【独立写作】 同题作文写作之【版主点评】

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一楼：点评标准
二楼：文章目录
三楼：具体文章点评

一切点评，回归OG:
因此，一楼的内容给OG，

How essays are scored?
Prerequisite: Do not write just to be writing; write to respond to the topic.

写作不仅仅是敲键盘，看着字数统计琢磨还要憋出多少话，谨记，写作时，有着回归题目，自行检查的意识。

Three principles:

Development
Development is the amount and kinds of support (examples, details, reasons) for your ideas that you present in your essay.
Uses a lot of words but fails to develop any real ideas;

发展任何论点，都回归内心的想要表达的观点。你的观点是什么，就应该选择什么样的写作纹路。

Organization
Be aware that just using transition words such as first or second does not guarantee that your essay is organized. The points you make must all relate to the topic of the essay and to the main idea you are presenting in response.

组织任何文章，都认真理理你的论据与论点如何搭配。不是用形式上的first, second, third...就可以说明逻辑清晰，框架清楚。

Language

不多说。只一句，输出大于输入，不，应该是，输出大大地大于输入。

多说一句，这里的点评，虽是针对某位版友的文章，不妨仔细看看，借他山之石，臻攻玉之境。

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哇！好酷！学习中

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先mark，上完课再回来看，谢谢楼主!

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