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fishjoyUID: 2116013

218."In order for any work of art— whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people."
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Should it be understandable to most people in order for any work of art— whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, as the speaker asserts? I think this assertion is wrongheaded. The speaker regards understandability as a primary reason for works of art having merits constrainedly. Whether a piece of art have merit should be determined by its internal value instead of the extent to which people understand it.


Should it be understandable to most people in order for any work of art— whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, as the speaker asserts? In my opinion, a piece of art which is understandable to most people does not inevitably have merit. An immortal piece of art could be understandable as well as abstruse to the public.

I concede that manifold pieces of art which have merit do show a friendly face to the public. A piece of art can be valuable as well as understandable. Take folksongs for example. No one would deny that folksongs which record people’s feelings, emotions and wisdoms and are enjoyed by most people are great treasures which we inherit from our ancestors. Another compelling example is Mark Twain, a famous humor writer whose works is profoundly deep in thought but represented in a humor way that caught readers’ eyes immediately. His works were popular at that time, and still receive good comments today, and will continually be appreciated by future generations undoubtedly.


I concede that manifold pieces of art which have merit do show a friendly face to the public. Take folksongs for example. No one would deny that folksongs which record people’s feelings, emotions and wisdoms and are enjoyed by most people is great treasure which we inherit from our ancestors. Another compelling example is Mark Twain, a famous humor writer whose works is profoundly deep in thought but represented in a humor way that caught readers’ eyes immediately.

However, a great deal of pieces of art which is popular with the public have so little merit that they become history relics very soon. We can pick up Hollywood hot films for example. The hot spots of those Hollywood films always consist of attractive actors and actresses, amazing scenes and old love stories. Few producers would consider having artistic value involved since the former three factors appeal to the public adequately. In fact, last month’s films of Billboard NO. 1 which covered most newspapers’ first pages might have been out of people lives this month completely. And so it is with mass-market books. Anyone who frequents second hand sales knows that today’s best-selling books often become tomorrow’s pulp.


However, a great deal of pieces of art which is popular with the public have so little merit that they become history relics very soon. We can pick up Hollywood hot films for example. The hot spots of those Hollywood films always consist of attractive actors and actresses, amazing scenes and old love stories. Few producers would consider having artistic value involved since the former three factors appeal to the public adequately. In fact, last month’s Billboard films which covered most newspapers’ first pages have been out of people lives this month completely. And so it is with mass-market books. Anyone who frequents second hand sales knows that today’s best-selling books often become tomorrow’s pulp.

Moreover, large quantities of works of art reveal great values, although they are not that understandable to most people. One can not refuse to admit the greatness of a piece of art for the ridiculous reason that he or she can not fully understand it. Without artistic expert’s explanations, the common people might think that Picasso’s paintings are no more than doodles. If one never lives in Britain and knows nothing about it, he or she might consider Eamily Bronte’s novel “Wuthering Heithts”nonsense since he or she can not understand the essence of the novel. But such obscurity does not prevent Picasso’s paintings and Eamily Bronte’s novel “Wuthering Heithts”from being valuable cultural heritage. In other words, understandability can not determine the greatness of a piece of art.

Moreover, large quantities of works of art reveal great values, although they are not that understandable to most people. One can not refuse to admit the greatness of a piece of art for the ridiculous reason that he or she can not fully understand it. Without artistic expert’s explanations, the common people might think that Picasso’s paintings are no more than doodles. If one never lives in Britain and knows nothing about it, he or she might consider Eamily Bronte’s novel “Wuthering Heithts”nonsense since he or she can not understand the content of the novel. But such obscurity does not prevent Picasso’s paintings and Eamily Bronte’s novel “Wuthering Heithts”from being valuable cultural heritage.


Furthermore, the greatness of a piece of art should be decided by its internal value, not understandability. Some forms of art are for us to appreciate, such as painting, sculpture and music. It is ridiculous and impossible for us to “understand” those art forms. Only by evoking our admirations, feelings, emotions and imaginations can a piece of art match a great fame and be considered having merits. Some forms of art can be understanded fully only by standing in artists’ angle, such as literature. Once one know something about the Britain of 18th century, it is no longer a problem for him or her to fully understand the greatness of Eamily Bronte’s novel “Wuthering Heithts”.

To sum up, whether a piece of art has merit has nothing to do with whether it is understandable to most people. A piece of art which is understandable to most people does not inevitably have merit, while an abstruse piece of art might represent great merits inside. Understandability would never replace the essence of a piece of art to be the dominant factor in judgment.

To sum up, whether a piece of art has merit has nothing to do with whether it is understandable to most people. A great piece of art, either understandable or abstruse, will never be forgotten by people.

ryanqUID: 154025

路过，改后的稿子，实在看不出什么不妥的地方，顶一下吧

polymathUID: 179557

很不错的说!加油!:)

polymathUID: 179557

只修改你的修改稿！:)

218."In order for any work of art— whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people."
说明：这篇是限时失败之作，完成花了1小时10分，又修改了1小时。原稿410个单词，修改稿617个单词。自我感觉论证有点肤浅，语言略显单调。我把原稿和修改稿都贴出来，给大家增添信心蓝字为修改稿，黑字为原稿。
Should it be understandable to most people in order for any work of art— whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, as the speaker asserts? I think this assertion is wrongheaded. The speaker regards understandability as a primary reason for works of art having merits constrainedly. 个人认为这样说比较好！In my view,the speaker's assertion that understandability as a primary reason for works of art having merits constrainedly is wrongheaded,and I contend thatwhether a piece of art have merit should be determined by its internal value instead of the extent to which people understand it.



I concede that manifold pieces of art which have merits do show a friendly face to the public. A piece of art can be valuable as well as understandable. Take folksongs for example. No one would deny that folksongs which record people’s feelings, emotions and wisdoms and are enjoyed by most people are great treasures which we inherit from our ancestors. 这个句子太长了！出现了2个are,2个which，开始准备判定为病句！建议拆成2句哈！Another compelling example is Mark Twain, a famous humor writer whose works is notprofoundly deep in thought but represented in a humor way that caught readers’ eyes immediately. His works were popular at that time, and still receivegain or achieve good comments today, and will continually be appreciated by future generations undoubtedly.


However, a great deal of pieces of art which is popular with the public have so little merit that they become history relics very soon. We can pick up Hollywood hot films for example. The hot spots of those Hollywood films always consist of attractive actors and actresses, amazing scenes and old love stories. Few producers would consider having artistic value involved since the former three factors appeal to the public adequately. In fact, last month’s films of Billboard NO. 1 which covered most newspapers’ first pages might have been out of people lives this month completely. And so it is with mass-market books. Anyone who frequents second hand sales knows that today’s best-selling books often become tomorrow’s pulp. 这一段论证的不错！


Moreover, large quantities of works of art reveal great values, although they are not that understandable to most people. One can not refuse to admit the greatness of a piece of art for the ridiculous reason that he or she can not fully understand it. Without artistic expert’s explanations, the common people might think that Picasso’s paintings are no more than doodles. If one never lives in Britain and knows nothing about it, he or she might consider Eamily Bronte’s novel “Wuthering Heithts”nonsense since he or she can not understand the essence of the novel. But such obscurity does not preventobliterate抹，削减 Picasso’s paintings and Eamily Bronte’s novel “Wuthering Heithts”from being valuable cultural heritage. In other words, understandability can not determine the greatness of a piece of art.


Furthermore, the greatness of a piece of art should be decided by its internal value, not understandability. Some forms of art are for us to appreciate, such as painting, sculpture and music. It is ridiculous and impossible for us to “understand” those art forms. Only by evoking our admirations, feelings, emotions and imaginations can a piece of art match a great fame and be considered having merits. Some forms of art can be understanded fully only by standing in artists’ angle, such as literature. Once one know something about the Britain of 18th century, it is no longer a problem for him or her to fully understand the greatness of Eamily Bronte’s novel “Wuthering Heithts”.

To sum up, whether a piece of art has merit has nothing to do with whether it is understandable to most people. A piece of art which is understandable to most people does not inevitably have merit, while an abstruse piece of art might represent great merits inside. 很好句子！学习学习！Understandability would never replace the essence of a piece of art to be the dominant factor in judgment.


总评：你的修改稿很不错啦！有理有据，堪成相当完美了！好好学习这篇文章！:D

fishjoyUID: 2116013

Originally posted by polymath at 2005-8-5 14:21
只修改你的修改稿！:)

218."In order for any work of art— whether film, literature, sculpture, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people." ...

谢谢polymath,感动ing

stephanie_wangUID: 2123182

whether a piece of art has merit has nothing to do with whether it is understandable to most people.---------总结全文，nothing -------little 如何？
the common people若表达普通人的意思---the ordinary  people

恩，一篇佳作~UP