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Issue38 “In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books.”

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1 It is true that television is a popular approach to learn nowadays
2 Yet in most cases book is always an important form of learning.
3 Secondly, different people who read the same book will have the different views to its content

The author claims that book is not as important as it once was because of television’s appearance. While I agree that television is a useful and important way to learn, in my view it would be a mistake to ignore the advantage of book and negate its value.

It is true that television is a popular approach to learn nowadays because it provides various approaches to us and makes the information more visual and comprehensible. Television provides us with a rich and colorful world, which we never find only in book, and makes our lives more happy. For example, children who still study in the school are fond of watching TV very much. Another example is that television is used in remote education, which let people who are not in school share school’s resource.

Yet in most cases book is always an important form of learning. On one hand, book is the best way to express the theories and formulas systemic, especially science. For example, if a scientist advocates a new theory, he will write a book or a paper but not use the television. Book can express theory more comprehensively by using various tools, such as words, chart and so on. On the other hand, book can hold the author’s original mean at all. That is an important reason to why people like to use book to transmit the knowledge generation to generation. Today we realize the circumstance and events which happened before by reading the books which written before.

Secondly, different people who read the same book will have the different views to its content. Every book will give a broad space to people to imagine, which is not like the television. For instance, if we read a story, we all usually have our own realizations to the story and have our own imaginations about the story, also imagine different dramatics personae in our brain. Television just reflect some people’s views who direct the movie, and the audience just have to accept it at all. For example, when we go to see a movie, we only find the thoughts what the director wants to express. Though we have any other different ones, we just have to accept it.

In sum, no matter how fast the society develop and no matter how large change exist in our daily life, reading book is always an important way to learn, forever.
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The author claims that book is not as important as it once was because of television’s appearance. While I agree that television is a useful and important way to learn, [however, ] in my view it would be a mistake to ignore the advantage of book and negate its value.

It is true that [+watching] television is a popular approach to learn nowadays because it provides various approaches to us and makes the information more visual [vivid] and comprehensible. Television provides us with a rich and colorful world, which we never find only in book, and makes our lives more happy [happier]. For example, children who still study in the school are fond of watching TV very much [最好在fond前加very,去掉very much] [这个不够贴切,因为孩子们看电视很多时候都不是为了学习]. Another example is that television is used in remote education, which let people who are not in school share school’s resource. [第二个例子可以]
[本段论证没有成功的展开,vivid and comprehensible 应该用节目之类的例子展开,然后再说它的rich and colorful]

Yet in most cases [+reading] book[+s] is always an important form of learning. On one hand, book [it] is the best way to express the theories and formulas systemic[+ly], especially science. For example, if a scientist advocates a new theory, he will write a book or a paper but not use the television. [+Because] Book can express theory[ies] more comprehensively by using various tools, such as words, chart and so on. On the other hand, book[+s] can hold the author’s original mean[+ing] at all [thoroughly]. That [which] is an important reason to [-to] why people like to use book[+s] to transmit [pass on] the knowledge [+from] generation to generation. [+So] Today we realize the circumstance and events which happened before by reading the books which written before [in the past].

Secondly, different people who read the same book will have the [-the] different views to its content. Every book will give a broad space to people to imagine, which is not like the television. For instance, if we read a story, we all usually have our own realizations to the story and have our own imaginations about the story [有点罗嗦,直接用and连接realizations and imaginations,或者如果想长一点就试试用not only, but also], also imagine different dramatics personae in our brain. [+Whereas] Television just reflect some [certain] people’s views who direct the movie, and the audience just have to accept it at all. For example, when we go to see a movie, we only find the thoughts what the director wants to express. Though we have any other different ones, we just have to accept it.

In sum, no matter how fast the society develop and no matter how large change[+s] exist in our daily life [lives], reading book[+s] is always an important way to learn,  [maybe] forever.

[楼主的文章中存在的最大问题是句子之间的衔接稍显不足,总的来说论证还算充分,加油阿!]

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