Issue51 [infinity小组]第十九次作业

mayaUID: 199038

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 595          TIME:50min          DATE: 2006-7-14
Position：大正小负，基本赞成作者观点，但有局限
1、        interest的重要性
2、        开发学生的兴趣能够更有效的提高教学质量
3、        社会发展限制了教育针对每个人的需要而开设课程
The most important function of education in any level is to develop personality of individual and significance of one's life to oneself and to others. This is the basic architecture of a life; the rest is to ornamentation and decoration of the structure. Concerning the relationship between teachers and students, the statement asserts that only when it is especially designed to satisfy each student's needs and interests, education will be truly effective. I concede that the aim of education is to cultivate students' aptitudes based on their own needs and interests and therefore finally accommodate with the society. However, the speaker has overemphasized the needs and interests of students toward the efficiency of education. In my view, while the teachers should do their best to satisfy students' needs and interests, the most important cares which they take is for students' future life.

Interest, the best teacher of students, which can be found in everyone' heart and mind, is used to encourage and therefore dig out the uncovered and potential ability and talent. Whether the interest should be considered more among teachers who designed disciplines to students is an inherently query concerning the students' development. In retrospect well-known humans included in any field, their experiences of success are more often than not their enduring fascination in their own area. What is the secret contained in their energetic fascination toward their discovery or invention? The answer is interest. Consider, for example, the invention of light bulb, created by Thomas Edison through almost 1,800 experiments for finding the proper material, has offered vital convenience for people. What is the secret beyond his success? I believe it is the transaction from interest to practice. Although people always said that if you want the hits, be prepared for the misses, thousands of misses cannot guarantee anyone to hold lasting energy used in the invention. It is the interest which has helped such scientists to go on the way to success.

Interest help teacher to truly understand and realize their students' potential talent. After all，each student has his own characteristic which cannot be explored by a common teaching method or discipline. As it stands, schools have responsibility to satisfy every individual's needs and interests. For instance, Einstein is an ordinary student when he is a child and is educated by the normal disciplines, but finally with the publication of his theory of relativity everyone has memorized his name. The mystery in his success is also the interest. Using this tool, Einstein found what is his favorite subject and can do all his life on it. In this case, it is likely that the only way to cultivate individuals is to satisfy their any needs and interests, yet the answer is not so simply.

As we all know, the development of society is relied on everyone's contribution and creation. No matter what the interests and needs required by individuals, education has no time and spirit to consider most on this issue. What they can do is find an optimal means to best cultivate their students. If they pay more attention on the issue of whether the designed disciplines should meet everyone's needs, education would overlooks more problem, such as educational function of generalization for individuals and further, talents are contained in few particular ones.

In conclusion, the most effective way to educate students is to satisfy each one’s needs and interests, while this is an impossible mission owing to considering the most of people’s interests. Only paying attention to students’ needs and interests would provide chaos for the whole society.

mayaUID: 199038

恩，可能我自己过于敏感了。就是看着挺熟的
没关系，只要是自己写的就好了，加油！经常来光顾

satinaUID: 2198271

回maya，thx for your kindly help and constructive advice~~
嗯，句子的确如你所说，需要再细看语法，还有例子的准确性我也没把握好。谢谢你的提醒，最后几天我得努力了
另外，你说在哪里见过的那几个句子，我的确是自个写得，文章里面没有一句是引用别人的话，除非是别人的文章看多了，可能自然而然就流露出来了八~~~这一点我还是有把握的，雷同非同小可，支持原创！
谢拉~~

mayaUID: 199038

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 755          TIME: 0:44:53          DATE: 2006-7-15

There exists a hotter and hotter issue as to whether education would 被动prove to be truly effective by means of being specifically deigned to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.Indeed,I consider 用个concede要好一点interest as a main contributor to students' success in a specific field and propose that when educating students,instructors should take it into account.But at the same time,too much emphasis on the importance of interest and individual needs will provoke some problems in the process of education.


Firstly,It is widely acknowledged that interest,regarded to be the best teacher in one's learning process,functions as the stimulus in digging out students' specific gift as well as encouraging students in overcoming whatever obstacles they meet in the process of acquiring knowledge.History is replete with examples in different fields that can illustrate the giant power of interests.One need look no futher than one of the greatest,if not the greatest musician and composer in the music development这句话可能我有点浅薄，看的不是很懂，后半句if not是什么意思？,Beethoven我也用了这个例子，呵呵。不过确实不太好，人都用烂了. Astonishingly,he created his most famous music,the well-know Chorus,with completely deafness.Then how did he do this?It is the crazy love and interest toward music that supports him not only in sparkling shining ideas but also in challenging his doomed fate这句话我好像哪里看过，是不是背的？如果是背地最好还是改一下，难免判了雷同.In today'stoday和contempory重复了 contemporary society,there are also many talents who can not bear the great loads of studying and transform to the fields they are gifted in.No example than Bill Gates can better illustrate this.Consider,if he hadn's given up classes in Harvard and set up his own business in the realm of computer,can he achieve the same great success in some subjects he considers to be boring？Bill Gates这样论证不太好，过于假设了。你自己也不清楚如果他上学了将来会不会更有生就。应该着重在他对电脑有强烈的兴趣身上以至于满足不了课堂所教的知识而退去。不然不是很有说服力.From these come the realization？ that everyone has a potential in a certain field and only by bending oneself in whatever attracts him most can he get some rewarding experience as well as enjoy the happiness of success.

Given the great power of interests in the process of education,to teach students and evaluate them under the completely same standard will not only impede them on the road to success but also cause some serious problems语法好像有点问题.Today's more competative world has put a heavy burden in students' shoulder.They must gain the high social status by gaining knowledge and assuming some social responsibility.However,learning without the power of interest can be totally exhausted and make students' frustrated to deal with the large amount of work你好像比较喜欢用这样的定于从句，不过最好还是把限定词加上，to which the teachers have assigned them their teachers have assigned them to do.The problem such as plagiarism might evaporate from this kind of dislike or even hatred toward learning这句好像也见过，还是一样注意雷同.In order to turn in the paper in which field the students' haven't mastered very well due to their dislike of them,they have to paraphase from other sources.These small behaviors may form into habit,transforming the students into a totally dishonest citizen and even persons who will carry out some illegal deeds.Some more serious and striking problems such as hurting teachers,self-destuction and even suicide might also appeare if the form of education remains too solid.These possibilities all occure to warn the stuff of education to take measures to change the traditional system of education.最后一句总结不如说提出的措施主要就是要根据学生个人的兴趣和需要来设置课程，这样更能紧扣你的观点

However,it is impossible for education to meet everyone's needs,at least to some extent.There're这样的缩写总是不习惯，好像很少看到这样用，和前面的hasn't一样，你再看看范文，在我印象中这和cannot一样，是一种习惯性的用法 two main points for my illustration.Firstly, applying different ways and materials to every different student means a need of a large number of teachers,great sum of money spent on education and some other subjective prerequisite for doing so.This is impossible in today's world especially in some relatively poor contries.What the teachers can do is only to try themselves to design the classes as to satisfy the majority of students,if not all ,instead of making the class boring for all students.Secondly,students, especially some young ones,haven't got the ability to distinguish what they have skills and interests in.In this case,some fundamentally designed subjects,say,the basic compulsory subjects,functions not only in shaping the students' primary value system so as to figure out who they want to become but also equip them with some required abilities when they step into the real society.Amoung  this subjects,Maths serves as enhancing students' ability of logical thinking,language fuctions as the fundamental tool for communication,liberal arts teach students how to read,write,speak intelligently as well as becoming a well-rounded person with the ability to appreciating beaty in everyday life.The importance of these classes may be preluded？excluded？ignored？ if too much emphasis has been put in individual interests.

In sum,given the significance of interest,truely effective education should try to design some measures in order to meet the majority's demand.Nevertheless,we shouldn't put overdue priority to different needs of different people due to some subjective reasons as well as its potentially bad effects.Education should strike a happy balance as to fully develop students.
整个的内容确实挺足的，45min写750已经很厉害了。逻辑、扣题方面都不错。我就提点小问题：1、有些句子似乎是背的，小心被判雷同；2、大家普遍的问题，类似这样的文章都写烂了，包括我在内；3、你用的长句子太多了，以至于到后面都有点糊涂了，我就没有细看语法，不过好像存在一些问题。最好长短结合，这样你自己也好把握；4、不要特意的模仿老外的文章，很难驾驭，有些用法你用的不是很专业

苯石UID: 2169611

ISSUE51, 17和144是我看到写得最多的了.

satinaUID: 2198271

也是刚刚写完这一篇,似乎是个超高频,大家有空也拍拍.thx
TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 755          TIME: 0:44:53          DATE: 2006-7-15

There exists a hotter and hotter issue as to whether education would prove to be truly effective by means of being specifically deigned to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.Indeed,I consider interest as a main contributor to students' success in a specific field and propose that when educating students,instructors should take it into account.But at the same time,too much emphasis on the importance of interest and individual needs will provoke some problems in the process of education.


Firstly,It is widely acknowledged that interest,regarded to be the best teacher in one's learning process,functions as the stimulus in digging out students' specific gift as well as encouraging students in overcoming whatever obstacles they meet in the process of acquiring knowledge.History is replete with examples in different fields that can illustrate the giant power of interests.One need look no futher than one of the greatest,if not the greatest musician and composer in the music development,Beethoven. Astonishingly,he created his most famous music,the well-know Chorus,with completely deafness.Then how did he do this?It is the crazy love and interest toward music that supports him not only in sparkling shining ideas but also in challenging his doomed fate.In today's contemporary society,there are also many talents who can not bear the great loads of studying and transform to the fields they are gifted in.No example than Bill Gates can better illustrate this.Consider,if he hadn's given up classes in Harvard and set up his own business in the realm of computer,can he achieve the same great success in some subjects he considers to be boring.From these come the realization that everyone has a potential in a certain field and only by bending oneself in whatever attracts him most can he get some rewarding experience as well as enjoy the happiness of success.

Given the great power of interests in the process of education,to teach students and evaluate them under the completely same standard will not only impede them on the road to success but also cause some serious problems.Today's more competative world has put a heavy burden in students' shoulder.They must gain the high social status by gaining knowledge and assuming some social responsibility.However,learning without the power of interest can be totally exhausted and make students' frustrated to deal with the large amount of work their teachers have assigned them to do.The problem such as plagiarism might evaporate from this kind of dislike or even hatred toward learning.In order to turn in the paper in which field the students' haven't mastered very well due to their dislike of them,they have to paraphase from other sources.These small behaviors may form into habit,transforming the students into a totally dishonest citizen and even persons who will carry out some illegal deeds.Some more serious and striking problems such as hurting teachers,self-destuction and even suicide might also appeare if the form of education remains too solid.These possibilities all occure to warn the stuff of education to take measures to change the traditional system of education.

However,it is impossible for education to meet everyone's needs,at least to some extent.There're two main points for my illustration.Firstly, applying different ways and materials to every different student means a need of a large number of teachers,great sum of money spent on education and some other subjective prerequisite for doing so.This is impossible in today's world especially in some relatively poor contries.What the teachers can do is only to try themselves to design the classes as to satisfy the majority of students,if not all ,instead of making the class boring for all students.Secondly,students, especially some young ones,haven't got the ability to distinguish what they have skills and interests in.In this case,some fundamentally designed subjects,say,the basic compulsory subjects,fuctions not only in shaping the students' primary value system so as to figure out who they want to become but also equip them with some required abilities when they step into the real society.Amoung  this subjects,Maths serves as enhancing students' ability of logical thinking,language fuctions as the fundamental tool for communication,liberal arts teach students how to read,write,speak intelligently as well as becoming a well-rounded person with the ability to appreciating beaty in everyday life.The importance of these classes may be preluded if too much emphasis has been put in individual interests.

In sum,given the significance of interest,truely effective education should try to design some measures in order to meet the majority's demand.Nevertheless,we shouldn't put overdue priority to different needs of different people due to some subjective reasons as well as its potentially bad effects.Education should strike a happy balance as to fully develop students.

苯石UID: 2169611

The most important function of education in any level is to develop personality of individual and significance of one's life to oneself and to others. This is the basic architecture of a life; the rest is to ornamentation and decoration of the structure. Concerning the relationship between teachers and students, the statement asserts that only when it is especially designed to satisfy each student's needs and interests, education will be truly effective. I concede that the aim of education is to cultivate students' aptitudes based on their own needs and interests and therefore finally accommodate with the society. However, the speaker has overemphasized the needs and interests of students toward the efficiency of education. In my view, while the teachers should do their best to satisfy students' needs and interests, the most important cares which they take is for students' future life. [从定义function of education到引出论点, 中心段的作用达到了]  

Interest, the best teacher of students, which can be found in everyone' heart and mind, is used to encourage and therefore dig out the uncovered and potential [potential就够了.] ability and talent. Whether the interest should be considered more among teachers who designed disciplines to students is an inherently query concerning the students' development. In retrospect [逗号] well-known humans [figures] included in any field, their experiences of success are more often than not their enduring fascination in their own area. What is the secret contained in their energetic fascination toward their discovery or invention? The answer is interest. Consider, for example, the invention of light bulb, created by Thomas Edison through almost 1,800 experiments for finding the proper material [materials for what? 不是很明确] , has offered vital convenience for people. What is the secret beyond his success? I believe it is the transaction [交易? 用法有争议. 是不是transition] from interest to practice. Although people always said that if you want the hits, be prepared for the misses, thousands of misses cannot guarantee anyone to hold lasting energy used in the invention. It is the interest which has helped such scientists to go on the way to success.

Interest help [helps] teacher to truly understand and realize their students' potential talent. [为什么?] After all，each student has his own characteristic which cannot be explored by a common teaching method or discipline. As it stands, schools have responsibility to satisfy every individual's needs and interests. For instance, Einstein is an ordinary student when he is a child and is educated by the normal disciplines [TENSE, 句中用过去时] , but finally with the publication of his theory of relativity everyone has memorized his name. The mystery in his success is also the interest. Using this tool, Einstein found what is his favorite subject and can do all his life on it. In this case, it is likely that the only way to cultivate individuals is to satisfy their any needs and interests, yet the answer is not so simply [simple] .

As we all know, the development of society is relied on [relies on] everyone's contribution and creation. No matter what the interests and needs required by individuals, education has no time and spirit to consider most on this issue. What they [who are they? 前句是education] can do is [(to)] find an optimal means to best cultivate [这个次用得不错] their students. If they pay more attention on [to] the issue of whether the designed disciplines should meet everyone's needs, education would overlooks more problem, such as educational function of generalization for individuals and further, talents are contained in few particular ones. [关于为什么不能满足每一个学生的兴趣, 论证的不够]

In conclusion, the most effective way to educate students is to satisfy each one’s needs and interests, while this is an impossible mission owing to considering the most of people’s interests. Only paying attention to students’ needs and interests would provide chaos for the whole society.

这个主题有不少G友都上传了, 可以参考一下.
that'a all.

我的ISSUE147:　https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... type%26typeid%3D101

mayaUID: 199038

恩，有道理，谢谢
常来啊

satinaUID: 2198271

以我之见
在讲第三个观点时,可以说一下过分强调interest会导致的后果，比如缺少基础能力~~
学生又是缺少一种辨别自己强项的能力。
可以排比说几门基础学科。数学serve as。。。。语言（文科）fuctions.....音乐或基础艺术enhance the ability of.....体育help students in ......这样字数和说服力都会提高了

eachwangUID: 2157619

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 595          TIME:50min          DATE: 2006-7-14
Position：大正小负，基本赞成作者观点，但有局限
1、        interest的重要性
2、        开发学生的兴趣能够更有效的提高教学质量
3、        社会发展限制了教育针对每个人的需要而开设课程
The most important function of education in any level is to develop personality of individual and significance of one's life to oneself and to others. This is the basic architecture of a life; the rest is to ornamentation and decoration of the structure. Concerning the relationship between teachers and students, the statement asserts that only when it is especially designed to satisfy each student's needs and interests, education will be truly effective. I concede that the aim of education is to cultivate students' aptitudes based on their own needs and interests and therefore finally accommodate with the society. However, the speaker has overemphasized the needs and interests of students toward the efficiency of education. In my view, while(感觉多余了） the teachers should do their best to satisfy students' needs and interests, the most important cares which they take is for students' future life.

Interest, the best teacher of students, which can be found in everyone' heart and mind, is used to encourage and therefore dig out the uncovered and potential ability and talent. Whether the interest should be considered more among teachers who designed disciplines to students is an inherently query concerning the students' development. In retrospect well-known humans included in any field, their experiences of success are more often than not their enduring fascination in their own area. What is the secret contained in their energetic fascination toward their discovery or invention? The answer is interest. Consider, for example, the invention of light bulb, created by Thomas Edison through almost 1,800 experiments for finding the proper material, has offered vital convenience for people. What is the secret beyond his success? I believe it is the transaction from interest to practice. Although people always said that if you want the hits, be prepared for the misses, thousands of misses cannot guarantee anyone to hold lasting energy used in the invention. It is the interest which has helped such scientists to go on the way to success.

Interest help teacher to truly understand and realize their students' potential talent. After all，each student has his own characteristic which cannot be explored by a common teaching method or discipline. As it stands, schools have responsibility to satisfy every individual's needs and interests. For instance, Einstein is an ordinary student when he is a child and is educated by the normal disciplines, but finally with the publication of his theory of relativity everyone has memorized his name. The mystery in his success is also the interest. Using this tool, Einstein found what is his favorite subject and can do all his life on it. In this case, it is likely that the only way to cultivate individuals is to satisfy their any needs and interests, yet the answer is not so simply.（Einstein的论据过于普遍了，感觉大家都在用这一个论据）

As we all know, the development of society is relied on everyone's contribution and creation. No matter what the interests and needs required by individuals, education has no time and spirit to consider most on this issue. What they can do is （to） find an optimal means to best cultivate their students. If they pay more attention on the issue of whether the designed disciplines should meet everyone's needs, education would overlooks more problem, such as educational function of generalization for individuals and further, talents are contained in few particular ones.

In conclusion, the most effective way to educate students is to satisfy each one’s needs and interests, while this is an impossible mission owing to considering the most of people’s interests. Only paying attention to students’ needs and interests would provide chaos for the whole society.

句子和语法无可挑剔，读起来也挺流畅的，但是观点和论据还是太平凡不过了，其实我也一样，所以这样的高频题，拿高分还是比较难的，除非能够有比较新意的观点和论据。

sweet_fruitUID: 2190845

Issue51 [infinity小组]第十九次作业

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 595          TIME:50min          DATE: 2006-7-14
Position：大正小负，基本赞成作者观点，但有局限
1、        interest的重要性
2、        开发学生的兴趣能够更有效的提高教学质量
3、        社会发展限制了教育针对每个人的需要而开设课程
The most important function of education in any level is to develop personality of individual and significance of one's life to oneself and to others. This is the basic architecture of a life; the rest is to ornamentation and decoration of the structure. Concerning the relationship between teachers and students,(这句像是背景,可是我感觉和后面的句子关系不大,不如去掉) the statement asserts that only when it is especially designed to satisfy each student's needs and interests, education will be truly effective. I concede that the aim of education is to cultivate students' aptitudes based on their own needs and interests and therefore finally accommodate with the society. However, the speaker has overemphasized the needs and interests of students toward the efficiency of education. In my view, while the teachers should do their best to satisfy students' needs and interests, the most important cares which they take is for students' future life.（这句没看懂）
（开头我的感觉，呵呵，太罗嗦了，比后面的body3还要长。I concede完全可以去掉）

Interest, the best teacher of students, which can be found in everyone' heart and mind, is used to encourage and therefore dig out the uncovered and potential ability and talent. Whether the interest should be considered more among teachers who designed disciplines to students is an inherently query concerning the students' development. （没有看懂，兴趣应该多被老师考虑？）In retrospect well-known humans（persons） included in any field, their experiences of success are more often than not（more often than not是一个短语，就是often的意思） their enduring fascination in their own area. What is the secret contained in their energetic fascination toward their discovery or invention? The answer is interest. Consider, for example, the invention of light bulb, created by Thomas Edison through almost 1,800 experiments for finding the proper material（created by TE是状语后面再跟一个介词短语不可以吧）, has offered vital convenience for people. What is the secret beyond his success? I believe it is the transaction from interest to practice.（？没看明白） Although people always said that if you want the hits, be prepared for the misses, thousands of misses cannot guarantee anyone to hold lasting energy used in the invention. It is the interest which has helped such scientists to go on the way to success.

Interest help（helps）teacher（s） to truly understand and realize their students' potential talent. After all，each student has his own characteristic which cannot be explored by a common teaching method or discipline. As it stands, schools have responsibility to satisfy every individual's needs and interests. For instance, Einstein is an ordinary student when he is a child and is educated by the normal disciplines, but finally with the publication of his theory of relativity everyone has memorized his name. The mystery in his success is also the interest. Using this tool, Einstein found what is his favorite subject and can do all his life on it. In this case, it is likely that the only way to cultivate individuals is to satisfy their any needs and interests, yet the answer is not so simply.
（前面两个body都在说兴趣的重要性，应该有句话总结的呀，一下又过渡到另一个TS上，没办法适应 ）
As we all know, the development of society is relied on everyone's contribution and creation. No matter what the interests and needs required by individuals, education has no time and spirit to consider most on this issue. What they can do is find an optimal means to best cultivate their students. If they pay more attention on the issue of whether the designed disciplines should meet everyone's needs, education would overlooks more problem, such as educational function of generalization for individuals and further, talents are contained in few particular ones.
（maya噢，你的观点是什么呢，前面花了很多笔墨在interest上，但是提到education的很少，也没有写到satisfy needs and interests与effective education的关系）

In conclusion, the most effective way to educate students is to satisfy each one’s needs and interests, while this is an impossible mission owing to considering the most of people’s interests. Only paying attention to students’ needs and interests would provide chaos for the whole society.
过来看一下这一篇，她的观点基本与你一致，但我的感觉她写的很扣题。
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... light=%2Bhappypearl

看完了说一下你的观点,我也不知道怎样才是合适的,:confused:

[ 本帖最后由 sweet_fruit 于 2006-7-16 10:14 编辑 ]