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kaolaliangUID：2758807

Do you agree with the following statement? Some people think to watch a movie in a cinema is better, but others think at home is better.

Due to the appearances of an increasing number of fantastic movies, such as well-known Kongfu Panda and Inception, which attract viewers' attentions strongly, (这句和前文联系不大，可以另起一句)watching movies has became a popular way to relax and entertain during one's spare time. Along with this fashionable entertainment, a question comes in front of us.（这句感觉太累赘 可以和后一句并起来） Which method supplies with more benefits to our experiences of watching a movie, going to a cinema or staying at home? Considerable though the advantages that watching a movie in the cinema leads to, they can not compete with the appeal that watching films at home brings about, if money and convenience are taken into deliberation.(首段太长有点啰嗦， 而且建议论点说的强硬点) r7 l# L. R3 @( G& c7 X

is undeniable that watching a movie in cinemas provides people a high quality entertainment of sound and vision. The images showing on the screen, which is as large as ten-meters-long and three-meters-high hanging in the center of wall of the cinema, could refresh and impress every audience's eyes. The special designed echo system in the cinema would definitely produce high imitation of real sound, lead audience fall deeply into the story of the movie and forget the actually world（写的好）. Besides, the experience that surrounded by other people who share the same happy and nerves is incomparable.

However, watching movies at home through TV or computers, which serves as an alternative way of watching movies in a cinema, has already flourish in common live and been adopted by many movie fans. The popularity of this access is reasonable since watching films at home maintains most qualities and shinning parts of movies. After the arrival of golden time of data world（什么意思？）, people are able to view all latest movies at home with the help of Internet and DVD. Though the time when new movies are available in Internet or TV programs might delay a couple of weeks contrasting with the time played in cinemas, the main fun and key point of the movies still remain, including colorful images as well as the interesting plots and scenes. Moreover, for some people who could afford home theater equipments, the effects would even endow the home stay decision to defeat the noisy cinema.

Additionally, watching films at home introduces a more convenient and financial acceptable option for viewers that is why this choice is far more appealing than the cinema. For instant, after a long period of time on study, children could sit in their warm coach and drink their favorite milk at home while enjoying the amazing fight between Harry Potter and Voldemort in Harry Potter 7th through Internet-based TV programs without paying extra money. As one can see, there is no terrible traffic to travel, no expensive fee to pay, no long queue line to wait. Would anybody say no to this economic and easy way of watching movies?
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In conclusion, I believe that many people could enjoy themselves in the cinema, but it is staying at home that emphasis and exaggerate all the fabulous factors of watching movies.

作文写的很好，只是有个小建议，题目中说a好还是b好的时候，看过一个老师建议说写这种a好b也好需要很小心，不容易得高分。  其实楼主可以尝试着用强硬的论点， 这样子说服力会强点。 个人建议 加油

candis712UID：2824089

我的作业——2.11  独立写作
Do you agree with the following statement? Some people think to watch a movie in a cinema is better, but others think at home is better.

Due to the appearances of an increasing number of fantastic movies, such as well-known Kongfu Panda and Inception, which attract viewers' attentions strongly, watching movies has became a popular way to relax and entertain during one's spare time. Along with this fashionable entertainment, a question comes in front of us. Which method supplies with more benefits to our experiences of watching a movie, going to a cinema or staying at home? Considerable though the advantages that watching a movie in the cinema leads to, they can not compete with the appeal that watching films at home brings about, if money and convenience are taken into deliberation.

It is undeniable that watching a movie in cinemas provides people a high quality entertainment of sound and vision. The images showing on the screen, which is as large as ten-meters-long and three-meters-high hanging in the center of wall of the cinema, could refresh and impress every audience's eyes. The special designed echo system in the cinema would definitely produce high imitation of real sound, lead audience fall deeply into the story of the movie and forget the actually world. Besides, the experience that surrounded by other people who share the same happy and nerves is incomparable.

However, watching movies at home through TV or computers, which serves as an alternative way of watching movies in a cinema, has already flourish in common live and been adopted by many movie fans. The popularity of this access is reasonable since watching films at home maintains most qualities and shinning parts of movies. After the arrival of golden time of data world, people are able to view all latest movies at home with the help of Internet and DVD. Though the time when new movies are available in Internet or TV programs might delay a couple of weeks contrasting with the time played in cinemas, the main fun and key point of the movies still remain, including colorful images as well as the interesting plots and scenes. Moreover, for some people who could afford home theater equipments, the effects would even endow the home stay decision to defeat the noisy cinema.

Additionally, watching films at home introduces a more convenient and financial acceptable option for viewers that is why this choice is far more appealing than the cinema. For instant, after a long period of time on study, children could sit in their warm coach and drink their favorite milk at home while enjoying the amazing fight between Harry Potter and Voldemort in Harry Potter 7th through Internet-based TV programs without paying extra money. As one can see, there is no terrible traffic to travel, no expensive fee to pay, no long queue line to wait. Would anybody say no to this economic and easy way of watching movies?

In conclusion, I believe that many people could enjoy themselves in the cinema, but it is staying at home that emphasis and exaggerate all the fabulous factors of watching movies.

sun3mayUID：2574771

2.10独立
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henryguowencongUID：2992585

There is a public controversy about whether the individual have the ability to take care of environmental issue. A(The?) majority of people think the environmental problem is too vague and abstract to be solved by each single person. They claim that it is the job of government(s) as well as the environmental institution to(to改成that) concern about the healthy of our planet. However, I believe that individuals could produce strong power to deal with this tough task, and they should be aware of this undeniable duty.

Admittedly, the environmental issue is really a wide and endless problem in human history（，） which could not be ignored by any aspect（s?） of our society. It involves with(with是不是可以去掉？) kinds of pollution including（这个including貌似没什么必要，建议把各种pollution具体化，比如：water shortage） air, water, sound pollution, saving natural energy resources as well as protecting endangered animals. In order to improve the environment condition, groups of scientists or institutions have been working on it for many years. They try to understand the rule of nature, decode the mystery of environmental balance, invent new environmental friendly equipments. A lot of efforts have been done, but the key of solving this big problem is still hold in the hands of individual.

In fact, environment issue is (a)huge problem (,which)could only be fixed with the efforts of individual since the decision of individual determines(decisions made by individuals determine...) the trend of environment. The environmental issue is not so undefeatable as it seems to be once every individual is willingly to take the responsibility to face the problem(建议替换掉problem) directly. Take the limited energy resources for example. Many countries and regions are trying their best to eliminate the alarm of shortage of natural energy through finding new（去掉new） alternative ways to get（建议换词） power or cutting down the quantity of supplement. But it is the individual that is the prominent power and strength（power=strength，换掉其中一个） during this process. Only if they follow the instructions and polices, replace traditional energy resource into alternative one, could the speed of exhausting natural resource be reduced to an acceptable level.

Meanwhile, though the function of each element in the ecology system is pretty complex and delicate to be understood, but the way to promote the environment condition（这里可以换一种说法了：improve...） into a better level is simple and easy for individual to follow. Due to the fact that environment surrounding us has a close relationship with human being’s every movement and behavior（movements and behaviours）, it could be relieved, to some degree, by individual’s daily conduct. Whether one is aware of it or not, every individual could deal with environmental issue through some small action, such as dividing the waste into different groups for recycle use, reducing the quantity of water usage at home positively. Sometimes, even by providing a bleeding young bird a nest to stay for(去掉for) a couple of days may be beneficial to enlarge the number of the whole specie. To every common people, fighting with environmental issue is just as simple as this.

In conclusion, the theory of the environment issue is undoubtedly not easy to analysis, while the individual could still take some simple steps to protect our world: take serious attitude with the global challenge, think the interest of animals and plants first before each action, leave enough resource to next generation for them to survive. Deep down, I trust that individual’s effort could change the world.

总体上是不错的：一些用词比较准确，语句没有大的问题

提两点意见：一是一些重复出现的词语需要替换；二是时态上的变化比较少，通篇以....is....居多，显得单调了

加油！