【Daily Writing作文特训小组】by 神探夏洛克 作业贴 作业在一楼

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
The best way for parents to teach their children about responsibility is to have them care for animals.

20:30
When we discuss about the important role of the parents in the children's education, we can say parents are the first mentor of their children, hence the idea of parents being the best teacher. BuT, the parents should never focus excessively on one thing during education the children. Why? Because there are many essential aspects contributing to some certain ability such as responcibility,which can hardly be replicated only by caring animals.

First, I have to admit taking care of animals is supposed to definitely enhance and strenghten the responsible sense of the children. For instance, when the children take care of a dog, they have to keep in mind to feed it regularly,if not, the dog will be very hungry, even dead after a long time with no food. Besides, if the dog get sicked, the chilren should prepare medicine, change fresh water and provide nutritious food for it.

However, caring animals posses many disadvantages for the children during the process of caring animals. At such young ages, self-control is quite limited. Even at home, under the supervision of their parents, the chilren are naughty and patientless. It is not difficult to conceive that part of the children, alone at home, would forget to take care of the animals and beat them, if they have ever indulged in the computer games and their uncertain temper.On the other hand, the animals may bite the children if the children confront them.

Moreover, responsibility will never be completely formed only by taking care of animals. It is not uncommon to know that responsibility consists of many aspects such as to shoulder ourselves'social duty , respect other private things, love our family memebers etc. The act of caring animals may just inhibit the process in developing other aspects of responsibility. Therefore, the parents should enrich different types of  things for the children, encourage them to be a volunteer for the community, say "Thank you" to the ones who have ever helped them, and never be too curious about other 's privacy.

In sum, I fudementally disagree with the argument  that taking care of animals is the best way culvate the responsibility of the children , though it is reasonable in some sense.

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秋雨荆州UID??2903781

HI~欢迎加入写作小组~
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神探夏洛克 发表于 2012-6-11 22:40
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
The best way for parents to teach ...

mikejason2005UID??3261124

during education the children这个表达是对的么？要么education of the children 要么educating the children。
replicated表意似乎有些不明确，可以换成obtained
For instance, when the children take care of a dog, they have to keep in mind to feed it regularly
可以换成
When the children take care of a dog,for instance,they have to keep in mind to feed it regularly
插入语更华丽
the dog will be very hungry, even dead after a long time with no food这句事态不同意啊，前面是will 后面又dead了。。应该换成die。那个中间的逗号有点让人误解，在意思连贯的地方把句子分成两截了。建议逗号换成or
if they have ever indulged in the computer games and their uncertain temper
沉迷于电脑游戏和他们的难以预料的性格？
confront 意思不明确把。。换成maltreat虐待。
The act of caring animals may just inhibit the process in developing other aspects of responsibility. 、
inhibit禁止太绝对了，换成deny延误可能好点，还有process of doing sth.不是in
the parents should enrich different types of  things for the children表意不明确，丰富什么things for children?找个具体的名字替换

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秋雨荆州 发表于 2012-6-14 09:40

谢谢秋雨斑竹~

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mikejason2005 发表于 2012-6-14 13:11
during education the children这个表达是对的么？要么education of the children 要么educating the child ...

谢谢！学习了！

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Recently,we have so many sources of news and information, so that we can not tell which one is the real one or who is telling the truth.

17:40
In modern society, getting the fresh and stimulating information and current affairs, which serve as our major source for people to keep on the pace with the times rather than to be a outmoded person, becomes more and more essential and indispensable in our lives. Far too often, some people worried about the authority and authenticity of the sources under the information explosion. But, the problem can be easily eschewed.

First, I have to admit that people are facing a serious problem in deciding to choose the source of information. Within several decades, the rapid developing technology enables almost every person to get access to the internet conveniently. But it is just the vividness that aggravates the media environment. For instance, A gossip that Britney Spears is an addict to drug will be quickly dispersed and shared from the internet to newspapers. You can’t really discern whether it is true or not.

However, the overwhelmed information and news exert very little,if any, impact on the truth and reality. Fundamentally, people can avoid the problem by making a judge of the media source rather than taking all information's truth for granted. For example, these traditional eminent companies and presses such as the BBC, CNN and Reuters are always the better choice than some small-scale companies. And some websites like economist, times, new yorker are perfect complement.

Further, a subjective censure of the news will definitely diminish and inhibit the effect of the fake and false news. When it comes to a new suspicious news, the critical judge holds the keys to the most important process. If the news disobey the common sense, such as the newest the sunset will happens in the 5.am, it is not difficult to conceive the unreal news. Moreover, a comparison between different sources of the news is an alternative method.

In sum, I think the worry of the issue that the large amount of information will confuse the public is bootless, for it can easily be solved by the patient and carefulness.
18:42

liang0603UID??3182007

lz你把错误的单词改改，我无法深入了解你的意思，我改了一半。。。之后，实在很难下手哇。。。。希望理解哈。可以你改完了错误单词再发给我，我再继续改。

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liang0603 发表于 2012-6-15 11:40
lz你把错误的单词改改，我无法深入了解你的意思，我改了一半。。。之后，实在很难下手哇。。。。希望理解哈 ...

好的~~昨天写完忘记搞word检查了~

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liang0603 发表于 2012-6-15 11:40
lz你把错误的单词改改，我无法深入了解你的意思，我改了一半。。。之后，实在很难下手哇。。。。希望理解哈 ...

单词已经改好了，麻烦重新修改一下~

liang0603UID??3182007

lz加油！

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6.14 revised by nova

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一起加油吧~~