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标题: ISSUE 64求意见，本人的第一篇GRE作文，谢谢各位了！ [打印本页]

作者: 王sir 时间: 2015-5-17 15:06:57 标题: ISSUE 64求意见，本人的第一篇GRE作文，谢谢各位了！

本帖最后由王sir 于 2015-5-17 15:12 编辑

64) The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

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The human mind is truly superior to machines because it is the human who invented the machines and make use of them as tools. Human is the master of the machines and will be indeed smarter and more creative than machines. There are numerous tasks which must be finished by human mind because machines are not able to work out in those cases. Machine cannot help you to compose a song or an essay and help you to answer a phone call or solve a complex philosophy issues. These jobs can only be fulfilled by human beings.

However, we cannot simply say that human mind will always be superior to machines. There are a large amount of jobs must be undertaken by machines instead of human kind. For example, in the field of industrial manufacturing, the role of machines cannot be replaced by men. Human beings cannot do the continuous repeating assembly or fixing works day and night in the factory whereas machines are very good at doing that. In this sense, there does exist fields where machine superior to human. Programs that process large amount of information with great efficiency, such as airplane ticket booking or placing orders in online store, contributes greatly to human kind business.

But machine's advantages are not limited to the field of industry or manufacturing or doing things according to the idea of human kind, it will solve problems and thus help human kind to live better. In this case the machines are not only the tools of human kinds. Personal Computers help us to look up information about our daily questions and thus broaden our horizons. Smart phone apps will give people timely advice on how to deal with the tough situation, such as where to find a subway station, thus making us live more conveniently. We can share every wonderful details on the phone so that the friends will know how we live and thus shorten the distance between friends. In this sense, Machine is a good helper for us and it is very reliable.

In conclusion, human kind cannot replaced by machines but machine have their own advantages and will superior to human kind in some cases.

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这个字数是不是有点少？限时30分钟

作者: Bearleft 时间: 2015-5-17 17:50:52

能不能把自己的提纲贴出来，这样别人读起来会轻松一些

作者: Bearleft 时间: 2015-5-17 18:11:04

写得不错，思路清晰错误较少。
” In conclusion, human kind cannot replaced by machines but machine have their own advantages and will superior to human kind in some cases.“
最后一句有语法错误，另外觉得最后一段就一个简单句有点少。

作者: Bearleft 时间: 2015-5-17 18:12:02

我看了你的作文，你也帮忙看看我的吧，帖了好几天没人回复https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... =1830448&extra=

作者: 王sir 时间: 2015-5-18 09:25:19

Bearleft 发表于 2015-5-17 18:11
写得不错，思路清晰错误较少。
” In conclusion, human kind cannot replaced by machines but machine h ...

hi，谢谢表扬呀~~

我也看看你的文章~~

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