013-11-3 14:48:37

10.31 改好了~

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作者: sodapeng 时间: 2013-11-12 23:22:31

已改~写的不错哦~

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