Issue51 教育类，修补版（又超时了...）

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Issue51: 408 words  40 minutes
Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.

With the soaring development of science and technology, education, long recognized as the primitive source and impetus for societal advancement, has won more and more attraction. Among all the issues around education, the debate on which kind of education is really effective is one being most discussed. While some people insist that a true effective education can only be achieved by designing the courses specially adapting to each student's need and interest, I whereas prefer the opinion that the principle for designing courses should vary according to the stage of education.

To begin with, it is unpractical and even harmful to design courses specifically to meet various students' needs and interests in elementary and secondary school. Due to the immaturity of their thoughts, not all pupils could identify where their real interests lie. Out of the inborn curiosity and limited knowledge of the world, it is more probable for them to change their so-called interests quite swiftly and easily. They may firstly show an admiration to beautiful paintings, but then quickly be attracted to a piano. t is common to hear pupils proudly claiming they dreams of becoming scientists in the future, but how many of them really do? In such a stage when neither educator nor the students themselves could not accurately decide their true interests, how could we expect the specially-designed curriculum for every student will be effective? Maybe the courses specially-designed to meet their preference that was momentarily showed will actually limit their potential developments in other fields and thus mask their true interests.

Further more, many of the basic courses and moral courses, which are of vital importance both in fulfilling the educational goal and in leading the students to further study, should be learned by all students in this stage, with no respect to their interest or inclination. As is known to all, such basic subjects as mathematics, physics and chemistry are the basis for most students in their further study. For example, to learn computer, basic knowledge on both mathematics and physics are needed, the former essential in software developing and the latter indispensable in researching hardware. Similarly, a broad range of fields, from geography, biology to ecology are built on the basis of chemistry. If purely listening to the students’ opinion in deciding the curriculum, these courses may be ruled out by many students because they appear bald and unappealing. Clearly, this will by no means benefit their further development. Similarly, the moral courses, which aim to teach the students correct ethical and moral standards thus to help them form healthy personality, are also should be learned by all.

However, when it comes to higher education, such as college and university education, then a specifically-arranged course list for each student is helpful and beneficial to achieve a better effect of education. Generally speaking, students in this stage almost have conceived maturely about their real interests and future plans, and after years of indoctrination, they have already formed their own personality. Then in this stage, providing facilitates for their pursuing of personal interests is much more important. Interest is the best teacher and in one’s interested fields it is more probable for fruits to yield. Our history is replete of such examples. Without interest in astronomy, Copernicus, who was initially studying medicine, could not prompt his heliocentric cosmology. Without loving in drama, Shakespeare, an unnoticeable worker, could not become the most famous dramatist.

Therefore, in a word, to effectively achieve the true goal of education, designing different courses in respect of different education stages, in which students' maturity in both personality and knowledge largely vary, is undoubtedly a better choice than laying stubborn principles on all schools.

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With the soaring development of science and technology, education, long recognized as the primitive source and impetus for societal advancement, has won more and more attraction. Among all the issues around education, the debate on which kind of education is really effective is one being most discussed（这句话感觉有问题）. While some people insist that a true effective education can only be achieved by designing the courses specially adapting to each student's need and interest, I whereas prefer the opinion that the principle for designing courses should vary according to the stage of education.

To begin with, it is unpractical and even harmful to design courses specifically to meet various students' needs and interests in elementary and secondary school. Due to the immaturity of their thoughts, not all pupils could identify where their real interests lie. Out of the inborn curiosity and limited knowledge of the world（of the world 删掉？）, it is more probable for them to change their so-called interests quite swiftly and easily. They may firstly show an admiration to beautiful paintings, but then quickly be attracted to a piano. It is common to hear pupils proudly claiming they（their） dreams of（are） becoming scientists in the future, but how many of them really do（really insist their interests?）? In such a stage when neither educator nor the students themselves could not accurately decide their true interests(what are the pupil’s’ true interests), how could we expect the specially-designed curriculum for every student will be effective? Maybe the courses specially-designed to meet their preference that was momentarily(that was momentarily showed删掉，在preference 前面加一个 temporary？) showed will actually limit（hinder） their potential developments in other fields and thus mask their true interests.

Further more, many of the basic courses and moral courses, which are of vital importance both in fulfilling the educational goal and in leading the students to further study, should be learned by all students in this stage, with no respect to their interest or inclination.（把定语从句放到后面第二句说，TS简洁一点比较好） As is known to all, such basic subjects as mathematics, physics and chemistry are the basis for most students in their further study. For example, to learn computer, basic knowledge on both mathematics and physics are needed, the former essential in software developing and the latter indispensable in researching hardware. Similarly, a broad range of fields, from geography, biology to ecology are built on the basis of chemistry. If purely listening to the students’ opinion in deciding the curriculum, these courses may be ruled out by many students because they appear bald and unappealing. Clearly, this will by no means benefit their further development. Similarly, the moral courses, which aim to teach the students correct ethical and moral standards thus to help them form healthy personality, are also should be learned by all.（最后的 ethical 的例子最好还是扯上学生会不感兴趣或者忽视了）

However, when it comes to higher education, such as college and university education, then a specifically-arranged course list for each student is helpful and beneficial to achieve a better effect of education. Generally speaking, students in this stage almost have conceived maturely about their real interests and future plans, and after years of indoctrination, they have already formed their own personality. Then in this stage, providing facilitates for their pursuing of personal interests is much more important. Interest is the best teacher and in one’s interested fields it is more probable for fruits to yield. Our history is replete of such examples. Without interest in astronomy, Copernicus, who was initially studying medicine, could not prompt his heliocentric cosmology.（哥白尼原来是学医学的啊：），这个例子好） Without loving in drama, Shakespeare, an unnoticeable worker, could not become the most famous dramatist.

Therefore, in a word, to effectively achieve the true goal of education, designing different courses in respect of different education stages, in which students' maturity in both personality and knowledge largely vary, is undoubtedly a better choice than laying stubborn principles on all schools.

结构很好，最好在第二段也强调一下是针对中学生和小学生，这样和第一段联系的更紧密一下。
语言很好，ADMIRE 中，每次都不敢改你的作文，对自己的自信是个打击：）

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zhan~~~
楼上的别激动.每年的NBA冠军赛学校都把期末考试举行的同样如火如荼,我都不知道忍了几年我

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[B]zhan~~~
楼上的别激动.每年的NBA冠军赛学校都把期末考试举行的同样如火如荼,我都不知道忍了几年我 [/B]

我不看米兰，我看蓝军，哈哈~~

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蓝军不行，没有底蕴的球队，除了当年古力特再的时候关心过一阵，后来就没有感觉了，不喜欢：）别生气啊：）

不过米兰和蓝军真的应该会在决赛相遇的，到时见啦！

本来应该是我的米兰和拜仁会师决赛的，可惜了啊！

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MM组合，期待姚明，当然还要看我的Tracy McGrady（T-MAC），不过不得不承认，有了姚明，麦迪的季后赛梦想才不显得那么缥缈，谢谢姚明！！！

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早上和掘金的比赛可真是过瘾啊！

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Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.

With the soaring development of science and technology, education, long recognized as the primitive source and impetus for societal advancement, has won more and more attraction. Among all the issues around education, the debate on which kind of education is really effective is one being most discussed. While some people insist that a true effective education can only be achieved by designing the courses specially adapting adaptedto each student's need and interest, I whereas prefer the opinion prefer the opinion有点怪怪的 that the principle for designing courses should vary according to the stage of education.

To begin with, it is unpractical and even harmful to design courses specifically to meet various students' needs and interests in elementary and secondary school. Due to the immaturity of their thoughts, not all pupils could identify where their real interests lie. Out of the inborn curiosity and limited knowledge of the world, it is more probable for them to change their so-called interests quite swiftly and easily. 这里写得好They may firstly show an admiration to beautiful paintings, but then quickly be attracted to a piano. t is common to hear pupils proudly claiming they dreams of becoming scientists in the future, but how many of them really do? In such a stage when neither educator educatorsnor the students themselves could not 不要notaccurately decide这个词用在这里不好 their true interests, how could we expect the specially-designed curriculum for every student will be effective? Maybe the courses specially-designed to meet their preference that was momentarily showed will actually limit their potential developments in other fields and thus mask their true interests.
maybe 后面可以另起一段。？后面围绕你这一段的中心总结就好了。       

Further more, many of the basic courses and moral courses老米肯定会纳闷什么是moral courses, which are of vital importance both in fulfilling the educational goal and in leading the students to further study, should be learned by all students in this stage, with no respect to their interest or inclination. As is known to all, such basic subjects as mathematics, physics and chemistry are the basis for most students in their further study. For example, to learn computer advanced computer skills, basic knowledge on both mathematics and physics are needed, the former essential in software developing and the latter indispensable in researching hardware. Similarly, a broad range of fields, from geography, biology to ecology are built on the basis of chemistry. If purely listening to the students’ opinion in deciding the curriculum  这个句子的语法有没有问题？我不太清楚啊, these courses may be ruled out by many students because they appear bald and unappealing. 衔接有问题Clearly, this will by no means benefit their further development. Similarly, the moral courses, which aim to teach the students correct ethical and moral standards thus to help them form healthy personality, are also should be learned by all.

However, when it comes to higher education, such as college and university education, then a specifically-arranged course list for each student is helpful and beneficial to achieve a better effect of education. Generally speaking, students in this stage almost have conceived maturely about their real interests and future plans, and after years of indoctrination, they have already formed their own personality. Then in this stage, providing facilitates？ for their pursuing of personal interests is much more important. Interest is the best teacher and in one’s interested fields it is more probable for fruits to yield. Our history is replete of such examples. Without interest in astronomy, Copernicus, who was initially studying medicine, could not prompt his heliocentric cosmology. Without loving in drama love for drama Shakespeare, an unnoticeable worker, could not become the most famous dramatistdrama writer
有中文的痕迹。举的例子不好，虽然可以从某种程度上说明兴趣的作用，但是离大学教育，有点远，换一个离我们更近更实际的例子可能合适些。.

Therefore, in a word, to effectively achieve the true goal of education, designing different courses in respect of different education stages, in which students' maturity in both personality and knowledge largely vary, is undoubtedly a better choice than laying stubborn principles on all schools.
加油罗。
要想火箭季后赛有戏唱，再等三年。

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[B]要想火箭季后赛有戏唱，再等三年。[/B]

MM打击人！

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MM打击人！

就是他们保的了现在第5(6?)的位置到季后赛,碰到狼啊马刺什么的,我估计也得下课~~~