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黛丝丝丝丝 发表于 2014-12-8 22:44
response指出这个建议的不可行性，作为我反对题目的一条论点。

但这个response是对 学校鼓励学生追求高收入职业，是出于好意 的回应。总感觉有些奇怪。首先这个compelling reasons could be used to challenge my position 就不怎么compelling,难道本意是好的，那就应该这么做吗？ 其次，回应中表明这个建议并不可行，并不是对“出于好意”的直接回应。 有点难以理解你这个栗子。

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maoerdwn 发表于 2014-12-8 23:02
但这个response是对 学校鼓励学生追求高收入职业，是出于好意 的回应。总感觉有些奇怪。首先这个compelli ...

首先我承认这肯定不是一个特别好的例子，我跟simon老师主要是在探讨【让步段】的写法。
因为有时候我们写着写着觉得自己可正确了简直就是真理之神，这个时候很难想得到一个例子来反驳自己。
那么一种折中方式就是把自己的三个支撑点其中一个，拐到对立面来写，更加契合题意一些。

回到这个段落。
我的逻辑是
（虽然出于好意）学校鼓励高收入职业--->学校鼓励的这件事情并不具有普及意义--->学校行为不成立
所以我要反对的，仍然是这个措施，'出于好意'这件事情无法反驳啊，只是让文章缓和一些而已啦。

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-20 15:20
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大家好，刚开始写作，看了王老师117楼对于evidence evaluate 类型写作指导的回应方法，正好分到的任务是这个要求，所以上传全文，请王老师和大家多多批评，谢谢！！！

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78) People’s attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

11:22  

The society as a whole, the attitudes of individuals towards different issues and the immediate situation or environment interact with one another to create the complex human experience as we know it. In my opinion, our attitudes are fundamentally shaped by the society through education, media and government policies which also, to a large extent, determine the situation and surroundings in which we find ourselves.  

Education is an important social institution that determines our attitudes as well as our social environment. Take the simple example of priority seating in public transportations. As schoolchildren, we learned the social etiquette of offering our seats to those in need, e.g. pregnant or sick passengers. Such practices are encouraged in our education based on the golden rule: “Treat people the way you want to be treated.” Our attitudes towards our fellow passengers are shaped by this belief developed through education. Meanwhile, the society would also make sure the environment reflects the same principle that is consistent with our attitudes. Priority seats are clearly marked in buses and subway trains to remind us this social etiquette.  In other words, the society would first shape our attitudes and then design our environment that would facilitate the related practices.  

Our attitudes are also determined by the society via the mass media and the corporates. This is particular true in today’s consumer-oriented society. Through extensive advertising campaigns, we are brainwashed into the belief that we need all the luxurious products and services to be happy. We come to believe that our value as human beings is determined by the material goods we buy as advertised in the media. Meanwhile, the society would shape our environment in such a way that shopping and buying these items are effortless. The Amazon’s 1-click ordering, for example, enables the online shoppers to place their orders with just one click without even confirmation.  Such arrangement in our surrounding, along with the advertising and promotion in the media, reinforces the attitudes we hold towards consumption.  

Finally, the society may also influence our attitudes through government policies. In recent years, gay marriages have become increasingly acceptable in American and European societies as the governments have adopted more lenient policies towards the civil unions or marriages of homosexual couples.  Despite the fierce opposition from certain social groups, the public attitudes towards gay marriages have gradually changed from hatred or reluctance to acceptance.  On the other hand, the changes in government policies also stimulate the industries for gay romance and wedding.  New products and services become increasingly available for homosexual couples to celebrate their relationships and bondings.  Again the social environment would respond to the shift in government policies and public attitudes.

In conclusion, I do not believe that our attitudes towards different issues are determined by our immediate surrounding. Rather, our attitudes are shaped by the larger society through institutions such as education, media and government, which, at the same time, would shape our social environment and make sure that it is in harmony with our attitudes and behaviours.

11:49

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老师太棒了！很想知道 老师是如何提升语言水平的

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Argument 114 116 117

The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.

"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

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In the memo, it is argued that Buzzoff should be selected over Fly-away as the pest control service provider to reduce pest damage.  In order to assess the conclusion, we need more evidence about the past performance of the two companies, the two warehouses and detailed costs of pest control and projected loss.

It is over simplistic to conclude that Buzzoff is more effective in pest control than Fly-away based on the fact that the loss at Buzzoff site is smaller than the warehouse served by Fly-away.  One important factor to consider is the total value of the goods stored in the two warehouses.  With this information, we can then calculate the percentage of loss relative to the total value and assess the effectiveness of the two pest control services.  Another issue we need to consider is the different kinds of pests and food found in the two warehouses.  Maybe Fly-away has lost more goods simply because the pests they need to handle are more challenging or the food is more vulnerable.  More detailed comparative analysis is needed before drawing a conclusion.

In addition, it is inadequate to compare just one month’s record of servicing one warehouse.  To get a more comprehensive picture of the competence of the two companies, we need to review the pest control records of the two companies in the past 10-20 years.  We should get as much data as possible about how the two companies performed in pest control in order to predict the loss of food caused by pest if a given company is hired.

Finally, we also need more precise information about the pricing of the two companies and other costs such as human resources required to cooperate with the companies.  With more detailed information about the prices and other costs, along with the predicted loss, we can then decide which company could provide the least costly services.

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新人报名，正在英国留学，已经考过4次GRE，作文三次3分，一次3.5，丢死个人了:L
时间：2015年1月17日
地点：英国曼彻斯特

还请各位G友多多指教！:handshake

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王老师好，我所有的提纲链接如下：

Issues:

“[备考小组] ISSUE42.Students should always question what they are taught instead of ...”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1790278-1-1.html

“[备考小组] 14年秋季GRE提纲 Issue 43”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1786572-1-1.html

“[备考小组] issue 44/75/84 regarding living men and women as heroes”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1792105-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Issue 45(138)-Competition for high grades limits the quality of learning”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1790333-1-1.html

“[备考小组] issue 48 teach facts after studying related ideas, trends and concepts”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1792106-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Issue49 (76,118) We can usually learn more from people whose view we share”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1787023-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Issue 50- Government should rely on their own judgement ”（已写全文）
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1790349-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Issue51 Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1791313-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Issue53-If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it are justifiable.”（已写全文）
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1791062-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Issue 54-Well-rounded, all college students, imaginative literature courses”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1790917-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Issue 55-work of art, merit, be understandable to most people ”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1790920-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Issue 56 Many important discoveries or creations are accidental ”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1791761-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Issue 57- benefit of the study of history is to dispel the illusion”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1790930-1-1.html

“[备考小组] ISSUE 58 Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline; students cannot”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1790316-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Issue 59 researchers should focus on areas that benefit most people”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1785726-1-3.html

“[备考小组] ISSUE 61People should undertake risky action only after”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1790323-1-1.html

“[备考小组] 14年秋季提纲互改小组-issue62”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1780266-1-1.html

“[备考小组] issue 64 Human minds always superior to machines”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1791228-1-3.html

“[备考小组] 秋季提纲互改小组-Issue65”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1778363-1-2.html

“[备考小组] 14秋季提纲互改小组—Issue 66”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1786263-1-6.html

Arguments:

“[备考小组] argument 46”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1790350-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 48 Clearview - a top choice for retirement”（已写全文）
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1791927-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 50 evaluate the effectiveness of lavender pillow to cure ”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1792946-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 53/144/151 healthful lifestyles manifested through survey on eating hab”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1793250-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 54.Humans arrived in the Kaliko Islands about 7,000 years ago”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1790330-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 55 sales of video game will rebound based on survey of player preferenc”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1793822-1-1.html

“[备考小组] argument 56/57/82 use patented tech for producing durable socks a waste of time”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1791132-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 59,he following appeared in a memo from the president of Bower Builders”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1790331-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 60/145/146/150/154/155 invest in Consolidated Industries in retail sale”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1794613-1-1.html

“[备考小组] 2014年秋季提纲互改小组-Argument 162”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1777376-1-1.html

“[备考小组] argument 62 121 122 124The following appeared in a memo from the director of a l”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1789946-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 63 discontinued youth-league sports due to injuries, psychological pres”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1795248-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 64 life-size sculpture will decrease in value and miniatures increase i ”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1795422-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 65 provide more seating to increase popularity of Stanley Park”（已写全文）
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1795642-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 68 hospital introduce adopt-a-dog program to help patients with heart problems”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1796241-1-1.html

“[备考小组] argument 69/70/115 recommend Zeta over Alpha for building projects due to lower”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1791131-1-4.html

“[备考小组] Argument 71 introduce car pooling program to ease traffic”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1796488-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 72 downsizing has caused economic hardship among workers or not”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1796635-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 73 Mozart Schoo of music should be the first choice given its open admi”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1796833-1-1.html

“[备考小组] Argument 75 price regulation for milk to ensure fair prices for consumers”
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1797067-1-1.html


尚未写全文的那几个题目中，哪些可以写全文了，请王老师告知学生我一下，谢谢！

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64) The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.


value judgment - search engine
emotion - robot nurse
creativity - corpus linguistics  



With the advancement in electronic engineering and artificial intelligence, machines embedded with microprocessors have become increasingly intelligent with the abilities to perform a wide variety of tasks that only humans could perform in previous decades.  Some people predict that in the foreseeable future machines will become smarter than humans as the speed of CPU increases exponentially.  I believe that human mind will always be superior to machines because of our abilities of making value judgment, processing information emotionally and creating new ideas.  

To begin with, human minds will always surpass machines in making decisions because we can make judgment based on our experiences and value systems.  When we read a book, for example, we can not only process the information presented in the book through reading comprehension. We can also decide how valuable the information is relative to the books or other materials we have read before.  This ability of making value judgment is almost impossible for machines to learn because developing a value system of human minds is a cumulative and mysterious process that we do not understand very well. Therefore, it is very difficult to build a machine to emulate this ability. In fact, the search engines such as Google rely on the human judgement on the value of webpages to find the most relevant information for each search.  In other words, machines can always be used to keep track of the value judgments made by human minds; but they cannot make the judgements themselves.  

Another important function of human minds that machines can hardly develop is the ability to process information emotionally. Digital computers are built based on sophisticated mathematical models that are efficient in processing information logically and rationally. But when it comes to information that involves human emotion, the logical approach to information processing cannot go very far.  For example, with built-in high-resolution camera and microphone, a machine can be used to monitor a baby and alert the parents when the baby cries. Maybe with more advanced technologies in natural language processing, one can even build a robot to interact with a baby, understanding its rudimentary language and talking back a bit.  But it would be impossible for a machine to interact with the baby at emotional level, e.g. to understand the body language of the baby that carry infinite amount of emotional information that only the parents can possibly comprehend.  Again, machines such as baby monitors can help human minds to collect certain information but can never replace human care providers.  

Finally, human minds have the ultimate ability of creating new ideas that machines cannot develop even with the most advanced algorithms.  Take the process of writing academic papers as an example. With the Internet and the database technologies, scholars nowadays can access numerous journal articles that form the basis for writing new articles.  But scholars also need to identify the gap in the literature and develop research ideas to pursue through rigorous research projects before they can write up a report as a journal article. Some people have invented tools like SCIGen to create journal articles automatically. But this tool can only generate articles based on published works that are not original and do not contribute to the process of knowledge construction.  

In conclusion, it is clear that in the foreseeable future machines can never overtake human minds in making decisions and creating new knowledge because we humans have the unique capabilities of making value judgments, processing information emotionally and thinking creatively.  

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The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.

"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average.”

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

According to the article, Clearview is an ideal place for retirement for a number of reasons. We need more information about Clearview to decide if this is indeed the case.  

To begin with, more evidence is needed to decide if the natural beauty and the consistent climate are suitable for retired people. For one thing, we need to know how accessible the natural beauty is in Clearview. If the natural beauty can only be enjoyed through hiking trips that are physically demanding, the place would not be very attractive for senior citizens. Also, being consistent in climate may not be good enough for life after retirement. As the elderly are often vulnerable to colds and common flu, it is important for have a mild climate. If Clearview has consistently inclement winters, one has to think twice before choosing it for retirement.

The author points out that the housing prices have fallen and taxes are lower than towns nearby.  But we also need to know the exact prices of the kinds of housing suitable for retired people and the tax rates that are applicable for people who are about to retire. Maybe the housing prices, despite the recent fall, are still unaffordable for the elderly. Or perhaps, even though the average housing prices in Clearview have decreased, the apartments for elderly had not become inexpensive.  Also, it is possible that taxes in Clearview are particularly heavy for retired people living on pension.  Therefore, we need more detailed information about Clearview tax system to decide if it is financially reasonable to move to Clearview for retirement.

The promises made by Clearview Mayor have to be regarded with some skepticism. It is easy for politicians to make all sorts of promises. But when it comes to materialize the promises, the mayor may have to persuade the local legislators for the funding.  We need to know if the mayor has a good relationship with the local legislator and whether the city government can afford the proposed new programs. Of course, we also need to look into the programs to see if they are actually relevant to the retired people.  If the programs are oriented to children or young people, Clearview would not be very attractive, either.

Finally, the above-average number of physicians is meaningless unless we take into account the number of people living in the region.  We need to calculate the physician-patient ratio to assess the availability of physicians. In addition, to better evaluate the quality of health care for retirees in Clearview, we need to look beyond the number of physicians in the area. We need information about a host of factors that would affect what level of health care a retiree can expect in Clearview. For example, among the physicians in the region, how many are experts in areas that the elderly are more likely to need care.  If more physicians in Clearview are paediatricians or gynaecologist, it would not be very helpful. On the other hand, if Clearview has a large number of gerontologists, maybe it is worth considering. Also, we need to know how expensive it is to see the doctors. It is pointless to have a large number of physicians if their services are not affordable.

In conclusion, information about Clearview as discussed above has to be collected to decide if the argument is convincing or not.

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2) To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

development and use of technologies

commercial activities

education system  

和116楼合并

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80) Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

10:56
The argument that funding for arts is not justifiable given the problems of hunger and unemployment is not reasonable when we consider the contribution of the funding to job creation, the little difference the funding could make to solving the problems and the long-term social benefits of arts.  

To begin with, the government funding for the arts can help create jobs that may alleviate the problems of unemployment and hunger. For example, when the government finances the construction of an art museum, it will create numerous jobs in buildings industry and help stimulate the local economy. With a stronger economy, the government can then receive more tax money to provide benefits for the society, including those suffering from poverty and hunger. Once the museum is built, it will further create more jobs, including those that require low-level skills, e.g. security guards.  The low-income people will then benefit from the project and these people are more likely to help those who suffer from poverty as they often come from the same socioeconomic class.  

In addition, this recommendation is not helpful when the problems of unemployment and hunger are so severe and widespread that the amount of funding for arts is insignificant, if not trivial, relative to the efforts required to address the problems. I do not have any quantitative data to present a more precise analysis. But intuitively it is safe to believe that we need far more resources to help those suffering from hunger and unemployment for which the funding for arts would not make much difference. In addition, we need to recognise that the problems of unemployment and hunger are not simple matters that can be solved with money alone. There are a host of institutional and economic problems causing unemployment and hunger that suspending funding for arts can barely help address.  

Finally, we should not overlook the long-term, unobtrusive benefits of arts for solving social problems such as unemployment and hunger. For one thing, people who are unemployed may find it helpful to spend some time in an art museum and find some emotional comfort in the art works. Government funding for such art projects would benefit unemployed people who may find hope and strength to move on in their lives. Meanwhile, art projects may address fundamental issues in human nature such as greed and anxiety that are the ultimate causes of unemployment and poverty. While funding for such projects may not help the unemployed or hungry people immediately, the art works may direct more public attention to the related issues and contribute to the development of long-term solutions.  

In conclusion, it is naive to assume that suspending the funding for arts can solve the problems of unemployment and poverty. In fact, government-funded arts have important short-term and long-term benefits for addressing both problems.  

11:16  

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赞，2015年4月11日，北京，求一起考的战友

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救世之帖啊，我这几天就看你啦。